Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: Action/Adventure, General, Romance
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Word count: 36343
Read Count: 4032
Um, the child thing already happened. It's known as Baby Parker, born via BrigitteReviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
Very well done. I'm also truly impressed by the length of your story, which allowed you to truly explore the characters, and tell a well rounded story.
There seems to be a small number of fics of this quality in this fandom, and I am so gald I was able to find yours. If the favorite stories area of this site actually worked, you would be listed with in mine.
Author's Response: *blushes* wow. thank you for those words. I'm glad you like it that much. if the favorites page doesn't work, do use the 'contact' button. I'm sure our lovely mod Jacci will take care of it if she can :)
Liked most of it, HATED the end. I don't like what you did to Sydney. He wouldn't have done that, EVER.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
Wow, how childish that you disabled PM's on your fanfiction.net account, you created JUST to reply to my fan fic. And how is a plot old and tired, when I wrote MINE back in 2001. Did you miss that part?
Oh, and the reason you don't see many positive reviews, is I have been reading fan fiction for years, I don't bother replying much any more. It takes something very good, or very bad for me to reply. The few great stories I found here, were before I had a confirmed account, so they aren't signed.
I also noticed I'm one of the few brave enough to post non-anonymous reviews here. I don't know where you got the idea that all reviews should be positive. That's never been the way these things work, nor should it. If your story sucks, you deserve to know. And Mary Sue's ARE considered the bane of fanfiction. Just google "fanfiction Mary Sue" and see what you get. Readers HATE Mary Sue's.
This is a...stupid story. By stealing Lyle's daughter from him, that makes Jarod no better than the Centre. You've now made Jarod, just as bad as those he professes to hate. Nice move.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
Needs a lot of work. Poor plot line, poorly written, especially the opening. You have no reasons behind the character's actions, and Jarod wouldn't be stupid enough to date someone, especially not a woman with a child. AND he takes jobs to help people, he wouldn't just abandon his chosen target.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
This should be posted in the Non-English section.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
Your plot seems jumbled, and thrown together. You're rushing things along, and half the time, it's hard to figure what's happening, or why character's are acting the way they are. On top of which, your characterizations are OC.
It's a great idea, but your execution needs lots of work.
Yeah, not one of my best.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
Self insertions, the only type of story that is LOWER than a Mary Sue. Shame so deep, your children and parents, and all you know, feel embarrassed by you.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
This has to be THE BEST fan fiction on this site. Bar none. I mean seriously! How many people even BOTHER to invest so much thought, time, plotting, and effort into writing a story anymore. Especially in this fandom, which seems so bereft of well written, unique, beautifully plotted stories.
It is definitely my favorite in the series as well, as it focuses on Jarod and Miss Parker. Debbie almost hijacks the rest of the series after the incident. Which would be my only complaint. (besides that minor error of switching Crystal and Cricket halfway through one of the later stories in this series, which is easily fixed.)
I truly hope you write another epic for Jarod and Miss Parker. Maybe one that gets them together sooner! (so they don't lose so much time that they could be together!)
I had to reset my rating scoring system, because THIS is a 10, and what I've read before definitely doesn't measure up.
Oh. My. God. You wrote a Mary Sue! Possibly a SELF-INSERTION Mary Sue! You should feel sooooo much shame. SHAME!!!Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
You've already got my unsigned review, but I want to make sure you know, that while I left a critique, hopefully you noticed that I gave it a rating of 8. I truly enjoyed the story, and was very impressed by the plot.
The idea of Miss Parker giving up her child, and any claim to it, for it's safety, and the safey of Jarod is such a beautiful idea. I am a Baby Parker addict, and I just wish there were more good, LONG stories out there about him, and his existence!
I will definitely add this to my re-read list of favorite fics. Nice job!
I liked it! Would have been better if Carly had shown up, cause Carly rules! (though she belongs with Jason. Always did, from the moment she came to PC...*sniff*) That said, I doubt anyone who wasn't so fond, and familiar with GH would really enjoy the story. You used the PC character's and locations too much. It's only due to my familiarity with the people and places that a lot of it made sense to me.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
People who write Mary Sue's...ugh. Shameful that you even had the audacity to post this. Ick.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
No, no man would sacrifice HIS DAUGHTER to let his colleagues live. Broots made it VERY clear in the first season, that his daughter came first. Her safety, was what enabled him to stand up to Miss Parker in the first place (and she scared the shit out of him).
Baby Parker is the baby Brigitte had, Season 4, Episode 9.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
Ok, I'm not reading ANY Of what you claimed in the summery, AND you stated this was completed.Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed
I adore this fic, ever since I first saw it on another site. It's nice to see Ethan traveling to find his sister for a change!
It's a wonderful story, and has been placed in my links, as a story to read again and again.
I love and adore this story. I truly wish the favorites section of the site worked, so this could be on my list.
Great job on the characterization, especially with Miss Parker. I will definitely be on the look out for more from you, and be reading this over and over agian. It's a fine example of what other authors should strive to produce.
It was Broots. It was awesome. He called up the hotel, pretending to be Sydney, doing a BAD imitation of Sydney's accent, and requested they be left on Miss Parker's pillow. He hangs up, acting all smug, the phone rings, and he answers hello in the accent, only for it to turn out to be Mr. Raines. LOL!Reviewer: AcaciaJules Signed