Oh my God!...*loooong sigh* I feel as tormented as Jarod right now. *chuckle* Why didn't they ever GET together?!!?
Like I thought: you didn't dissappoint me at all in this other story of yours. Wow! How you described J's feelings for and thoughts about MissP was just right to the point!Great job! Especially LOVED the beginning of the story when you described Jarod's image of MP and what he saw. I could just see it in front of my eyes...like a movie-scene (ok it WAS a movie scnes,but not all of it. so u know what I mean,aye?! ;-)
I could almost feel J's desire for her and how desperately he needed her. And felt his annoyance by the alarmclock ripping him out of that dream.
Very well written. Great character description. Was them 100%.
So thanks for that! :-)

-IceAngel

Goooood,that was beautiful!!!
Adored this story! The fact that Lyle wnats to kill off Parker seems veeery plausibel to me and that Raines doesn't mind is just plain logical. But the twist with an alive and kicking Daddy-dearest who also wants his Angel's death makes it all the better. Although I would've loved to see more action,scheming and angsty drama in this story until those 2 found their happy ending(which isn't a 100%-ending if u think about it...sequel in the making maybe? ;-)) I did enjoy it a lot!
I do think the whole story with Mr Parker showing up and all 3 bad guys wanting MissP's death while J and MP team up together to find their freedom and happiness holds a huge potential!
Loved your dream sequences in the first chapters and had a hard laugh at the J-MP-incident where she was throwing a 9iron at him >He wasn't that bad last night, was he?

hey there agaaain!

well that was one oh-so-sweeet chapter! usually it gets too sappy when J and  MP finally get it on. But again you didn't ruin anything but kept the essence of their character alive while moving them to the next romantic-level.

Loved the fact that MissP would use the same words she used years ago when she was a girl just before they kissed. somehow it just...fits.

So pllllease keep on the good work and continue this story soon. For I'm dying out of curiosity! ;-)

Just started with this story and again:wow! oh how I love your Parker descriptions! You're able to make her come to "life" like nearly no one else does. Amazing!
Especially liked this part:"She wouldn’t be Miss Parker if she sobbed. She does not. Her shoulder are perfectly still, her body does not move..". you're dead-on she wouldn't be MP if she sobbed. The way how u describe her outfits and everything: just so much fun to read. "The black creature she is...","She smooths the raven hair back with both hands and I can see her blood-red nails disappear and appear again in its mass."...*sighs* I can see her before my eyes...Thanks for that!
Laughed out loud at the "Are u on drugs?" comment. Fact that she doesn't just knocks him out for that one is proof enough that she snapped. ;-)
And loved the part wit her car being parked squarley across Broots' front yard.had a good laugh at that,too. So Miss Parker!hahaha!
can't wait to see what this story has in store for me. (turning over to chapter2)

uhh,nice dark and angsty...and saaad. I like it a lot! Paints the MissP character-picture swwwwell! ;-) Of course I would've expected nothing less from you. :-) Only thing that I (always) have trouble with is associating MissP with suicide. To me it just doesn't suit her...not even thinking about it. BUT after reading this story I wonder why I was thinking that way. You portait such a sad and indepth picture of her that it seems pretty plausible for someone in her position to pull the trigger. Really makes me re-think my view of her character a bit. Which, so far,no-one has accomplished who wrote a MP-suicide,or suicide-realted ff.
So GREAT job!!!

uuuhhh...excitiiiing. Want more pleaaaase. :-) Still reads like a great crime-thriller-book and I do love that! So many questions and twists.
Got a question though:
"Each day she'd spent in that cage and with Lyle had made her harder, another trial she’d survived, another brick in the wall and Jarod knew that she built that wall stronger with each passing day."
-->by "the cage" u mean her imprisonment by the Yakuza,right?! And the days with Lyle were those we still don't know much about and which apparantely happened at the Centre,right?!
Was Parker imprisonned at the Centre BEFORE Jarod infiltrated it with the FBI, or was that afterwards,when Lyle held her kinda hostage up in his office while trying to shoot Jarod?? (or can't u tell,coz then u'll give something away?) See,this is how great ur story is. I actually need to ask questions like that in order to put it all together. Feel like an agent myself,haha. This is so much fun!!!
Oh and was just shouting at my screen "No Parker don't do that!Stay with him!" Great cliff-hanger there. Do hope to see some romance in it as well though. But well,the longer the journey towards that goal, the sweeter the achievement of that goal will taste. ;-)
Oh yeah and enjoyed the slapping-Jarod part and that he actualy needed some time to recover from that hit. *chuckles* Well she IS known for knocking guys out. ;-p
Keep on the great work!!

Author's Response:

Hi IceAngel! Yes, you are correct. "The cage" was the Yakuza's doing. We don't yet know what transpired in the Centre with Lyle before Jarod rode in with the calvarly. And we don't yet know who planted the explosives that destroyed the Centre (killing Agents) druing the raid.

And yes, Parker was imprisoned by Lyle a year (or thereabouts) before Jarod organized the international take-down. It was during the raid that Lyle attempted to kill Jarod/ Lyle and Parker struggled for the weapon.

After the raid on the Centre (and the explosion) she was caputred by the Yakuza and caged.

I apologize that I was not more clear with my writing and believe me, you are not alone, I have to ask myself at times just what it is I'm doing. ;-) If you have any more questions, feel free to ask.

Thank you for reading and the lovely review. I do hope to read more from you soon Ice Angel.  :-)

hahaa! this was fun. ;-) although I just don't wanna picture Parker in such a shabby place liket hat strip/swinger/pervert club, I still kinda enjoyed that tempest-parker-scene,and especially lil' innocent Jarod's reaction to it.

Kinda got confused,however...why did they go to that place,and who was that "jeaneane" that got her arm dislocated?  It's getting all a bit confusing for me. But I still do love it and can't wait to read more!

Still am so eager to find out what happened to Lyle and what during that time when Parker was Lyle's prisoner....and why the hell she has such hardcore trust issues regarding Jarod (although her 'father' Syd calls him thewhite knight. ;-) )

Oh and thanks for that Parker emerging out of a bathroom amid hot steam scene. ;-)

oh-my-God! If this person really is Jarod I'm soooo curious about how you're gonna make Parker react. hahaaa! Always imagined that one had to feel sorry for the person Miss Parker would walk in on. *chuckles* But actually I just imagine her screaming "MY EYES, MY EYEEEES!!!" and running out of the room. ;-) Boy this is really something that makes me sick in my stomach. But not due to your writing!! Just the idea of Parker walking in on J having sex. *shivers*Very well written piece,as always. Like the less fast-action level you managed to create here. And the whole nightmare scene,almost kiss scene,Parker meeting her family thing...it's just a bliss to see those characters get some rest. (and then to let it end with such a BANG). Can't wait for more,as always.

Oh my God!...I just frickin' loved that!(..did I just write"frickin"??)

 This is deffinitely a 10! You managed to capture Lyle's insane side perfectly! Just how I always imagined him to be when he has Parker in his hands. He's such a wacko.. lmao. I honestly had to laugh out loud at his lunacy. Jumping from cold blooded tormentor to twisted horny ass to caring lover/brother "I'll show u my love". HAHA! How fucked up can one person be,eh!? And how weird am I for laughing about it? ;-p

It truly showed his insanity and twisted desire for his sister. The perfect way to describe it"he was excited by the prospect of breaking her, taking such a magnificent thing and bringing it crumpling helplessly to its knees". 100% to the point!

Also really liked J's reaction to the video. Hell I even had a headache from that Michael Patrick smashing MissP's head into the ground moment. (pour thing)

And then I just have to love you for making me admire MissP even more...if that is possible. ;-) She's so incredibly strong. Wow.But not to an impossible degree which would make her appear unhuman. You managed to make her bend by Lyle's will. Being slightly submissive where she had to be. Clearly she had no choice. But yet she isn't broken (at least not mentally ;-) and still has defiance in her. Even when she's pleading and sobbing. Dunno how u did that,but u made it happen. Incredible.

Hope to read more of those lyle-parker-scenes. And am really curious as to why Parker won't talk about Michael P's  whereabouts.

 Keep on the great work!! :-)

wohooooo! Atlantian Dream...u are such a naughty one...seriously! hahaha! I guess I kinda felt like MP while reading that chapter. The whole time I wsa like "nononooooo!!!"*hand over my eyes* but then I kinda liked it as well.tehehehe! Well for me it's weird...this whole possessive,she wants to be dominated thing. But u gave a good an intriguing explanation for that by 'Kate'. And I loved the end with "I'm gonna kill u!" and J just answering"Oh I know u will." hahaa!great one.

Author's Response: The naughtiness s just beginning! The next few chapters are just the warm up! Just wait and see!

Indeed not what I thought!Hahaha! Liked it a lot. Very intriguing,for I had no idea what her purpose was for calling a call boy if it wasn't for sex.
I wonder which tP-timeline this one might fit in. *pondering*
Made me feel pretty sad and kinda turned my stomach (emotinally,hence the sadness), because how lonely do you have to be in order to PAY someone for holding you through the night on your b-day?!? made me realize how extremely lonely MissP is and that turned my guts I guess. That she cannot allow someone to be that close to her,so she has to pay a stranger for it. Good...paying for sex sounds less "pathetic" (although I don't think she's pathetic at all in this story! just very lonely and in need for human closeness).
Enjoyed this a lot! nice touch to write from the boy's pov.
Although I know that u ususally don't have time to answer ur reviews: Where did that idea actually come from?

Author's Response:

Thanks for the great reviews everyone! I am glad you enjoyed the story!
The idea actually came when I watched an episode of "Damages". One of the main characters this season - which we are supposed to not like because he is working for the villains - is also a very lonely person. So snippets of his personal life and background appear in the episodes. One time, he was with a prostitute and asked her to be allowed to put his head in her lap and for her just to stroke his hair. I found that so endearing that when I watched the show again I had to think about how lonely and in need of human contact he must be. Well, and then the idea for a Pretender fic was immediately in my head. With the point with Miss Parker being that the person to hold her *must* be a total stranger because she doesn't want anyone she knows to get that close and see her weakness.

Ohh,something different .

HAHAAHAA! that was funny!tehehe. We adults are a dirty sort,aren't we?! A child would've never gotten the ambiguidty. Am glad I knew from the beginning that this wasn't with a sexual content (hence the rating), otherwise I'd have vomitted I guess. lmao

Thanks for the little entertainment! :-)

Oh my God!...I felt my stomach tighten with a dark foreboding in the end. Like it a lot! do like the idea of the bits of conversations between Thomy&Parker written in italic.A little glimpse we get into what might have been topics of discusison in their relationship. (always wondered how Parker explained her nightmares to Thomy as well)