TaDa!  It's finaly on Missing Pieces!  Excellent!  Great chapter Sarah and you really did this all on your own!  I like your characters and the way you wrapped up some of the 'missing pieces' (winks and throws chocolates and roses at Sarah's and her Muse's feet)

OK, now the big question is ... how am I to follow you????

Very nice start Anna.  So much more in keeping with Miss Parker's character then the story before.  Like it, esp. the 'chance' part.  Keep it up and I look forward to future chapters

Author's Response:

Hi RaChell!

That was such a quick review.  Thank you so very much.  Yes, I like the "chance" part, too.  I should be updating in the next few days.

Anna 

Your story is very angst and interesting so far Anna. If it were about other characters ... any other characters besides J/MP, I wouldn't have a problem with it.

But it's not in character with either Miss Parker or Jarod. (pounds head on key board) And I know from some of your past stories that Yes! you can write them in character and you can do it very well which is one reason I love your stories! (shakes head and wonders what happen to Anna! Maybe the Centre got to her and she's just been released from the Renewal wing)

So when I say I am disappointed in this story, it is because it doesn't stay in character. Other then that, I don't have a problem with it.  I like it as a story, just not as J/MP story however. And yes we all have stories which are a bit 'off' at times.

Chapter 4 is on the way!  Great!  That's what I was hoping to hear.

BTW thank you for your review of my story WB3.  Of course I do have to point out that neither Miss Parker or Jarod were in character in my story so I'll be a good girl and not say anything more about your characters' detour.

Did you just write:

"Hopefully, I'll be done by the end of this week." ??????

Excuse me but if you don't get busy and deliver another chapter soon, I'll send sweepers after you and make you sit with Angelo and watch those horrible monkey movies from the beginning of the episode "At The Hour Of Our Death" (season 3). Don't and I repeat, don't make me come looking for you!

Nice, verrry nice!  But don't stop here!

Author's Response:

Thanks! I'm not stopping, I’m just kinda stuck, again. My muse isn’t very cooperative lately.

Oh Anna!  You've out done yourself this time.  This is so sweet and sad.  Do I love it?  Of course I do!  Beautifully done and you can can see Jarod's face thru the whole story. And of course you get ten gold stars for this one.   Very nice.  I did say I say I loved it didn't I?

This one is very very sad and very well done.  And also very true for those who have this disease.  I hope this isn't written from personal experience.

Author's Response:

Hey RaChelle!

Thank you so much.  No, this wasn't written from personal experience.  Although, the part where Parker sits and is going through the motions of combing her hair actually was a real life scene which was told to me by a friend.  A friend of her mother would sit and do just that.  Only, she was  admitted into a pyschiatric ward.  It's sad.

Anyway, I think that's it for my sad fics for today.  I'll go back continue writing "Return To Me".

Talk to you later.

Anna 

Intense!  WOW!  Double WOW!  Sorry but a fic this dramatic needs more then a wimpy review.  Very good, no - excellant is more like it!

OK, I will hold you to that promise (wink wink) re:

I'l' be updating soon.

And I'm sure other people will too! Don't let us down or it'll be SL-27 for you! And no not even Angelo will rescue you.

 Oppps! I guess I should have checked the recent stories first before threating you.  OK, that was a nice little nibble but don't think you're out of the Centre  sublevels yet!  Chapter 4 is coming soon right?

Well I knew you had something up your sleeve but thsi wasn't what I had expected!  Nicely done with MP's emotions and sadness.  Very angst, very well done.  So when do we find out more! 

Author's Response:

Hi RaChell!

Thank you very much.  Glad you liked all that "angst".  I just posted another chapter.  Sydney might be a little bit out of character.  

Anyway, hope you like the next chapter.

Anna 

Hmm, another chapter that will be the last?  Anna, I hope you haven't forgotten your other story while you've been busy with this one.  If you have, I may need to send Sydney over there and have a long therapy session re: the lack of keeping promises and the failure to complete tasks. 

Should that fail then I'll be forced to resort to one of Lyle's best sellers on how to motivate pretenders as well as others who benefit from use of force/threat of force to complete Centre tasks.  (smirk smirk)  BTW, he's on the best sellers list you know. (wink, wink)  

Oh yes, you know I'd send Jarod but he seems to be involved with a mystery woman and her website which is in need of help at the moment.  

Nicely done and so in character too! I love the 'in control' Miss Parker who tries to think rationaly and the innocent fun loving side of Jarod who is so sponteous. Like the way you have Jarod's family responding to her (Miss P), esp. his mother. But best of all is Zoey ... can't stand her! Loved that part the best. Looking forward to seeing more of your story. Your Muse deserves chocolates and roses.

Edited to add:  And I am impressed with the way you have worked the scrolls and prophcies (sp?) into the story.  I'm curious what direction you are going in with that. 

Oh yes one more thing. Nicely done with Miss Parker's pregancey, I really dislike  (hate is more the word for it)   stories in which she is pregnant or she and Jarod have kids but this is one of the few exceptions.  You've been able to carry this off extermely well and I don't mind it at all. And that in it's self is saying a lot!