Very funny! I have to say I loved the line about Lyle aquiring 4 things*if* it included his car. Men and their cars! I'm not much of a Lyle fan but this is good.

Editted to add:  I had to go back and watch Homefront just to see Jarod blow up Lyle's car again.  Loved the scene where MP hands Lyle his license plate.  Yeah, you're right, he loves his car.


Author's Response: Lyle is very possessive of his car... especially when Jarod keeps blowing it up. Glad you liked it, bigger bonus that you're not a Lyle fan.

What can I say?  I think you did a good job with Jarod's reaction (curious to see where you take this).  Lyle...well no one does Lyle better then you!  Evil & twisted do come to mind.  

Author's Response: *bows* You're very good for my ego *grins* Glad you liked it! As of yet, there isn't any continuations planned for this, have taken it as far as I planned. But we shall see what happens.

Very nice Sofy, almost chilling.  I really think you stopped too soon and would love to see you add more to this.  I hope you continue the theme and flesh it out a little more.  Good job!


Author's Response: Thank you. Flesh it out? *panics* But then I would need a plot ;) I'll put that on my to-do list in case my muse ever dares to re-appear and real life eases up.

"It isn't easy.".
You never fail to astound me Jacs! That speaks volumes.

For Jarod "It isn't easy." to (a.) find his family, (b.) try to open Miss Parker's eyes to the fact that her father lies to her, uses her and controls her (c.) make amends for the evil usage of his past Sims.

For Miss Parker "It isn't easy." to trust her father, the Centre or after IOTH her feelings for Jarod.

For Lyle, "It isn't easy." to gain and retain control of the Centre or capture Jarod. Or give up Chinese cuisine.

For Sydney "It isn't easy." to quiet his conscience re: what part he played in Jarod's life as the Centre held him prisoner and used his talents for sims to sell to the highest bidder.

For Broots "It isn't easy." having to work so close to Miss Parker when he wants to be her 'honey bunny'.

And for all we know "It isn't easy." for Angelo to get a steady supply of crackerjacks without having them intercepted by sweepers with a fondness for caramelized sugar drizzled over popcorn and peanuts with a 'toy surprise'.

I look forward to chapter 5 with eagerness. What new relevation will you tantalize us with next?

Author's Response: Rachell, your encoragement and enthusiasm and comments are the lifeblood of this work. I would never have come this far without you.
A million thanks.

'Need a break.'
Hmm, isn't that what Lyle said when he was searching for Jarod? And I beleive that was one of Miss Parker's lines too.

I'm sure Sydney and Broots wanted a break from Miss Parker's attitude.

As for Jarod isn't that what he was trying to tell them in 'Road Trip'?

Think what you want Jacs, but we all know just when you think you have everything under control it all turns to you-know-what! You'll be back. I have no doubt that chapter 6 is just waiting to be written. (smirk, smirk)

Author's Response: Oh no!! I hope i am not guilty of lifting lines from the show. I worked soooo hard on these and I swear they are mine!!!
Yes, i have already located another problem so i am seeing a few more chaps coming.

Laura, so glad you are now 'clued in'. You were correct when you called it the story of the year. Why? Because each of Jacs' chapters, tho' short and concise, provide the inspiration from which the reviews come from. Lines like "hey,hey" or "Need a break" speak differently to each writer and inspires them to conjure up their own images of what it means and how it pertains to the Pretender. It stirs the creativity and talents of each reviewer and also challenges them to 'think on their feet.' It's quick, it's easy and short. You could say that the real story is in the reviews, a Pretender review. I know of no other story which can do that.



Author's Response: LOL, indeed Rachell, the reveiws have certainly made my poor little story pale into insignificance. I do believe now people are skipping straight to the reveiews, just glossing over the new chaps.

Jacs, this chapter is definitely hot ! I'll admit it, I was on the edge of my seat biting my nails at the beginning! But you really turned up the heat and I could feel the passion of the characters. Never have I seen such raw animal instincts displayed so graphically. I really think you should change the rating, this chapter left me blushing. I'm as amazed as Blade is with all the sexual over tones. Little did I suspect you could be so bold and explicit!

BTW are you saying that I have a problem with adding color to my stories? ;)


Author's Response: Absolutely not. lmao. I was making no reference to your coding of colours at all. I see some Parker-like paranoia seeping in there.. hee hee.

I may have let the smut get a little out of hand but, meh, what can i say?

OhMyGawd!  I can hadly beleive I held my breath while reading this entire chapter!!!! The desperation and pain is so acutely expressed in so few words.  What can I say other then I am in awe of the depth of your writing skills Jacs. 

BTW I am reading your story in the end notes instead of doing e-bay.  Shame on you for the temptation!

"Broots is with you always. He's like Jesus, in a way. And also like the Flying Spagetti monster. <3 Broots. Go, Broots. Did you know that Broots and Miss Parker, and also Sydney, were so doing it? OT3, I'm telling you. I'm so glad that finally someone else realises it. Keeeep gooooing. "

Oh Blade, you are soooo naughty!   :)

WooHoo!  Broots saves the day once more!  (Big smile here)  I love this Jacs, it's so much fun. 

Now wait a minute Cathy and Parker!  Just what is wrong with Broots? (putting hands on hips and glaring)

As you know from my fan fic (Mrs Broots, Love is Blind)I have a special place in my heart for the tech.  Sure he's a little thin on top and isn't as cute as Lyle or Jarod but you have to admit he's one of the most compassionate and caring Centre employee around. 

Can I please let you know if I get noticifcation of your response to my reviews of your timeless and never ending story?  Hmmm, well let's see....  (wink, wink.  Oh wait!  That was someone poking me in the eye with a sharp pointy stick.  Ouch!)