There are many story lines/episodes that in my opinion would benefit from redaction but Donoterase stands out among them all (well that and The Inner Sense and definitely IOTH - I know you're working on those too, right? *smiles* And the ending to the show as well?)

I love the power struggle, albeit brief, between Jarod and old man Parker, that was well played, nightowl, and so Jarodesque "if you love her..." - but of course you nailed Jarod, you nailed them all! The flight, Jarod's thoughts, all of it, splendid.

Oh, so sad. Poor Miss Parker. "You don't have what I need for pain." But Jarod's words were great. "You're not expendable"- oh, nightowl, you make him so-- so like-able. Why do you do that? haha.

I love how well they communicate and compromise even if she is still moody and snippy. And it's great to see her well taken care for a change.

This is how that episode should have played out (Instead of him leaving her there to the vultures). This is what really happened and in my mind, will always be what happened. You got it right, and the writers- well, they had it all wrong.

Oh, nightowl, wow, have I mentioned the inclusion of these lyrics? Great, great job and very fitting. I'm only familiar with one DF (RIP) tune: "Lonely in Love" (awesome sax). I'm youtubing Iracus now (nice).

This was another excellent chapter. Jarod's explanations and the reservations he has were all perfectly done and I could just imagine the major's reactions. Also, Jarod's admission/acknowledgement/acceptance of his role in his and Parker's relationship (or lack thereof) is quite refreshing.

I'm pleased that he could step back and see the err of his ways, despite what his best intentions might have been for her.

In the show, he always seemed, well, not only unapologetic about his "slaps in her face" but also oblivious and even uncaring and just plain mean at times, as if he was tormenting/manipulating her and enjoying it. Bad, Jarod.

You are not the typo queen, but you are the "damn, that was hot!" queen! Who knew that something as mundane and ordinary as leg bristle/shaving could be so amazingly sexy?

It was very cute the way she was only toying with him and then it suddenly became something bigger than the both of them and left Jarod aroused and fumbling- so funny, nightowl. You write them so well.

You've struck a perfect balance with dialogue, details, descriptions, romance, adventure, family life and that little boy- oh, nightowl, that was so sweet, so sad that he feared he'd be rejected. And I thought Parker's reaction was fantastic, quite reminiscent of little Miss Parker.

Also, I love that you spent some time on the personal conflicts brewing within these characters and their personal struggles and attempts to come to terms with all that's transpired and speaking of the characters, they're all spot on.

And I'm sure that Miss Parker would be pleased that she pronounces Brigitte "Bridgette", haha. Very nice touch there.

You haven't let us down and I'm quite certain that you never will. *winks*

I love the Beatles lyrics you included- very fitting choice, nightowl. Very lovely scenes between Parker and Gemini and while you didn't go into details of the wedding ceremony, the imagery was lovely enough, the descriptions were so well done that the imagination could fill in the rest.

Haha, typo queen?  No, you are not.

That waa a remarkable move (the drug) and Parker, of course, played it so cool, as did Syd. But poor Jarod and Gem, left behind and concerned. It's a remarkable story, a lovely tale and you extremely well written.

You can't leave it like this- well, you can, but I'd really rather you didn't, haha.

I'll be eagerly awaiting your next chapter, nightowl, when ever you're ready.

Oh, wow! I'm so pleased with the "random" stories- they've been anything BUT random. BUT I'm quite displease as well, because it seems that all of the best fics are incomplete.

This fic is quite remarkable, extremely well written and with that ominous fog hanging over it. You've certainly painted quite the picture with your descriptions and details.

48 hours? That is so like Alex, so taunting, so evil and giving just enough time that, I fear, it won't be time enough for Jarod to save her, one of those "just in time to be too late" situations.

This has to be, hands down, the most evil cliff hanger in the history of literature, be it fanfic, fic, nonfic, etc. Please update.

I loved Major Charles' acceptance of the child despite how he may have been conceived and loved too that they are all getting on so well. Great job!

Ooh, just like Parker to make the play of having Syd's phone bugged. I love the tension brewing in this chapter!

Oh my god! Alex? I didn't see that one coming but hmm, very plausible that he would have been found by the Centre, re-educated and that Lyle would try again to "flock" with him, haha.

Miss Parker as a hissing dragon? Nice! Also, I like the concern that slips from her and I loved the twin's confortation but I am just a little bit afraid for her now.

Oooh yes, yes! It's always a blast when Mr. Cox joins the party and even more fun when that party takes place at the T board. Yay! And oh, Jarod- blue notebook? Oh wow and oooh, nice exchange between Parker and Cox.