Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: General
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Word count: 900
Read Count: 5711
Mirage, that is truly beautiful. You always leave us wanting more of your talent my dear and I look forward to reading a continuation and more amazing stories of yours. I congratulate you and lady muse!!
Thanks for the R&R, James. There won't be a continuation of this; however,perhaps there will be another short story eventually.Reviewer: James Signed
Jarod is implicated in a spate of homicides.
Settling in for a nice long read. The first chapter grabs me and pulls me in. I'm captivated by each turn of the phrase. I love how it feels like a detective crime thriller and this is the before the scenes of where Jarod and MP come in to play. You're brilliant. I already like Brandt and feel so much for young McGraff who I can see clearly a young boy in man's body. You illustrate with words.Reviewer: James Signed
I love Miss P's punch in the face entrance into this second chapter. She's on fire. You mention the changes in Carthis and win bonus plausibility points. I like to escape reality too and read but unless it's clearly alternate universe material I want things to be plausible within what we already know from the television series. I love the technical parts, the upgrades the Centre always needed. They have geniuses working for them and should have always been that technologically advanced. Have I mentioned your brilliance recently?Reviewer: James Signed
Ok. Question. Are you Zina? From what little I know about you you strike me as a bookworm entreprenuer author with a wild party streak. I don't think of you as a gum chewer. I think you'd probably make eye contact with people though because that's not something someone would admit and point out. I can see you chatting with Jarod or Michael and the actors. You don't seem shy. I read this and something strikes me. I don't know what. You don't seem to like Jarod all that much. I'm curious that's all. I like Zina. Something about her.
Rachel here is fabulous. You write these characters as they are. I marvel.Reviewer: James Signed
New word for me. Yclept. I like. You used it correctly too! Mirage fiction is educational and entertaining.Reviewer: James Signed
Jarod, Jarod. He is a ladie's man. Seeing his own face and knowing he's the one that fixed the video so it would play. All around top notch chapter.Reviewer: James Signed
In a thousand languages. I was in physical pain when she snapped that pencil. Hey, I'm a guy.Reviewer: James Signed
Unraveled. Rachel is unraveling. You transition exceptionally... out of this world and you tie everything together. It's a tight story.Reviewer: James Signed
Awesome. That last line. Punch in the face exit. All pretender.Reviewer: James Signed
Heraclitus. I thought that was something dirty for a sec. I don't know who that is. All of the philosphy was time stealing from me. I need to revisit. Do you think a long time before you come up with an idea? How does it work? You interest me. I'm intrigued.Reviewer: James Signed
You insert so much realism in for example the dried blood where Parker failed to start a line which is realistic. We wouldn't expect her nursing skills to be perfect when she's not a nurse and we've seen Jarod instructing her in the past with Fenigore at the bank. Your writing blows me away. Bravo.Reviewer: James Signed
You bring these characters to life Mirage. I should have known it was Ethan too but like Jarod was in the dark. You write the different relationship dynamics beautifully. And that final line. I feel so much sympathy for Jarod.Reviewer: James Signed
The Jarod-Ethan tension is incredibly intense. I like the power play by Parker no matter what her intentions were. Parker propositioning Jarod for sex was something I would have never expected from you. I can see her doing it but I can't see you writing that because you never seemed to like Jarod.
I've read thousands of stories but I've never seen the characters so in character as they are when you write them. Sydney... you did right by him too. Bravo!Reviewer: James Signed
Beautiful. Your descriptive work is beautiful, the travel, all of it. You move them so well and transition between scenes flawlessly.
A miscarriage fits the timeline and is so plausible that I'm... I can't even think now Mirage.Reviewer: James Signed
Running from himself. Yes. We do that sometimes. Where do you get these ideas? Brandt is a good man. You create these gentle and intelligent characters and you know exactly where to place them and exactly how to move all of the characters. Awe-inspiring.Reviewer: James Signed
Jarod's internal dialogue. I'm going back feeling like shit. lol. You give the right amount of detail without losing sight of the story itself. Yes Jarod is lying. He will never leave alone. Comedy gold within the tragedy.Reviewer: James Signed
When the worlds all collide. It was an amazing collision. Brandts thoughts about Parker were what I imagine everyone's is when they meet her. Brandt is right. Jarod will shoulder his way in. He does that all the time.Reviewer: James Signed
"eager to please and terrified for their lives."
Hired by Miss Parker definitely.
"You drop the bread in the toaster for chrissakes." Brilliant.
You are brilliant Mirage.Reviewer: James Signed
Thank you for the missing scene, for all of the missing scenes.
The tension is crazy good.
Broots. You never disappoint with your characterisations. You bring back all the good feelings Mirage. Brilliant transition to Jarod and Miss Parker making out. I love the details that mean so much. This kiss statue in the book Jarod was reading when he was a child and Miss Parker came in the room. I'm glad he's hanging on to the book. I wonder if he can hang on to her. I hope so.Reviewer: James Signed
Erotic stuff Mirage. Still you inject comedy and lightness in the story coming at the end especially with Jarod saying it's not a bad way to go and he's right. He is so right.Reviewer: James Signed
Tehehee. Miss Parker eager to compromise? Hehee. Nope. Jarod has no problem there. These adult situations between Jarod and Parker are something that we should have seen on our tvs. I'm grateful to you that I get to see them when I read this.Reviewer: James Signed
The adult banter, the suggestiveness. It's all pretender perfect. The transition between bliss and resurfacing distrust is seamless. It's brilliant Mirage.Reviewer: James Signed
Your chapter notes! I'm laughing way too loudly. I appreciate that you are genuinely concerned for readers, the doctor Jarod cringers. So... you're not one of them? But no you wouldn't be because you write about it. Unless this is some therapy of confronting the thing you fear. I told you I was curious about you. You are really a MIRAGE Mirage. Broots toughed it out. I think he would say do it fast and want it over. He loves Debbie and that's he doing this for her is another nod to the tv series. I can tell you love this show. You know it well. Please update when you're feeling better and stay well. Cheers!Reviewer: James Signed