To whom shall I ship them?
Centre
Ooh, I love that Cox is so powerful and prepared to kill Raines. Very well written, great flow.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedWhoa! That was intense, extremely intense, and I love it!
Reviewer: Mirage SignedI hope Raines gets his- and soon. Great job.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedOoh, I loved Parker's reaction to Sydney's snubbing Lyle and it's true: had the matter concerned Jarod, Parker would have all of Syd's undivided attention. I love all the personal conflicts and speaking of the rat: I don't miss him but certainly, he will rabid when he learns of yet another Pretender? Yes? Hmm, nothing like a glass of a wine and a good read.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedI love this side of Cox, which, I'm sure exists. He is a son to his father on the show, so naturally he has paternal potential- or at the very least, the ability to feel adoration for a child. But still, he's creepy, haha. You do a great job balancing the personalities, and beyond the surface and exposing confilicts and insecurities. Magnificent.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedOh, God, she really is Parker's child? Perhaps? And the father? Eww, not Jarod's, I hope.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedThat was absolutely naughty, haha, and they bugged each other's homes. I loved it, haha.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedOh, love the idea of triggers implanted an early age but oh, I do hope Lyle doesn't kill her.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedAnd the Pretender is in the house, and a little slow on the uptake as usual, which is very characteristic of the resident genius indeed. He never seems to know enough, always gets there just in time to be late, etc. You really know these characters, thunderchild.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedSmooth talking Cox, the voice of reason. I love how seamlessly this flows and how alive this story and the characters are. And no typos! Incredible.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedUh-oh, Jarod's foaming at the mouth, haha. This doesn't bode well for Parker's beauty sleep. I should sleep but this is much more interesting.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedWhat the hell is Raines doing to Lyle? Make it stop! Very intriguing still. I simply can't stop reading.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedHeart in throat excitement. Whew, that was close with Raines, Lyle and Parker. So glad she's able to control Lyle and yes, indeed, she is fascinating- and so is your writing.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedOooh and the plot continues to thicken, hmm, delicious. I do love how intuitve Cox is and how he isn't completely evil and not even close to being the "grim reaper" - no more than Lyle is the "boogy man" as Raines had dubbed him (which is odd for Raines considering that Raines is the one that screwed Lyle's mind). Great job.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedOh, dear! Jarod is rabid and confused as hell- my favorite! The more confused, the better. Will he find out about Parker and Lyle's exploits? Yes? Can't wait to find out.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedYou write them so well, ahh. Love it.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedOoh, me likes the scuffle between the ladies (cat fight!) and I love that Cox sided with Parker and that Parker kindly retracted the claws. Well played.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedKarina should be shot. Soon. Poor Lyle.
Reviewer: Mirage SignedOh, bless. I think I'm developing a slight crush on Mr. Cox, he's so gentle with Kainda, it's terribly sweet. Perhaps he will ally with the twins?
Aw *groans* no, it's not finished. Any plans for a continuation ever?
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I started reading and could not stop. Very well written! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. You've kept all the players in character -Parker & J are the perfect disfunctional non couple.
Oh and thank you for not killing Parker in chapter two.
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Raines and Willie capture Jarod. Horrible things follow. You'll have to read it to find out more.
Haha, I can't believe I've never seen this. It's brilliant! I could just imagine the horror upon Raine's face. And Jarod humping Raine's leg!!! *laughing my ass off* I can imagine that too, haha, and will be imaging it for years to come, thanks to you.
I am so glad you decided to update this fabulous story. Quite a page turner you've got here. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Update soon.
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So, as promised, I'm here to beg for an update. I just read the entire story (again) and it is begging for continuation. The plot is amazing and to be honest, it should have gone down exacly this way instead of J leaving her to die. *bad genius, bad!*
Your characterizations were spot on perfect, the dialogue was brilliant, it's amazingly well written. What typos? There are none. So please...What happens next? Does the Centre find out and interfere? Will Jarod just wait patiently for her? Will Jem and the gang try to break her out or take down the Centre?
I know you can do it!
Thank you so much for your encouragement and for your own stories. I do have the next chapter started but have had to put it aside for a bit due to real life stuff, I will finish it.
I absolutely want it finished. My big fear is that I will not be able to live up to all those wonderful reviews that I'll screw up the ending. So I'm trying very hard to get it right! As soon as I think I can tackle it again ..soon I hope... I want to try and finish it. Although I tend to write long chapters so it may take 2 or 3 more managable chapters to finish the story..
Thank you, as you know it is always nice to know people out there are reading and care enough to let you know it. It's food for the fanfic writer, without it our muse dies! Mine has been faking it for a while so she could vacation, but I think I got her back.
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