Chapter 4: Chapter 4
The only thing I noticed is that especially Miss P seems a bit out of character to me. I don't think she would so easily adapt to a new situation like that. I would have thought it'd take at least some more convincing on Jarod's side to get her to play along.
And Parker at JC-Penney's? I expected an outburst, at least her threatening to shoot somebody. :-)
Otherwise I really like this story and I am looking forward to where you're taking us!
Hi Miss Shannon,
Thanks for your review...yeah, Parker's a bit soft in this one. I'm working on bringing her tough side back in the next few chapters (the action starts in ch5 which will be posted soon) :)
I like to think back to when she met Jarod's clone and how friendly she was to him...so that's kind of why she's so quick to attach to Cale
Reviewer: Miss Shannon Signed