I'm not the biggest smut fan..like you. You say you don't like writing it but you are quite accomplished at it. This was tastily written. The plot, grammar, solid storytelling, and writing skill was strong enough to carry the story and strong enough to beat the smut.

If it had been tasteless, blind smut and excessive slang which always make me chuckle and is like comedy to me I might have laughed and not reviewed and it wouldn't have been a memorable read but you know where the boundaries are, and you're a wordsmith and everything I've read by you so far has been memorable and brilliant. Please continue writing. Perhaps you can even find it in your heart to write a sequel to this, a post transcendence update.

I had to register and log on to review you but it's ok and you are worth it. I've been meaning to register since I noticed and sent you email reviews but you haven't responded to those yet. Are you doing well? I hope you are. Please don't abandon me now! Steve and Craig's site has been gone for a while and it's like the fandom got smaller when there was no promised continuation of the pretender but only the reboot and novels. We have to keep it going. I love The Pretender. I don't want this to be over. I'm begging.

Hey, this is amazing. The violence wasn't too gratitious and I think Jarod could have done worse being it's Jarod. Magnificent work as always. Dark. Plausible. I More, please?

Update your others too please.

Broots is the normal one of the lot and I can see this happening because he's already said he was having a breakdown back in TP2001. Too much weird, too much bad. Too much is too much. He's bound to break. Because he's the normal one of the lot. I love the direction, your characterisations are always spot on. Chapter 3 here I come!

I love it when they work together this way, although they've never had so much time alone to do it. They do it well, and you write it exceptionally well. I feared they'd have sex and lose the plot but clear heads prevailed and Parker's already still resolving some remorse about endangering Jarod's life when they were kids. I think revisiting the past caught them off guard and it was a sweet, completely innocent moment between two people who still have feelings for each other. You handled that delicately and painted it as tender and pure. You never do what I think you might do. You've demonstrated versality again and it feels like you took great care to show they still care for each other but that it's something they can't explore right now. It can't be easy to balance the responsibilities they have now. They care for Broots, as well. Does writing feel like a high wire act? You don't seem to struggle at all. It sesms to come naturally for you. I'm thankful for all you've contributed to the fandom and beg you to write more.

Happy holidays to you and those you hold dear.

Enjoyable from the beginning to the end.....almost end. Fast paced, action packed, perfect characterisations, brilliantly executed story..

I eagerly await your sequel.