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Title: Chapter 1

Hi that was good.

Reviewer: katescats Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12/01/14 04:52 am
Title: Chapter 1

Loved this little story. Who is the person who said "No Jarod. You're going to live. For me."?

Reviewer: Ann Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22/12/08 02:47 am
Title: Chapter 1

I know you wrote this a while ago but I thought you wouldn't mind some more positive feedback on it!
As other readers have said it does read just like a dream where you know some things without knowing why, where objects change and fuse into each other (the blask sack turning into a pool) but most of all were feelings rule. 
What nailed it for me was that even the comforting end of his dream was full of confusion, and as we know, Jarod is still looking for his identity...
Thanks for a very good read!

Reviewer: middleman Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 07/10/08 02:12 pm
Title: Chapter 1

the only symbolidm I could see was wanting to die, but I don't think it ever mentioed jarod wanring it in 'gone', it was always lys.... well, I did see the avoiding-their-direct-gaze thing that waw big for the triimvirate, and the harsh results that'd follow...

nice job!

Author's Response:


As far as symbolism, the 'sack' was a hood that doubled as a body bag (remember, Jarod said that ending his life would save others), the 'eyes' were red like the camera lights, and the 'changeling' reflected Jarod's confusion over just who he was trying to go home to.  You hit the nail on the head with the 'avoid-their-gaze' thing.

CrackerjacknPez gets bonus points for guessing the symbolism and LOTS of brownie points for giving me a chance to discuss symbolism!

Reviewer: CrackerjacknPez Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/08/07 09:55 am
Title: Chapter 1

Great job! I'd never know it was your first fanfic. The symbolism was powerful, including the eyes he couldn't look at - just like Katie's pictures of the peoplee from the past sims used to coerce Jarod to do sims. I happen to be Katie's beta reader (the manatee lover, hehe) so I'm particularly familiar with her work.

It really read like a dream in the disjointed, fragmented manner they unfold. You captured the angst that is the essence of dear Jarod.

Love your style. Look forward to reading more from you.


Author's Response: Thanks, Topanga!  I'm glad you saw something in this little piece!

Reviewer: Topanga Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 06/08/07 12:31 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Nicely done and very dramatic.  Looking forward to more from you in the future.

Author's Response: Thanks!  I'll do my best not to disappoint.

Reviewer: RaChell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/07/07 11:41 am
Title: Chapter 1

Oh verrry good!

So dramatic, so intense.

Really breathtaking. I love your use of symbolism. You have a very vibrant and diverse language that really adds color and suspense.

Great piece. Would love to see what you could do with a longer story, because wow, you nailed this one.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it!  I'm working on a longer one.  Wish me luck!

Reviewer: Manoline Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/07/07 07:34 am
Title: Chapter 1

very interesting and symbolic story/dream :o)

i loved it. hope to read more from you soon.


Author's Response: Yay! Positive feedback!  This makes my muse happy.

Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/07/07 12:21 am
Title: Chapter 1

Well done. I liked the imagery that you used to describe Jarod's dream. Hope you write some more.


Author's Response: Thanks so much!  I'm working on it.

Reviewer: whashaza Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26/07/07 11:59 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I liked this very much. It easily could have been a dream Jarod was haunted by and i like the kind of 'reverse hood' effect. I wonder if the black sack was made from silk.

Author's Response:

Thanks Jacci!  And thanks for all your help getting it posted.

The sack should have been made from silk.  That's how I pictured it, but I forgot to actually mention that.  I need an editor!

Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/07/07 07:13 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Wow MP, what an impressive little piece!

And I'm honoured that Gone was your inspiration for this piece. The dream was so well done, I especially love the end. I wish I had thought this up myself.. really you did a splendid job.

Thanks for sharing! I hope your muse finds more fics for us soon, you definately are a great writer.


Author's Response:

Wow!  Thanks so much for those kind words, KatieQ.  I didn't expect a response, this being my first piece.  That was a huge confidence booster! 

As for my muse. . .it's working on it, but I'm very new at this.  I'm hoping I can assemble a few more short pieces and there is a slightly longer one bouncing around in my head.  We'll see where it goes!

Reviewer: KatieQ Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26/07/07 02:08 pm
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