Just a quick question, where is Jarod? Why hasn't he entered the story?????? I havne't read all of the chapters but I just noticed his absence. Is he going to come in later???
Author's Response: The fact that you haven't read all the chapters answers your question. Since I can only assume you're up to chapter 2 with where you left the review, you haven't gotten to the part where Jarod enters the story.
Date: 14/12/07 12:09 pm
Chapter 25 was nicely done Kat. Love the intense interaction with Raines, Lyle and Parker. Sooo... where to now?
Author's Response: YAY, thanks RaChell!! More intense fun to come.... 25 was great fun to write. Everyon coming together and not playing nice, always a good thing! *grins*
[Report This]Date: 11/12/07 08:52 pm
Someone's been having some twincestuous fun:)
I can't believe I'm saying this, but I agree with Cox; the dynamic you've set up between the Parker twins is verrry interesting. If you'd told me three months ago that I'd be reading a twincest story and rooting for Lyle . . .
Anyway, great writing, and I'm eager for more (though probably not as "eager" as Lyle, he he)
Author's Response: Why, whatever do you mean? *innocent smile*
Cox is a very intelligent man, what is wrong to be agreeing with him???
Welcome to the dark side, MP *smirks* Reading twinnie and rooting for Lyle, complete conversion! *happy dance*
I don't think anyone will be as eager as Lyle for this to continue. You will have another chapter within the next few days. Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/12/07 10:09 am
OK Sarah, who said you could pilfer my chocolates that I throw at the feet of Muses who have done excellant jobs? (tapping foot) BTW nice going Kat, sorry it took me so long (2 chapters!) to catch up.
Author's Response: I'm away for a week with storms forcing me offline, and you two start squabbling over chocolates??? How about you split them down the middle, and you both throw chocolates at my musing (who is screaming to write something)
No sweat RaChell... I'm glad to see you haven't forgotten about my little story (which seems to be taking on a mind of its own *smirks*) Looking forward to more reviews when I post the next chap.
[Report This]Date: 07/12/07 10:12 pm
tsk tsk, Lyle's been a naughty boy. And I think Parker just proved that love (or making out if you will) truly does concur all. Particular psycho boyfriends.
Great chapter! I want more! So off you go writing *steals one of RaChell's bags of Writer-chocolate and tosses it in your general direction * Ups...*whistles innocently* I'll pay for that, I promise.
Oh, that's right, fanfic site umm... Disclaimer: Dear copyright owners. When I say "pay for" I am in no way referring to your characters (which you don't use), fictional locations (which you don't use), or anything associated with The Pretender (which you don't use). So please don't sue.
Hm... I think we need to get a new discusion started at the forum, I'm feeling rant-y.
Ok, back on topic now. YAAAY NEW CHAPTER!
Author's Response:
*snickers* Another Sweeper bites the dust. And yes, he is being a rather naughty boy... he just needs to be shot full of sedatives to quiet him down, but who doesn't need a good drugging every now and then? *innocent smile* But he is so much fun to play with when he's like this, which is probably why I am enjoying this so much!
You want more, you and RaChell, and you both shall get more. Give me a little while to get back into the swing of things (and hope that I don't have anymore goddamn electrical storms) and I can quiet my musing down, which is presently behaving like a blood-thirsty Lyle right now due to the lack of attention.
Thanks for another review, Sarah!!!
Reviewer: Manoline Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/07 12:28 pm
Aww, 'daddy' Cox, ain't he cute?
But the letter sounds very intriguing...will be looking forward to see where you take this. And how does Mr Raines evil plans with Lyle fit into the mix?
Guess I'll just have to wait...because I just noticed there are no more chapters *sniffles* Oh well, at least I've caught up...I s'pose that's a good thing.
All good things come in threes (chapters)? Yup, I do believe they do *nods sharply*
Author's Response: If you think I'm going to upload another three chapters in one hit, you have another thing coming, Sarah. I will trickle them out as they are written and corrected. But you won't have to wait for too long, I will post another chapter shortly.
Paternal Coxy is very cute *snickers*
Good things (answers to big questions) will come to those who wait. *winks* Reviewer: Manoline Signed
[Report This]Date: 28/11/07 03:03 am
Hissyfit Jarod! Got to love it!
So you kept you promisse of more Jarod, verrry good *grin*. He's gonna do something stupid, isn't he? I can't wait!
So...you gonna start telling us more of where/what Kainda came from soon? Pretty please with a Lyle on top!
Well I better finish this off so I can move on to the next glorius chapter
Author's Response: Pretty please with a Lyle on top? Now you're talking my language!!
Hissy fit Jarod just doesn't know when to keep his nose of things that aren't his business. I can promise you that he will do something stupid... *smirks* Friction and complication is always fun.
Yes, I think I have kept you all hanging long enough... some truths about Kainda will be revealed in the following chapters, I think. I will need to look at my battle plan to see when they come up, but it shouldn't be too much longer.
And to think I was beginning to worry why you weren't giving me reviews. 3 reviews in one hit, I feel so special! Reviewer: Manoline Signed
[Report This]Date: 28/11/07 02:41 am
Ooooh power struggles, got to love it! *grin*
And I always liked Mutumbo, and was a bit miffed when they killed him off so yay you for bringing him in.
But since it's been a few weeks since I've been able to read HD, I was just wondering something;
Even now, we have the same problem with Project Gemini. Emotional isolation isolates the Project from us as well.
Is this story set pre Donoterase part 2, or have they recaptured Gemini and I just didn't notice? (Or option 3; I'm having another duh-moment? Speaking of which I believe they are coming much more frequent after that little eye-poking incident earlier this year...*shrugs*)
Aaanyway, GREAT chapter! *moves right along to the next two*
Author's Response: Our favorite Centre games: someone who doesn't have power wants to take it from someone higher up the foodchain... mnnn, fun things always happen in those situations.
*hums innocently* I think I better change my plans for Mutumbo then if you like him so much. *strokes chin in thought* Oh well, that's for later. You will have to wait and see if I work something out about everyone's favorite African.
I have settled on that this story is happening early Season 4. And no, you aren't having another duh-moment; they don't have Gemini. It was merely a comment of what they had done wrong with Gemini and Jarod. No one is in their
respective cells... yet. That all depends on how stupid Jarod wants to be about this.
Thanks for another review!! *moves along to read the other two*
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
[Report This]Date: 28/11/07 02:37 am
Yay for the new chappie!
You're setting the stage very well. I have a feeling a showdown is coming in a couple of chapters. Tension's building . . .
You have quite a way with Syd. I also think it's a testament to your skill as a writer that, even though Jarod obviously annoys you, when you write for him he doesn't come across as annoying.
Anyway, thanx for the chap! Hope there's more soon!
Author's Response: Tension is building and targets are getting marked... well, some of the targets since I still have some surprises up my sleeve *big grin*
Sydney and Jarod aren't my strong suit, so a chapter that consists of only Freud and Wolfgang Puke is my idea of torture. But I'm glad that I managed to pull it off, and the quality of the chapter remained unaffected.
There's plenty more to come and I expect more reviews from you!! *grins*
Thanks MP!! Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/11/07 08:07 pm
Nice, very nice! I think this is one of the best chapters yet! (meaning of course I won't poke you with the sharp pointy stick for at least another week.)
Author's Response: LOL. You mean I get a whole week without you demanding more chapters? Oh, I'm honored!! I will make use of the time, and get some more chappies written so you won't have to wait a looong time for extra chappies to sink your teeth into. *smirks*
[Report This]Date: 09/11/07 04:03 pm
Nice! The story has really taken a unexpected twist and I'm looking forward to more! And yes RL has been kicking my ass! How did you guess????
Author's Response: *grins* Glad you like how its going! This thing has taken on a life of its own, I haven't a clue where its going, I'm just along for the ride.
The silence on Missing Pieces and in email, oh and on the news that you've got nasty ass bush fires. You know, little things. Hopefully RL gets its act in order soon.
[Report This]Date: 28/10/07 11:00 pm
I'm not ignoring you Kat! Honestly I'm not. I haven't had a chance to read and catch up. But as soon as I can, be prepared for some reviews! ;)
Author's Response: Ohhh, poor RaChell... RL getting in the way of R&Ring. Would you like me to pause posting to give you a chance to catch up??? I expect some reviews from you when you manage to fight RL off! (Should have known something was keeping your from the computer, you haven't replied to my email)
Date: 24/10/07 03:09 pm
In-teresting . . . just curious, what's the time frame on this? Pre-Donoterase?
Verrry good chapter! I aspire to one day, somehow being able to figure Cox out. Is he going to take Kamau's place, or is Sydney? I like the Cox/Mutumbo dynamics. Very believable. Can't wait for the next chap!
Author's Response:
The timeframe is Post-Donoterase, early Season 4 basically for Cox to be there but I doubt very much of 'what's the timeframe' will be much of a problem. No one can figure Cox out, we don't know enough about him *winks*
As for what he's up to, Cox hasn't cued me in so I'm as much in the dark as you are right now (which probably isn’t a good thing since I’m writing this thing *winks*)
All will become clear in time! (I hope)
Thanks for another review, MP!
Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]Date: 24/10/07 12:48 pm
And the plot thickens . . .
Why do I have this nagging suspicion things aren't going to turn out well for Jarod?
Good chappie, hope there's more soon. I'd especially like to see Wonder Boy's reaction if he finds out what Lyle and Parker are up to;)
Author's Response: Mnnn, I wonder why you feel that way. Perhaps because it's me, and things never go well for Jarod *sweet smile*
All will be revealed in later chapters. I don't want to say anything and ruin the surprise, now do I? *winks*
Thanks for another review, MP!! Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/10/07 08:13 am
Miss Thunderchild writing Jarod? My my, miracles do happen.
I must say I enjoyed that little nibbit of labrat, I've been wondering what his reaction might be if he found out what was going on.
As always, great chapter
Author's Response: *smiles sweetly* Yes, I can write him. I mightn't like him, might want him to be locked up in a cage or given to Lyle as a Christmas present, but I can write him. (I have to write him in if I want to do anything nasty to him *smirks*)
There will be plenty more Jarod and Jarod-reactions to what is happening...
Thanks for another review, Sarah!!! Reviewer: Manoline Signed
[Report This]Date: 16/10/07 01:50 am
Ooooh, intrigue!
I finally get some time to read and I find not one, but two marvelous new chapters. You've been a busy bee, I like it *grin*
As the twincest wussy I am, I skipped the indented part. But don't let that fool you, you are making some progress converting me. I managed to read the whole bathtub scene without many "ew, siblings". That's something. An impressive something I might add.
Can't help but wonders what plans Raines have in store for our favorite little psychopath... Guess all I really can do is wait for the next chapter, huh?
Well, I'll be waiting...*twiddles thumbs*....So, you gonna post soon or..?
Just kidding. Well, kind of...
Author's Response: Busy.... it just sneaking them online when you weren't looking to surprise you... either way's good! *grins*
*sighs* I s'pose I can't make a conversion over-night, and you did do well to read the bath-scene without rebelling. I think you could have read through half of the indented part before you needed to bail. I will give you another crack at the twinnie factor later and see how you do *winks*
If I told you what Raines is planning, it wouldn't be a surprise now would it? You might have to wait for a couple of chapters before all is revealed... my plan keeps changing and the order of things to do is shuffled. But I will get to it *grins*
You will get more when I finalize where some chapters need to be slotted in. I won't post before that is settled.
THANKS FOR THE REVIEW, SARAH!!
[Report This]Date: 11/10/07 08:04 am
Ooh, no fair starting off so good and then only giving us a short chappie! Very well written chap. Raines is so . . . urg in the best possible way. Makes me want to take a shower just to get the evil off. I hope there's more in the works sometime soon!
Author's Response: This chapter was a formality... nothing more than Raines coming back into the spotlight with his evil plans. Paving the way for bigger chappies when the fun starts.
Raines will get what is coming to him, so you can forgo the shower to wash off the unpleasantness. He will get into a wee bit of trouble for messing around with Lyle like this. *grins*
Thanks for another review, MP!!
Date: 11/10/07 05:32 am
Author's Response: Hee hee, Lyle hasn't seen Kainda yet. He can't join Parker on her snooping/obsession until he has seen her. Thanks for another review... I was beginning to wonder where you had gone!
Hmmm, very interesting reply Parker! So does this mean that Lyle maybe involved in the future? Yes, I know, you're not telling. Darn! Darn! Darn!
As for my absence it's due to stressing out over my dance hobby. You know you're a Pretender fan when you can't find your instructional dance dvds, music or costumes but know excatly where your Pretender DVDs are ... right next to the TV!
Author's Response: That's exactly where the Pretender CDs should be.... right near the TV, within easy reach. Or right beside your work-station, within easy reach.
RaChell, you surprise me. You don't expect me to tell you everything, do you? I am entitled to having a few aces up my sleeve. You'll just have to keep R&Ring to see what I do with Lyle. Reviewer: RaChell Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/10/07 04:02 pm
Interesting! How intriquing that Lyle has no interest in Kainda when Parker is almost obessed with her .
Author's Response:
Hee hee, Lyle hasn't seen Kainda yet. He can't join Parker on her snooping/obsession until he has seen her.
Thanks for another review... I was beginning to wonder where you had gone!
Reviewer: RaChell Signed [Report This]Date: 30/09/07 06:21 pm
Okay, time for a cold shower:)
Great writing. I'm surprised (and a little disturbed) at how easily I find myself accepting this dark relationship between them. I know that can only be due to the detail you put into this. You created a mood by playing off of the darker elements in both their characters, but then you surprise the audience with little acts of tenderness, like the description of him stroking her hand the next morning. (love that description!) Overall, great chapter. You'll be happy to know that you made great strides in converting another reluctant Twincest-er to the dark side.
Author's Response: YAAAAAAAAAAAY. I'm glad you liked it, MP.... even more so considering you're now converted. See, it didn't hurt one little bit. The dark side is infinitely more interesting than the other side *winks*
I think you're accepting it because you've had 18 chapters to get used to the notion... and up until now, it wasn't heavy on the twincest factor. Not to mention there are other fun things going on to distract you.
Again, thank you for the review!!!!!
*wanders away, dancing at idea of another convert* Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/09/07 08:09 am
awww, look at the cute little Coxy, all paternal. And strangely enough, I don't find it odd at all. Which should speak volumes considering Cox is usually off the charts on my creep-factor...thing. (it sounded good in my head)
And Kinda, very natural for her to feel/act like that. Especially at her age and in the position she's in. Suddenly everything changed, and most of it not for the better.
Was nice to get a little glimps of their relationship and where it all started, as well as more insight into Kainda.
So yay for new chappie!
Author's Response: *snickers* You needn't worry about the creep-factor.... thing sounded better in your head, I know what you mean. Cox is off everyone's creep-factor thing. Perhaps you're starting to warm up to Mr Grim Reaper *grins*
Kainda might only be a little girl, but she's got some big issues.. one of which is totting an oxygen tank behind him.
I'm glad you enjoyed the insight into those two.... it was fun to write, even if it got tedious in places. But Ines came to the rescue!
Yay for a new review!!! Reviewer: Manoline Signed
[Report This]Date: 23/09/07 03:49 am
Nice interaction between Cox and Kainda, their bond was a bit unexpected and threw me off guard.
Author's Response: Nice to know that I can still surprise you with this story. Thanks for the review, RaChell!! Looking forward to hearing what you have to say about the next chapters. Reviewer: RaChell Signed
[Report This]Date: 18/09/07 05:53 pm
Great chapter. Cox as a surrogate daddy . . . I was not expecting that, but it works great! Kainda is fascinating.
Author's Response:
I'm steadily building on Kainda's character, to keep her fascinating *grins*
Thanks for another review, MP. Glad to know you're still enjoying the story this much!
Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]Date: 16/09/07 09:39 am
Great Chapter. I like the other side of Cox. He appears almost human for a change. You really have it in you to take a creepy guy (like Lyle and Cox) and turn them into people that you can actually like (sometimes: don’t like the Cox who’s plotting against Parker). I really like the fact that although Kainda can feel all the negative feeling around her, she doesn’t let it influence her and makes up her own mind.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the review, Morgan! It is greatly appreciated!! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story, I love hearing people's opinions and POV's on my stories and the characterizations.
I'm having so much fun with all these characters, especially Kainda!
Reviewer: Morgan Signed [Report This]Date: 16/09/07 12:43 am
Yaaay, new chapter! And good chapter too.
If my braincells wasn't so fried from this cold I would say more.
But yaaay ^^ *cough*
Author's Response: If you would prefer, we can consider this as an 'IOU' review, for when you're feeling better.
But YAY YOU for the review!! Glad you liked it, and hope you shake the nasty-ass cold. Reviewer: Manoline Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/09/07 05:00 am
