I liked the way the story begin. It poses several interesting questions, like what happened to Jarod, or who took Miss Parker. The characters are also well written. The only thing wrong so far is the usage of verbs: some sentences mix present and past perfect, which can be confusing sometimes.
A more thorough review will be given at the last chapter.
Reviewer: Joel Gomes Signed [Report This]Date: 01/12/13 02:59 pm
I believe I'm just stumbling across this story for the first time and I'm liking it very much. You paint a clear picture with the right amount of detail and your style is very Hitchcockesque-- please accept that as the huge compliment it's intended to be. *clicks over to chapter 2*
Reviewer: Mirage Signed
[Report This]Date: 01/06/11 02:43 am
All this is very mysterious still (I've only read chapter 1) but very pleasantly written. I'm definitely hooked and I look forward to reading more when I get the chance!
Author's Response:
Looking forward to hear from you. ;-)
Thank you for the review.
Reviewer: middleman Signed [Report This]Date: 07/10/08 08:47 pm
Ohh nice start. I LOVE your Lyle hee hee, what a bastard!!!
[Report This]Date: 11/03/07 07:13 pm
I know I'm a little behind, but I just wanted to say that I absolutely love this story. Gut wrenching, soul tearing, beautifully written. *Moves right along to sequel*
[Report This]Date: 29/01/07 03:00 pm
More than a week without a sequel!! I'm gonna die!! lol
Author's Response: Be patient, o little one. lol still busy...want to make it a good one...
[Report This]Date: 20/02/06 07:03 pm
WOW.I can´t imagine the end.I hope you will.
Reviewer: lucitana Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/02/06 08:12 am
It's still so good!! Could you write more about Ms Parker's feelings?
Author's Response: next chap will be more MP. I hope :-) Thanks for review
[Report This]Date: 21/01/06 10:21 pm
This is so good!! Please publish the sequel!! I can't wait!! I want to know who is torturing Ms Parker!!
Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/01/06 05:22 pm
This beginning is so good !!! You have to continue this fanfic, I'm really curious to know what happened to Jarod and who kidnapped Parker. Has the monster any connection with Lyle ?!? Well, you are the only one who can tell me, so please keep writing.
Author's Response: Thanks, I am glad you enjoyed the beginning.
[Report This]Date: 23/11/05 08:28 pm
