Your first sentences always pull me in and refocus my concentration. I have to say now that the way you flesh out the characters is aweinspiring.

And now we know that Raines was present when Jarod was brought in as a child, very sublte.

The only fault I can find is that you need to add another chapter. And soon.

I love her silent treatment, Jarod earned it. And I love that kiss. Most authors lose my interest after chapter one but you piqued mine and kept the tension. Exceptionally done.

I still find it funny that you are reluctant to write and are your worst and cruelest critic.

You have carved out a niche for yourself, I've said this before I know so bear with me here. You're not a shipper but you don't shun shippers and that gives you objectivity.

You do justice to the characters, their dialog and you have a still have an amazing knack for setting the scene and "weaving the tangled web."

You have mastered the craft of writing like few others, if any, have. I love you twisted ingenuity and intense 'take no prisoners' approach. You're not afraid of the dark or pain or tears. And you don't force the story but rather allow it flow seemlessly and effortlessly.

As for grammar, I saw no errors, nothing unrealistic, no inconsistencies or those outrageous leaps of logic Jarod makes during the series/telefilms. You explore humanity. It's the only way to give us an original plot. Most fan fic plots have been done to death already and here you've give us something fresh.

This story is brilliant! I find it entertaining, heartfelt, heart stopping. It's drama. It's life, and you write it well. I've said it before.

In closing, I'd once again like to plead with you to continue the J/P incest fic, to go somewhere you haven't gone before. I know you're not comfortable with the genre and hope you will let that discomfort motivate you to write the story.

Thank you for writing, writing well, writing often and sharing! <3

"presumably  expendeble". I could tell my namesake was having trouble asking Miss Parker for anything and there is he showing the gun at that moment. They aren't going to kill each other now are they, Mirage? You scare me with your end notes.

This is shaping up to be quite a shipper fic but I'm not surprised as you've written them before. So far I love it and the angst and drama is what I expect from the serie. All I ask is please don't make it too fluffy.

Amazing story! I can't wait to read more:-)

Love it! As always, your writing style is terrific and the characters are perfect, they are just the way they are on the show. Thank you for continuing to share your talent with us. And that note...does that mean they are going to have sex? Please say yes! You write stellar sex scenes that are what I always imagined it would be like for Jarod and her to have sex...excluding the scary non-consent scenes in forces of nature and circles of hell. Update soon!

Love it!  Please update soon....

I definetely hope for the former and not the latter! :-) Another great chapter in another great story. Truly you are the most prolific author on this site and my vote for writing the Pretender finale that Steven and Craig are obviously NEVER going to do.

Thanks as always for writing and even more important updating! it is always a pleasure to visit the site and discover a Mirage story and/or update! But PLEASE update 'Sweet Dreams'!! (Pretty please with sugar on top!)

Damn! That was totally HOT! I love how you write Miss Parker! She is so lethal. Jarod totally deserved that but at the same time he seems to have left FOR her.

Bring on more fighting! :-) As well as smut! It's a credit to your obvious talents that no one has done a 'Red Rock Jarod' sequal. Why wouldn't the Centre have been interested in JR?

As always thank you for writing AND for updating. It's always a pleasure to read your writing!

Loved Jarod's introspection and Parker's unusual silence. And I can't tell you the enjoyment of how Parker goes all hot and heavy (albeit dirty) on Jarod one second and then just stops, and walks away LIKE A BOSS! Can't wait to see where this all leads.

Author's Response:

Thank you, M Rose, for reading and reviewing. Yeah, LIKE A BOSS! I'm trying to find time to complete the update.

magnifique!