Good work with the humor. I laughed at the jellyfish scene. You did a good job with character interaction. I can't wait to see where you go next with the Angelo's message. I hate to see this story end. I never know what you are going to do next!
Author's Response: Bucky, I actually did the speedo scene just for you! But the thought that you enjoyed the story so far is great. Thank you for reading and reviewing it means a lot. Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 21/03/08 08:24 pm
I've enjoyed this story more than I have enjoyed a fanfic in a long time. Enjoyed the mix of humor and adventure and romance.
As far as I'm concerned you couldn't get the next chapter done soon enough.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I am working on the next chapter. I'm hoping to pull of a bit of a twist so in attempting to get it right it may take awhile. Please keep watching for it.
Reviewer: mrbig Anonymous [Report This]Date: 21/03/08 02:30 pm
Great chapter 7 ..really enjoyed reading this. Nice and long too .....can't wait to read the next one !
Loved the mystery bit from the Centre ..... keep up the good work, nightowl! You are much appreciated!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you are enjoying this. I have to say that I'm somewhat flying by the seat of my pants!rnrnThank you for your very kind words. They are appreciated. Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 02/02/08 01:11 am
nice long chapters to get the wide range of action and romance.
Gotta love the leg shaving, but the mystery that lies ahead is even more captivating. Can you do introduce us to something new there too.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review, I must have got the leg shaving part right! or just surprised everyone with it. Don't know if I can top that one with anything else I write.
[Report This]Date: 01/02/08 04:25 pm
Mmm, interesting. I really liked the shaving bitt. ;-) Never heard Cario before...*goes of to look it up* Good chapter. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: In Chapter 6 I used the full name of Macario so shortened it to Cario for the more intimate nickname her mother and the child Jarod would have used.
Date: 01/02/08 01:42 am
I think I'm going to hate to see this end. The shaving part is one of my all time favorite parts. I think I'd like to give that one a shot.
I can't imagine Bridgette as the queen. It just doesn't work. Curiouser an curiouser how will you work it out! I can't wait to see it.
Author's Response: Interesting that the shaving bit is going over so well with you ;-PrnI am pleased you are enjoying the story. Thank you for your comments!
[Report This]Date: 31/01/08 09:48 pm
This is getting better and better. Best leg shaving I've read yet. Only leg shaving romance that I've seen.
Think you nailed the characters. Nice build up to this chapter and this chapter is one brill piece of work.
Author's Response: Thank you for you kind comments.
[Report This]Date: 31/01/08 03:45 pm
HI! I am enjoying the story and hope that you will continue. It seems that the only time Miss Parker feels she can let her guard down is when she a world away from the Centre. Please write more when you have a chance! Thanks!
Twingirl10
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 26/01/08 09:23 pm
this story is just getting better and better!... and hotter :o) and that's always a good thing :o)
can't wait to read more.
peace!
Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 23/01/08 02:02 am
Hey!!
It was great seeeing an update so soon. Loved the chapter!! And yes, Rabbit Island seems too fitting (so good that it's surprising it was not made up.)...
Thank you for explaining the difference between Jem and Gem (I really loved it; MP gave the name a certain unique twist to it). Also, I loved the name you picked for MP. It was really original and I am almost certain that you are the first one to use it.
Loved, above all else, because I am a shameless shipper who is not afraid to own up to it, the way you are slowly but surely evolving the relationship between Jarod and MP. I loved that they are meeting halfway, both having to give a little (compromise is the key here!!).
Now... How long will this peace remain? Is a storm lingering in the distance? Your cliffhanger, perhaps? Will you follow the original storyline and have Mr. Parker use his child with Brigitte to reasert his position? What is the truth with that kid anyway? They never explained it and I always found his 'importance' to be highly suspicious (didn't you?), especially since he 'disappeared' later on.
Anyway, sorry if I babbled a little. Loved the chap and hope to see more whenever is possible.
Mary
PS:I didn't find any typos, so cudos to your beta (if you make them as much as you say you do)
Reviewer: bloodymary2 Signed [Report This]Date: 22/01/08 12:02 pm
Hurrah for chapter 6 - well done!! This is so well written; the characters come alive and I am left wanting to read more and more!! I loved the Donoterase episode - it is my favourite but it always leaves me feeling a bit disappointed - now I don't have to be!!! Hopefully, I don't have to wait long for the next chapter ....please!!!!
You have real talent, nightowl ...keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
How kind! I can only hope to live up to your praise. Frankly, I don't know how! The chapter I'm working on now is proving to be difficult to get it the way I'm picturing it in my mind--and I certainly don't want to let the readers that are enjoying the story down.
Thank you Phoebe for the kind response.
Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 22/01/08 07:39 am
I have to say you surprised me with this chapter. In some ways you seem to be tying up the loose pieces but on the other hand there is still a lot to be settled. Nice cliffhanger of an ending.
I think you are enjoying this more than you thought you would, I hope so. I'm enjoying it, that way I'd get more! ;-P
[Report This]Date: 22/01/08 06:54 am
This is really very good indeed! When can we expect to read the next chapter ? You have captured the personalities of the characters so well and I can hardly wait to read the next instalment. Hurry, please!!
Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 21/01/08 06:49 am
Lost us... I would think not.
I have just arrived to this story and am finding it extremely well written. I love the premise you have established and the way you are choosing to carry this out. Loved also the interaction between Jem (or is it Gem... You confused me there) and MP. Will you reveal her name? The way you wrote it leads me to understand you have already decided on what it could be... (greatest mystery of all PRETENDER mysteries if you ask me).
I am not pressuring you to update soon, but I hope you know that I will continue here, waiting for the next chap, whenever that might be.
Happy new year!!
Reviewer: bloodymary2 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 14/01/08 03:33 pm
no way!!!! you haven't lost anyone yet :o)
the story is great and even progressing. can't wait to read more of this one :o)
peace!
Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/01/08 07:57 am
Oh my God!! I really like this piece of work! That's really and you really respect the characters' feelings and actions. It could have been a part of the show... I'm impressed and waiting for more!!!!
Reviewer: Faith Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/01/08 05:32 am
I love seeing you run with this story! This chapter was much different than I expected, but I was happily surprised.
The name game was right on. And best of all you know how I like my Miss Parker written, well done. ;-)
Cute line about the big boys too.
More soon. Please. I am thinking of a short story myself, just from reading yours! See that's why you should write to motivate some of us that don't write!
[Report This]Date: 03/01/08 05:38 pm
Terrific, I didn't expect to get to a computer for another week, but they have these cafe's all over the resort, and I'm just getting ready to hit the slopes thought I'd read and review in case I hit a tree!
I really loved the back and forth between MP/J. You did a good job with what they argued about and how they argued. I can just see Jarod being guilty after forgetting Parker in bed. By the way - that woman can really hold her water! ;-)
I was happy to see this, and hope that you may surprise me by the next chapter real soon. Providing I don't meet up with any trees before that.
[Report This]Date: 29/12/07 09:02 am
I loved the arguement, because that is how I see those two sparing. I think that is also how Jarod would react when he did something and tried to cover it, first with not revealing all to her, and the second time by enjoying himself and forgetting her.
I think this chapter is the best in that you took a moment and really dug into it with your insights of the two main characters.
Now of course I'm very interested in seeing what happens next. Is Parker softening will she become part of the unit? OR you will throw the first punch!
Nicely done, looking forward to more of course.
[Report This]Date: 29/12/07 08:56 am
Keep up with the good work! i have a feeleing this is going to be great story.
Peace!
Reviewer: Jazzy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 26/12/07 01:48 am
Hi there! Really good start. I can't wait to read more, so keep it up. :o)
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 23/12/07 11:55 pm
First: THANK YOU for getting the next chapter up!
I enjoyed the dialog, you keep Parker's spirit alive with it. I have to say it will be nice to get Parker out of the sick bed and back up and fighting.
You are doing a good job with this. You know I'll be asking for more.
Date: 23/12/07 08:51 pm
Nice addition to the first chapter. It's an interesting story, I really think I prefer it (so far) to the episode that aired on TV.
Keep going I think you can pull this off! I'm betting on it. ;o)
Date: 23/12/07 08:46 pm
I loved this idea. That episode always bothered me. My question is--now what happens?
I will be watching for the answer. Good idea, good writing.
[Report This]Date: 22/12/07 12:54 pm
Very interesting twist to Donoterase, will be interesting to see where you take this *waits for next chapter to magically appear :P *
Reviewer: Manoline Signed [Report This]Date: 21/12/07 10:52 am
