Oh poor Miuna. I liked her. You killed your darlings!!! I love the secret language Jarod and Parker have, and that she came prepared for war. I like that Lyle came in too. Jarod has to go back to the Centre now. Parker has let Jarod walk away so many times and Sydney is hospitalized? and not there to intervene or even try. Ooh, can't wait. I've always wanted to see Parker and Jarod back in the Centre at the same time both working... or will she go free now that she's returned Jarod? Can't wait!!

Lyle stopping to say "no offense" to Broots about the cosplay quip IS GENIUS! I love that Broots dressed up as Ziggy! I love that you don't disparage cosplay. You are really young aren't you? You're at least 18 aren't you? I will worry if you're younger considering some of the things you've written.. I guess I worry about you anyway. I worry. It's what I do. Just can't get over Ziggy comment. No one is ever going to top that line. Even Lyle appreciates Bowie, as it should be.

Take a bow Mirage.

Oh, ok you have 3 chapters up. I thought there were only 2. This is exquisite like everything you write. Miuna is only a guest star but I hope you will go back and fill in more through Jarod's mourning process and memories. She's a stella original character and she was seriously honest. People will hate on refugees and anyone who doesn't look, live, worship, and love like them. Truth hurts but it's the truth and needs to be told.

Mind you, young lady, I still want more. Now. *cracks whip* Or else.

Just read all 3 chapters and love how fast paced they are. You really know the characters too and how to tell a story. I love dark and rapeyJarod so this won't be my favorite of yours but I'm already reading another of your stories in another tab I've got open that someone recommended for me and oh gods it's getting dark in that one...like damnnnn. Just what I wanted.

Girl! OMG! I read all three chapters and I want more!! I love Jarod so much and you write him so exactly like him and you do it with all of the characters. But he's my favorite so I don't really care how well the others are written lol. The other characters don't interest me. Miss Parker is such a bitch.. and even her name.. Miss? WTF? Who is she kidding? She's not a queen.. and she only acts tough. Like a dog who snarls and barks and then when you keep getting closer it just pees on itself and starts whimpering... because it's really so scared. I hate her. I'm only interested in Jarod! It's like he's here while I'm reading!! Put more on here!!

Masterfully written... completely Gutted on Jarrod's behalf but he is clearly in love with Parker and even admitted it and feels like he cheated on her with Miuna ..ooh but I also love Miuna. I can't wait to see how this plays out to resolve... Jarod back in the Centre.. oh please yes .. and make him stay for a while please???

I never get tired of reading you!!  You're not formulaic or pigeonholed and you branch out to genrebending and you love taking chances and pushing boundaries which is really what writing is about. That and having something else to say, something that means something, something to take away and learn and you always provide that depth so it's not just entertaining it's also important. There is beauty. You also are obviously educated and open minded and you nail the grammar and know how to transition and keep me hanging on in my chair. I hope you will always write for the fanmily.

Impressive as always, Mirage.

This is plausible, and each character is exactly spot on. You are  a gifted store teller and author. Thank you for sharing your natural talents with us and breathing new life into an old series'

Top notch mate. This is the quality I've come to expect and always receive from you. You never disappoint. More!

Your prose is clear and powerful and there's not much to say that hasn't already been said. You're awesome and you've got this.

I wondered if Mp had other plans when she showed up acting like a lawyer. Her team is already in place gathering evidence to get Jarod out and .. back to the Center I'm thinking???? Amazing. Plausible. Believeable. It's scary and people should know. You have never been afraid of darkness or controversy and that's the stuff that makes any writer a real author and a an amazing author.

Congrats on the new chapter. You yank me in with the first line and don't let go. You're one of the few authors I show up for and as an editor and publisher if I'm reading something it has to be intriguing. I don't read just anyone! Please continue. You know what you're doing and you are comfortable with language, dialogue, character and placement and the works.