This is evolving brilliantly. Miss Parker seems to be experiencing an unwanted self-reckoning and also a renewed battle with her inner voice/dominant parent's voice. I think Jarod's return to her life triggered the return of all of the baggage and the past, the romeo/juliet /forbidden fruit angle of her and Jarod's relationship, and it's reasonable and plausible that she'd fear even subconciously that Jarod's presence would attact any fragments of the Triumvirate, Quintumvirate or any other org to her and her children. She must also be worried about Jarod in law enforcement even if she seems displeased by him playing doctor. I'm not a mother, but I know many of them and all mothers feel inept and like they're screwing up, so that also seems in character and plausible and it adds even more realism, and makes Miss Parker even more relatable and real. That tune playing speaks for itself. She's running. I don't think that she or Jarod would ever really get away from each other. All the running only leads them running into each other. I feel lucky to have read this and that you're willing to explore deeper. It's an ancient television series and I'm glad it's been given new life by fans. You excel in every facet of writing and story telling. As a fan I particularly love the added-for-continuity paragraphs and how you move the story forward and it goes without saying the characters. I read your stories and visualize the characters, scenes, settings. It's amazing. I look forward to the next installment. Thank you.
Hi. I'm not going to disagree with any of your theories.
You're absolutely not wrong about Jarod's presence and choice of career and the impact all of that has on Parker. This will become more clear in the coming chapters-- if you continue to read.
Of course I'm going to refer back to what we already know about these characters and this series in my scribblings, as a fan myself, because these aren't my characters, and this isn't my series, and it's important to remember that, and to remember where the characters have already been, and it's my goofy, derpy little geeky way of saying, "Psst, hi, fam, remember when abc did xyz? So do I!" *air fist bump*
Thank you for reading and for the entirely too generous review.
Reviewer: Michael Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/06/22 10:05 pm
hope u will updae soon!! it's like heroine and I usually only say that about smut fiction!! I can see Jarod and Michael t in each scene and having met him 3 !!! times I know what I like and I know him!! there should be smut or sex but even if there isn't I will read this.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Lorraina.Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]
Date: 31/05/22 08:56 pm
I finally signed up!!! You are worth the hassle of signing up tho so it's all good. I love your writing voice and the realism in your stories that keep The Pretender alive. Thank you for being you. Please write more.
Thanks, Leese.Reviewer: Leese Signed [Report This]
Date: 31/05/22 06:46 pm
Parker is still hurt .. understandably. This says everythng. The defensive body language and the dagger words.
"Parker folded her arms across her chest, and said with a curt, throaty chuckle, "I guess you'd know considering the years of experience that you've had running away."
You do an amazingly remarkable job with the characterisations... and all aspects of writing and story telling. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Hope to read more updates soon.Reviewer: d_el1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/05/22 04:55 pm
Classic Miss Parker all the way.
"Oh, and by the way, you should choose a lane, and stay the hell in it."
Because Jarod is a agent but acts like a doctor. It reminds me of when Michael T. Weiss was on Burn Notice and he's a total baddie but when Michael Weston gets pretend hurt he says, in classic Jarod, something like "maybe I can stop the bleeding" and I just loled all over myself.
I can never get enough of your writing. More?Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/05/22 03:03 am
Amazing. I love that tender, emotional scene when Avery tells her mother that no one there with them will ever laugh at her when she falls and Parker's reaction that is spot on Parker. I think Parker must feel torn apart here between this real peronsa she is with Avery, Eli, and Stella and the persona that she still seems to be trying to put up for Jarod. I love that Stella is stunned by Parker's reaction to seeing Jarod present and right in front of her suddenly and she had no preparation for that. I know why he did what he did and I'm glad he's finally realizing how much he hurt her. It hurts to see her that hurt and I know why she's that hurt and I don't expect her to be over it soon. I think she wanted a reason that he faked his death but I think she's a scared to know that the reason is a truly deep love. He's right. In an earlier chapter he told her she'd never known what to do with him. Intriguing as always Mirage.Reviewer: Joni Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/05/22 01:58 am
Ok first. Stevie Nicks. The QUEEN, yo! And that song? Stevie and Lindsey have a thing that might come close to the thing Jarod and Parker have. You should see them do that song live. Phheewww! So. Love this. But it's Parker who will never get away no matter how fast she runs and it's Jarod that is haunting her. Dead or alive. I love your prose, your word choice, how in character the characters are, your narration, your voice, the transitions that I don't even notice, the passage of time you show. I love how Parker asks Jarod if she's aware of his hypocrisy. He let her believe he was dead, and now he's afraid for her health and life and she must be thinking "he can die but I can't?" because that's how Parker thinks. You nail the characters and it feels like coming home to read you. There's an ease of reading even if I have to look up words sometimes to know the definition or google to see a painting or artist and educate myself on these NOT UNDERDOGS that Avery talks about. That child is a genius. An adrenaline craving genius. She isn't Jarod or Parker's bio child tho? I need more. This is perfection. Please continue?Reviewer: needlepoint Signed [Report This]
Date: 23/05/22 07:10 pm
*bows* You rule! I can never get enough your writing. You know the characters too well maybe but I'm defo not complaining. Avery is so perfect and chaotic. love Jarod's reaction lol. even though she isn't his child he knows what parker has been through with an equally gifted and special Eli. more please?Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/05/22 04:27 pm
Speechless and thrilled.
Reviewer: Jameason Signed [Report This]
Date: 20/05/22 07:09 pm
So addicting but also professionally written. I admit it was your stellar smut writing that got my attention but you bring substance too and depth and real quality story telling. I'm blown away. The words he'd written stung her fingers omg I can't even right now.
Margaret's a spit fire, love what you've done with her hair and that's she's not all conservative stiff homophobe garbage fire. She's Jarod's mom so she has to have an open mind and be accepting. I love all the backstory on all of the characters and how you flesh them out. Keep it up. Jarod and Parker can have sex too you know. That's nice too. hint hintReviewer: shauna Signed [Report This]
Date: 20/05/22 02:35 am
I am so here for this novella Mirage. You snatched me by the collar with that opening and kept that momentum to leave me craving more. What did here sort of levels the field between the different generation s. Parker slipped and fell and Ethan and Jarod worry that Margaret will fall so that's not something that only happens to elderly people. Parker's internal conflict with her father's voice is stunningly on the nose. She's like no you won't reject me because I reject you and I hope she can find some peace in that. I think she has to reject her father and hold him accountable to be a good mum. All parents are going to make some mistakes I can attest to that. My heart beams when you I read that rejecting one's children is the parenting fail, not the small accidental mistakes or that a child is gay or transgender. So real and so raw. I love that Margaret is the mom worth looking for and finding. What I love most is that Jarod loves it Parker and that part about his letters, Parker tracing his words with her finger and his words stinging her fingers. We don't need to know what he said just her reaction, the stinging, and this chaos and pain in her mind and heart says it all. I love how you tied his being a best selling novelist into his writing letters to her and that continuity you give us.....oh, I sooo adore this. Best thing I have ever read. Thank you so much!!!Reviewer: lisa Signed [Report This]
Date: 19/05/22 08:46 pm