When I read this the first time I lost my jaw somewhere at my feet.
That was a long time coming. You write the sex stuff better than anyone. There are no "down theres" and "crazy enormous cock" or stupid $hit. You keep it real.
Jarod's nonchalance at the close of this chapter is so like him. He's honest. He wants more. Who can blame him? I want more, too.Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/09/20 04:39 am
OMG!! This is my new favorite story ever. More please?Reviewer: Melissa Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 18/08/19 09:58 pm
It's steamy in here. Thank you for writing, for sharing your work, keeping these characters alives and in character. You say you don't write smut well. This isn't smut. It's hot erotica and you write it well. Thank you for not using tasteless slang but also for not writing other things that make it difficult for the reader t know that sex is actually happening. NO kidding. There are stories where the writer is so vague the characters be dancing or eating or anything else but the write clams they were having sex. I don't know why people can't say what they mean. You keep it real without the bullshit. Thanks for that. I hope there will be more of this story. You wouldn't leave us hanging?Reviewer: James Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/08/19 10:25 pm
I'm a shy lurker new to fanfic so please be gentle with me. This is well written. You write extremely well. You know the characters so well too and that is refreshing. I didn't begin reading fanfic until rebirth and I read some amazon reviewer about how the novels were like buying fanfic. I was interested. I like what you write and the way you write. Your style is more like real classic novels I've read and nothing like fanfic at all except the characters are from a tv show and sometimes I wonder if you're a fan? I've heard you maybe weren't fond of Jarod? I don't like relying on rumors. Your biography would be helpful. Just sayin. I'll get to my review now. I used to want Jarod and Miss Parker to have sex and be together. Then I watched Keys where she seemed to cringe about his "especially repressed memories" comment when he was asking her to let him help her remember that night her mother was beaten. On the ISLE OF THE HAUNTED she pulled away from that kiss and snatched her hand from his and she seemed so devastated and was not herself. On the show she could be so strong and tough and sexual with men but sometimes it was like she underwent a personality change at times and Jarod seemed more dominant at times and she almost seemed submissive and afraid. On the Island their roles changed. He was cruel at times. She seemed to be losing her mind and seemed to be scared of him. I love to hear all your thoughts on this. I thought that she probably couldn't be with Jarod ever at all in any way. I've never seen it expressed so well, their strange relationship, and it's like you're saying in this story where Jarod fears she's so used to rejecting him that she's trained her body to reject him too and will never be able to do anything but reject him. But I'm curious too and I've wondered how that might look though, how it could happen that they might have sex. This, specifically the part where she presses her hand to his chest and maybe almost changes her mind. You left it to our imaginations what she's thinking then while cautioning him. I think maybe she was changing her mind. There's another here by you I've read where she wants to have sex with him and doesn't want to have sex with him and is so conflicted and thinks their relationship will be the end of her I can't remember the title but there's a lot of songs and she's driving and drinking too much coffee. I remember it was comedy in places but got really serious too. I think that story and this one are exactly the way it would go. She's too opposed to the possiblity. You write it so they can still have a healthy relationship. In this one especially they purge so much pain and that can only be good. I hope you'll continue this and explore their relationship.Reviewer: Shy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/08/19 12:23 am
You always snatch me back here Mirage. You are always worth the wait. I'm glad you aren't overthinking. Just write and post and don't think.
"My place or yours?"
Jarod is fine with what they've done. He would be. It's so natural for him. You wrote them in character as always and the dialog was fresh and raw ..even made me a little uncomfortable it was so like being there with them. I can hear Michael T. Weiss and Andrea saying all of those things and I'm so thankful to you for staying true to the original tv series. Jarod is right. She's been trained to hunt him and feel nothing for him and he's right. She had to suppress the feelings when they did begin to surface and that's what she is used to doing. It's learned behavior, a pattern and unlearning it can't be easy. She's off to a sexy af start though and I need more.Reviewer: Miss Parkere Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/08/19 02:45 am
ooooh. wow. So much to break apart and examine.
- I love that you start us off with them having just finished having sex
- the hands over face ... it's so like Miss Parker that I have to giggle
- Jarod continues to caress her shoulder while she's freaking out
- Jarod is so calm and content and has had other people freak out too
- Jarod gets to be sarcastic
- in an earlier chapter he was sarcastically thinking "where did Eli get HIS sarcasm from and obviously Jarod was blaming Parker but this proves that both of Eli's parents can be sarcastic and I love it.
- I like that you don't have a lot of moaning and ooohs and stuff but just more like reality where Parker is murmuring and sayng sh!t that no one understands
- Jarod says she's tension incarnate and she would be... he's right her body rejects him...and for her own protetction she probably trained her body to reject him and if she was mortified by that almost kiss... and SHE WAS... then yeah yeah yeah she's going to be tense going into this with him... the person she wasn't ever supposed to be with ... they never even touched until Carthis!!!
- I love that you keep it real and still write the best sex scenes. It's too classy to be called smut but isn't too vague because I don't like when authors leave too much to the imagination. I want to know what's happening. I want to SEE the scene I should have seen on TV 20 years ago!! SO THANK YOU FOR SHOWING ME THAT SCENE MIRAGE. You are the best erotic writer ever in fanfic or any fiction or nonfiction. I got so hot reading this and had to have myself some afternoon delight if you get the meaning of that song.
- I like that Jarod knows she's probably got those voices screaming in her head to stop... and she did have the urge to retrieve her pants and not have sex with him.. she was warring in her mind. Jarod was right. But she agreed to stay and even if she was going against her mind it was HER decision.
- I think there's reluctance from her and I think that even though she was a sexual woman with other lovers on the series she did always shrink away from Jarod and you capture that desire-forbiddenness-repulsion-curiosity conflict in her better than anyone.
I love that she has no objections to blaming him for having sex with him. The ending had me rolling laughing. She wants to do it again and is angry that she wants to do it again. You left them satisfied and you left me satisfied too. I just love it all. Please say there'll be more.
Haha. Oh, God. What the hell did I write? I'm afraid to read my own writing.
Date: 15/08/19 09:16 pm
Jarod laid it down epically and it's about time too. On the series he would get in a barbed one-liner and take a jab here and there. I'm glad he finally told her what's what and I still sympathetize with them both. Impressive. Every line is impressive Mirage. Thank you for letting them duke it out verbally before having sex. At the end of all that pain and hurtful words there was not fight left I guess. I'm so curious to know what happens next. I hope you're writing quickly.Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]
Date: 15/08/19 03:51 am
"Could you leave?"
"But it's my house."
Bahaha. This is so like them. What in the hell is Parker going to do now that she's done the unthinkable? I can't wait to find out.
Your notes are hilarious. You had to show us proof of Parker's hands over face in Carthis by supplying a gif. Like really you're not making this up. I know sometimes people act like Parker didn't have a problem with Jarod and someone even said that Jarod pulled away from the kiss but no, the gif and the dvd proves it was Parker that pulled way the hell away from Jarod and covered her face with her hands. You're right Mirage. I don't know how anyone can look at the show or the gif and think Jarod didn't want her. He wanted her. I get what you're saying too. It seemed that she was intentionally going to kiss him and why be mortified if you're willing. Just like with the sex here in this chapter. Jarod kind of pushed her all the way across the room to the door and then offered to open the door. He gave her a chance to leave and made it clear he would never try to stop her and told her she'd never have to defend herself against him. She knew what she was doing. But still she's mortified. Just like in Carthis. It's in character for her to do that. That Centre training is crazy. This chapter is amazing and I want more.Reviewer: Claire Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 15/08/19 03:16 am
More! Please write whatever the hell you want and how EVER you want to but just keep writing. ONLY YOU WRITE THEM THE WAY THEY WERE ON THE TELEVISED SERIES. You keep them in character and their dialougue clever and intelligent. PLUS SEX! YES. More please?Reviewer: Monica Signed [Report This]
Date: 15/08/19 01:16 am
I'm VERY glad you DID post this because as with all your writing it was worth reading! Why shouldn't Miss Parker be mortified!? In "Isle of the Haunted' and here? In the series she was trained to hate him and regard him as an annoying lab rat. Not a man she could potentially be attracted to.
Here he pretended to be dead for thirteen years! I'd have shot him if I were her! No one writes angst quite like you. Or smut. I'm grateful as always that you continue to keep The Pretender alive in whatsoever way you choose to write.
Thank you!Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 14/08/19 10:18 pm
Wow. "Most people wait until morning.." Jarod, Jarod, Jarod. Oh, my God. "Sleep on it before committing to a verdict" .. he legit invited her to stay for some cuddling naptimes and I wish she had but she is Parker and she is the way she is and this is exactly how she'd react. "This hardly warrants God in triplicate" and Jarod goes on to tell her what all does warrant god in triplicate lol... experiences he survived. The one with the kids... yeah, as a parent I can say that eventually the kiddies are going to creep up and find their parent/s having sex. It's weird and embarassing and Godx3 but it's not the worst thing that can happen. I like that you started this with Parker's reaction to having had sex with Jarod and then walking us backwards through and then ending up with her replying to the question he asked and he's all like yeah, another go please. lol. It's so Jarod ish. I love this. You've honed your craft to a high art. I don't call your writing fan fic and I don't call your erotica smut because it's classy and professional. You don't use slang for body parts... after "grab them by the pussy" I appreciate that. Donnie Drumpf ruins everything. Pussy is a cat. Vagina is a body part. I want more of this. I want to see them together eventually and I hope you'll make it happen. I can't stop reading now regardless. You've got your hooks in deep. Thanks for this.Reviewer: The Miss Parker Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/08/19 07:17 pm
Oh uhhh! GOD! Mirage. I want more. I'm hooked. I'm always hooked on your writing. Pretender perfect like always. I won't aggravate you about Michael but I should. You need to meet him. I met him and I lived!!! I think you'd get along really good with him. Until then keep writing. I'm totally addicted to your writing.Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/08/19 04:03 am
Was so stoked to see you back here again. Yes! This is everything. We were denied so much as fans and I feel pretty damn blessed that you know the characters and know where to put them. Congratulations on this and know I'm eternally grateful to you.Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/08/19 11:23 pm
That, young lady, was completely unexpected. Top notch top shelf all the way. The kiss fail giphy gif you provided us in your chapter notes wasn't unexpected. It was painful. Jarod was watching her react badly to almost kissing him and that was painful and I agree with you that it was severe and I think it was maybe out of character for her a little. The tables seemed to turn in that episode and maybe began turning before that when he saved her from Alex in TP2001. Jarod did seem to be heading in a darker direction and Miss Parker was uhghh I hesitate to call her submissive in the IOTH and she's never been submissive in your fics unless she was drugged and even then she fought back and that was Forces Of Nature I'm thinking of now.
In the IOTH telefilm she was altered and Jarod did seem to lead and she seemed to follow. Not submit. I don't want to offend the women in this fandom but she was very very different. And Jarod was different. It was still a cute scene but I didn't see any of the chemistry in that scene that some fans talk about. It wasn't there. You've given them the chemistry and you continue where the series left off and build on what's already established between them.
If they'd made love and hadn't discussed anything this might not have gone over so well with me. Because on the Profiler series when Jarod went over to their show we know that Jarod didn't want to sleep with Rachaeel when she "didn't have a handle on her emotions." Now I will contradict myself and say that Jarod did almost kiss Parker when she didn't have much of a handle on her emotions in Carthis but I think he was caught off guard.
Before the lovemaking they shared the best dialogue I've ever read or heard or seen in this fandom including the tv series and possibly the best I've read ever. Jarod had been protecting her from his own pain I think and if I'm wrong I trust you to correct me and she had to hurt him with her own pain to break him open so it would gush out of him. I think that was a stroke of genius.
They really talked it out and argued and raised their voices and I think Jarod never wanted to shout at her because he was feeling bad about almost saying the words "detain" and "cuff." He's listened to her pain, been ignored, wearily waited while she avoided him. I don't think he intended to shout. He doesn't even curse at all no matter how much she curses and attacks him.
This is so refreshing. He finally gave her some of what she's given him. His tearful "how dare you" was so plausible and visible. The words you write come to life in my mind and I'm there in the room with these characters we all love. It's magic.
They needed to shout, cry, accuse each other and explain themselves. When it was done Miss Parker didn't disagree. She seemed to have a "handle" on everything. There was some flirting. She had time to change her mind. Jarod danced her across the room to the door giving her an easy exit and offered to open the door for her. I also have to say that as far as the lines leading in to the love making Miss Parker's was genius. "It's as good a reason as any." They never struck me as a pair that needed a reason to make love. Solid chapter.
Thank you for writing and sharing this with us. Please never stop.Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/08/19 09:29 pm
Whoa! I freaking love this. You've always been an exceptional author but you've totally outdone yourself too this time. More please?Reviewer: Jennifer Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/08/19 02:51 am
Jarod thinking (in bold? I think I'm right?) that Parker is trying to silence the voices in her head...lol. OMG. I'm thinking he's right about that. Or that she can't endure his voice while having sex with him.. because she would probably be trying to concentrate on the act and he won't let her detach from the act with him... which goes back to earlier in this chapter where she's thinking those can be anyone's hands.... he must know what is in her mind. That must be terrifying for her. You always make me think so much about these characters and oh.hh he is so gentle with her... but she wasn't gentle with her or him and almost broke him. I like that she has all of the power including the power to break his certain body part ;) and I need more. What are they going to do now? Have more sex I hope. It's way overdue. More please!Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/08/19 12:32 am
Love it and want more. I've never seen anyone write them so well!! More? Please?Reviewer: Delana Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 10/08/19 11:38 pm
More please? OMG! So hot. Perfectly written. I love that they are how they were on the tv. Thank you so freaking much!Reviewer: Michelle Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 10/08/19 02:39 am
Hands over face. Yess Parker is so guilty of doing it. You capture them brilliantly always Mirage and leave me craving more. I got so aroused reading this. When Jarod said that about finding her interest in what gets him off flattering and.. ooh. HOT. He can be such a SEXY handful. More please?Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/08/19 12:05 am
This is the hottest thing I've ever read. I love Forces Of Nature and Circles of Hell because Jarod always seemed so dark and everyone talks about the dark scenes but you prove again and again that you write consensual sex exceptionally wonderful too. I've never gotten so hot from reading erotic scenes before. I had to grab my bf before reviewing know what I mean??! ;-) It was also meaningful because of the way Jarod was with her and the revelations to each other. Uhhh! I want MORE! I want it now. You always keep me coming back... and you keep me coming.:-)Reviewer: Karen Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 08/08/19 08:15 pm
Sardonic Jarod. He was savage af! But he wasn't lying. It seemed like things were coming to a head with Parker always waking instead of telling him how she feels and they needed this and we needed some serious sex to happen and I think some of the tension has been relieved between them now. Win-win!! Face concealing degrees lol but she did and that was so out of character for her and you're right. You wanted her to swim for it instead of staying with Jarod. Homicidally glaring Jarod lol. Girl you are hilarious! She ended up cold and wet anyway so i can see that. He was pissed at her. He'd looked at me like that I would have made a swim for the boat too lol. You probably agree. Anyhoo amazingly done as always Mirage. Give us more soon. If you want them to have sex in every chapter until this story is complete I'll be ok with that. hint hint wink wink.
Jarod saying "ladies first" while watching Parker as they fuck and knowing she's close to orgasming is probably the most Jarod thing ever and I know Parker's hands over face thing was just keeping in character as she was on the tv series. Jarod seemed dominate during the IOTH show and Parker seemed demur and submissive and... it was freaking weird. But she recovered well in this and you still kept her in character. Thank you for all you do to keep this fandom alive and the characters alive. I love it. I've said it before. I wish you were writing the novels. You know these characters so well.Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/08/19 08:08 pm
OMG!!! I am SO in love with this story. I read tons of sex scenes but yours blow them all away and thank you for letting this pair confront each other with their pain finally. They argued, they both got emotional, they were both honest, and then sex. It needed to happen all of it needed to happen and IN that order. I love the gif you added in the end notes too. Jarod was actually watching her cover her face so that must have sucked for him lol. His emotional HOW DARE YOU was gut wrenchinng and Parker's internal thoughts about the floor splitting the f open and swallowing her ... ahhhh you write them the way they were meant to be written the way they are on the tv series. Beautiful. Congrats! Please give me more. More sex for them would be great too. ;)Reviewer: JarodandParker4ever Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 08/08/19 12:35 am