Eli's runaway attempt is really a pivot in this novel that I didn't see coming and one that again shows how serious all of this and how complicated. You really excel with characterizations, advancing the story, transitioning scenes, dialog, all of it.
I was shook to learn that MP knew Jarod would return to Scotland too but I shouldn't have been because that makes sense. His mom was injured and wouldn't have got far. So much Pretender feels here. I need more.
Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 12/09/20 04:36 am
Oh. Oh, wow. That last line is the bitch slap to end all bitch slaps. Jarod deserves it. She was in love with him I think so yes I think this would be the correct reaction. Eli is amazing as is Stella, the Miss Parker whisperer. Love that.
Magnificent prose and story telling. More please?
Author's Response:
I think she might have been in love with him- or at least loved him. I'm glad you like it. Thanks you so much for reading and for the lovely review, Contessa.
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 06/03/19 03:49 am
So... Mirage, you have outdone yourself again. Let me start by saying I'm not THAT Michael so you can stay relaxed and all.. I read another review and I got curious but anyway I'm not an actor and never have been..Someone on twitter found my twitter and asked me if the reviewer named.. well I would never want to freak you out by pretending to be that Michael.
With that out of the way....
I love this story and that Miss Parker shows Jarod her pain. That last line hurt Jarod. He won't recover for a long time. You characters are perfect. The characters we already know are perfect. Over all this is a solid chapter and Pretender calibre and can't get better. More please? Please don't stay away so long next time.
Until next time..
Author's Response:
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 25/02/19 09:17 pm
Okay I love this and I'm so hooked. You are an amazing storyteller and writer and I need more. Now. Yeah this is perfect and Eli is so realitstic. Parker should be pissed at Jarod. I like how plausible it all is when you write them. Please keep writing. I mean it. Don't stop writing ever.
Oh and touche on the review response. So I wasn't really bullying meanly just playing with you about meeting the real Jarod so I'm glad you're not angry and you don't take things seriously. But now I see that it's my fault that I haven't introduced you to Michael T. Weiss.... I see what you did there and I like it. You probably didn't expect this but now I will have to fix my mistake by totally introducing you two because he is so damn wonderful and I know you will freaking love him...I can even take you out partying and get you drunk first or get a beta blocker... some of his fans get woozy and too excited. This one girl I knew was so freaked out nervous it was 2 cute. She was terrified lol. But he's soooo nice. He's really so nice. The nicest ever. He really puts women at ease and he really put his arm around me and everything for my selfie with him. Hot. You'll lvoe it. It's sooooo exciting. Every fan who writes fan fic for the Pretender HAS to meet him. You HAVE to do it. I sent you an email.
Author's Response:
Um.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 23/02/19 01:15 am
There you ARE! I love this. I love Jarod's "what I mean is what the hell do you mean Jarod' lol. Parker plays this out well, giving a calm face and she must be going a little crazy inside but doesn't show that until she's alone with Jarod again. She's loyal to her children and will do the thing that makes them happy and that is the best for them even if it hurts her and means having to include Jarod who really shouldn't have vanished the way he did. Her confession that she never fought him or he would have been in a cage is why she's having such a hard time. I love his reaction to learning that she could have cornered him when he returned to Scotland to chase the lead on his mother... and that's so plausible in the direction the show could take after Carthis.
Thank you so much for keeping these characters alive and relevant and in a way that makes sense. I will be grateful always.
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you're liking this, Chloe.
Thank you for reading and for the lovely review.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 19/02/19 01:03 am
Hooray! So glad you're back with an update to this. First off don't say sorry for not updating sooner. You don't owe me an apology at all after everything you've given us. I know how real life is and I get that you're busy and you're like everyone else and you get stressed out. I know before you said you like to disconnect as much as possible from the interwebs. Really I get it. You do the best you can and... wow that's extremely amazing. Just do what you have to for you and write when you can. Second off... this was the best thing ever. I love Stella. I love Eli. I love the plausibility and that Parker would still be resentful of Jarod and pissed. She's not going to just be over that so soon. He hurt her deeply by not letting her know he was still alive and that's why Eli was raised without his biological father... all that missed time and now the run away attempt. Parker would totally react this way.
That last line. Ow! Jarod's going to be hurting bad for a while from that one.
More. Please?
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 18/02/19 08:11 pm
Welcome back Mirage! You have been sorely missed! But this was worth the wait! I've said before how well I feel you flesh out Jarod and Miss Parker. It's also true of the characters you have created.
It's hilarious how much like Miss Parker Eli is. 'He is right here!' That was great! Eli is like a combination of both of them. This was a great chapter. Nice father and son moments. Eli seems more mature than either of his parents!
Thank you as always for both updating and creating Pretender stories. You are basically the only one keeping Miss Parker and Jarod 'alive'. I'm very grateful for that!
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 17/02/19 04:28 pm
