You excel at every aspect of writing, including children and children is where most authors lose me because most people think kids are just dumb.  You give them personalities that I fall in love with. I love their snark.

More tension. There was a lot of tension on the show and between Jaord and MP so yeah, makes sense and I love it.

This part where Parker tells on herself.

Oh Wowz. I need more of this in my life like now. You're freaking amazing. More please?

Oh Mirage it's so lovely to have you back and a hell of a ride this one is already. I was reading along thinking Jarod was dead and then ...no. It's so like you to kill Jarod and so I was convinced he was a goner lol. He has a way doesn't he because at the end of chapter 4 he's saying "don't do this for me, do it for Eli" and that is classic Jarod. You know him well. Even if you don't like him well. He can be creepy sometimes.. I recall another of your wonderful novels where you described his conversation with Miss Parker and how she was feeling while he interrogated her and it was something like "intensines churning" and then "or a cloth being wrung out" like twisting at the ends or something anyway yeah I felt aLOT like Miss Parker when I watched some of the Pretender episodes.. he can be cringey. Risque Business was one of them.. that whole conversation with Blass and Jarod can be just...weird. You capture that perfectly. Pretender perfectly. Don't stop. I love your writing.

Didn't expect an update so soon my God Mirage you write quickly and don't lose quality. Nice flow.. oh, god there's nothing I can say here. After that chapter I can hardly think. It's amazing and I just want more. Always gracious to you for keeping these characters and the heart and soul of this show alive. It shakes me.

Uh huh yes more. So much to love here. "Faye is a bitch." Lol. How could Parker disagree with that wisdom? Out of the mouth of babes. It's true. Not many people write the children dymanic so well but you do it brilliantly. The interaction between Avery and Jarod... oh, heartwarming but not cheesy. It's a vivid scene and as much as you don't LOVE Jarod you always do right by him and you have to admit it, he's great with kids. He probably still identifies with them. Your Muses seem to know it. The flowers. Wild ones. So nice. I googled some names of flowers and thought... ahhh Mirage you have a nice eye for nature. Jarod's "does anyone own a cat" was funny, so true there. Cats own people not the other way around lol. Love it.

He was respectful of Eli as the current man of the house and waited for permission which again... such a Jarod thing to do. He doesn't do the same with Parker or adults in general much but with kids he treads carefully and I love that about him and about you for understanding Jarod so well. 

Good of Jarod to call Parker on her attempts to manipulate, "you don't have a monopoly on " wow. We know that pain and maybe fear of losing Jarod a second time is the root of her deceit... in chapter 1 or 2 there was mention that she'd survived without Jarod and built a life and she didn't think she could do it a second time. I think Jarod doesn't know the extent of damage or that's my understanding so far.

Now this honey, "You and I... we'll always be unfinished business" holy wowz Mirage. But again he's forward and candid. Painful honesty.

The ending we see him asking her not to think about his rights... he knows that she thinks he has no right even though legally he does...to consider Eli's rights.  That's Soooooo freaking like Jarod. I'd love to buy your novel. It's the only novel I'd buy. You're brilliant. Underrated talent. I hope you are writing somewhere for money. I feel guilty that this is free. The quality is superb. More please?