wow, i have to say: many people tried to write a good reunion-scene between jarod and his mother. but i never really had the impression that it really worked, it never felt right. but your scene - i have to, is awesome. really lovely how you describe it and it seems real. also miss parkers speech and conversation with jarod's father: really really well written, i was on my toes. also how jarod reacts is beautifully realistic and not too cheesy. the only thing i could critic on is the little note how j and mp moved closer to jarods parents as they meet again: hand in hand. it was sweet, but in my tastes a little bit too sweet. anyway, it wasn't important to me and i LOVEd this chapter. soo looking forward what you got in store about lyle and master parker... i'm stoked! thanks so much again and again.
Author's Response:
Well, I was waiting for you review lipamo.
First of all, thanks for the compliments. I think it's pretty hard to write about a reunion if you don't have it in your heart. In my mind, I've always thought that this would be wonderful for Jarod, but he would also have so many questions for his mother.
In other fictions I wrote, Major Charles accepts Miss Parker's presence with his son, but lately I've been thinking that maybe it wouldn't be 'so' simple, so I had to write a more resistent Major Charles.
For the "hand in hand" thing, I added it while I was reading the chapter before publishing. I thought it was a nice touch to make Jarod show his parents that he and Miss Parker are an item. But I appreaciate your note about it. Maybe it was too sappy =)
Reviewer: lipamo Signed
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