Forgot to tell this: I'm curious about where you intend to take your story. So far, aside from some typos and syntax, I'm enjoying the plot. You might also want to pay some closer attention to the way your characters behave. At times, they seem too erratic and imature for their age, not to mention their personality. All this considerered, be sure I'll give you a full review once this story is finished. Have fun!
Reviewer: Joel Gomes Signed [Report This]Date: 20/08/13 11:39 pm
Missing sibling: Major Charles? Ben Miller? I´m curious.
Reviewer: Joel Gomes Signed [Report This]Date: 20/08/13 11:35 pm
PLEASE continue with 'Hold Fast To Dreams'
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/08/13 08:55 pm
I reviewed this at ff.net but since I'm seeing it here I'll leave you a review here too. I really like this first chapter, interested to see where you take this. Please do continue! :)
Reviewer: flymeaway Signed [Report This]Date: 12/07/13 03:43 am
Very good start ! Carry on pleease !
Author's Response:
thanks for the review! :D ok, will do.
Reviewer: lucy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/07/13 04:47 pm
Very amusing to see Broots whine a bit. He would never have in the past. Can't wait to see where this is going.
Author's Response:
My Broots is a lil bit pissy with Miss Parker, yes, hehehe. thanks for the review!
Reviewer: M Rose Signed
[Report This]Date: 06/07/13 09:40 pm
nice. not telling your BFF that you were going to post this, WTF?
D'uh, of course continue!!!
Author's Response:
dude, i'm sorry, i forgot. and it was a whim! and it was like, 4 in the morning, do you want me to call you next time?! hehehe
ok, ok, no need to get all testy about it. sheesh, show a little appreciation for the free entertainment! ;)
Reviewer: KSPretenderFan Signed [Report This]Date: 06/07/13 05:08 pm
