Mmmmm.... I was just wondering - if her big secret is marriage - there is till one major question - who was framing her with murders and why? And why Michael is after her and no the other way around?
Author's Response:
Who and why are two questions that have yet to be answered but I rarely answer every question until the story completes itself and that's just the crazy way I write and that isn't subject to change. If you're still unclear about anything, by all means, leave another question or send an email and I will once again respond as soon as I can. Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 24/03/11 08:19 am
Amazing update, didn't see that twist coming...Lyle is so sick. You have a great writing style and you've nailed the characters once again. Miss Parker is just as she is on TP but has/is evolving as has Jarod and even though they still have all those problems they are working through them. I can't wait for the next update. Will there be at least a steamy scene or two and what did Angelo mean by danger, does that mean she is in danger or will be in danger?
Author's Response: Hi, TheDarkAngel, and thank you for reading and reviewing. There will a steamy scene in the coming chapters. Angelo means danger. It's not over yet.
[Report This]Date: 22/03/11 10:29 pm
Loved it - not too sugary at all. Finally, we know the secret that's been driving her! And it reinforces Lyle's digustingness. Looking at it from an outsider's perspective (or even Jarod's), it's not as horrible as Parker thinks, since obviously she didn't marry HER TWIN out of her own free will. But I think you built it believeably that to her, it's a source of tremendous shame. Like Jarod noted, no one just waltzes away from multiple bouts of torture without some mental damage.
And I take your point in response to my last review - Lyle is/was sick enough that he might very well enjoy drawing out the horrible anticipation of what might happen.
Angelo's certainly welcome, especially since he's got the clues. And his reaction to Parker's distress is sad indeed. Of course, my favorite part was the end, and I hope Jarod & MP grow even closer, now that her secret's out.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jane Q. Doe. I'm pleased that you were happy with the chapter. You are correct about perspectcive. It's always easier for the outsider to see things objectively. And you are correct about mental damage as well. Problems will continue to rise as a result of both Parker and Jarod's suffering, the games they played, his imprisonment and hers but I think they'll be sharing the pain and leaning on each other for support for the most part, and will grow stronger together, and grow much closer. Much, much, much closer. Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 21/03/11 02:04 am
I really liked this chapter! Finally are Jarod and Parker getting closer! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you, Anna, and yes, they are getting closer and will get closer still, I assure you. Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 20/03/11 08:11 pm
What can I say - it's just amazing. Thank you for sharing this with us. And of course can't wait for the next chapter:):)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing, Kama. The next chapter was just posted. Hope it isn't too sweet.
[Report This]Date: 18/03/11 06:09 pm
Great updates! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Hi anon, thank you.
Date: 13/03/11 11:44 am
Did Parker really kill Lyle or is it just her imagination? What is the secret she tries so desperately to disguise? What really happened in renewal wing and during months of inprisonment? Who is this Michael guy and what can be solved in only 20 hours that couldn't have been done before? Too much questions left.....
The story is so intriguing and with such strong characters, that I keep looking for updates at least twice a day...
Please, please, please don't keep us waiting for too long to find the answers....
Author's Response: Hi and thanks, Mandy. I just updated with the answers. Most all of the answsers. Reviewer: Mandy Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 09/03/11 02:11 pm
keeps getting better and better...
Author's Response: Hi and thanks, Focus. I hope it continues to get better.
[Report This]Date: 08/03/11 11:29 am
Thank you for this amazingly well written story. You've been able to capture the essence of the characters perfectly and you have us, the readers, standing by impantiently waiting for a new chapter. Please go on. I want to know the rest of it.
Author's Response: Thank you, Vania, for reading and reviewing. Wow, I'm relieved the characters are to your liking, always a tough one for me. Thanks again.
Date: 06/03/11 12:58 pm
Ah, the mystery of Parker's paternity solved! Glad to have that aspect clarified. Of course, I've got tons more questions...
Lyle is such a slimy, creepy bastard. She should get a medal for killing him. I'm not sure I buy that he would've waited all that time to rape her though. And I'm baffled as to why Parker is so afraid of Michael - what does he have on her??? Inquiring minds want to know! :) Also, does this mean she was tortured by Lyle at the Centre approximately 6 years prior to the story, and then imprisoned and tortured again by the Tanakas? Parker, even though she's frustrating not just spilling the secrets and letting Jarod & her family help her, is truly a magnificent character. It'd even be reasonable, given all she's suffered, if she was mentally unfit at this point.
Like your other stories, I don't want it to end because I'm enjoying it, but I also DO want to see it complete to get my questions answered! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jane Q. Doe. Indeed, he is a creepy bastard. I felt that Lyle would use Parker until he was prepared to discard her. Until then, I don't think he'd do anything to hinder her work so he wouldn't break her right away. I also think he'd get his thrills from allowing her to believe she'd walk away after a year of promising to allow her to leave/her family to live, but it's all a matter of opinion anyway, I guess; however, I hope it doesn't ruin the story for you.
And yes, your time estimates are accurate, regarding her imprisonments. And of course, I will complete this. Thanks again.
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/03/11 04:38 pm
Itching to find out what's on the disc!
Author's Response: Thanks g18, I just updated with the answers.
[Report This]Date: 05/03/11 11:16 am
Oh my God!...I just frickin' loved that!(..did I just write"frickin"??)
This is deffinitely a 10! You managed to capture Lyle's insane side perfectly! Just how I always imagined him to be when he has Parker in his hands. He's such a wacko.. lmao. I honestly had to laugh out loud at his lunacy. Jumping from cold blooded tormentor to twisted horny ass to caring lover/brother "I'll show u my love". HAHA! How fucked up can one person be,eh!? And how weird am I for laughing about it? ;-p
It truly showed his insanity and twisted desire for his sister. The perfect way to describe it"he was excited by the prospect of breaking her, taking such a magnificent thing and bringing it crumpling helplessly to its knees". 100% to the point!
Also really liked J's reaction to the video. Hell I even had a headache from that Michael Patrick smashing MissP's head into the ground moment. (pour thing)
And then I just have to love you for making me admire MissP even more...if that is possible. ;-) She's so incredibly strong. Wow.But not to an impossible degree which would make her appear unhuman. You managed to make her bend by Lyle's will. Being slightly submissive where she had to be. Clearly she had no choice. But yet she isn't broken (at least not mentally ;-) and still has defiance in her. Even when she's pleading and sobbing. Dunno how u did that,but u made it happen. Incredible.
Hope to read more of those lyle-parker-scenes. And am really curious as to why Parker won't talk about Michael P's whereabouts.
Keep on the great work!! :-)
Author's Response:
Hi, Ice Angel. Frickin'? haha, I was laughing out loud at your review. You know, Ice Angel, most SANE people would take your words as an insult but I'm pleased that you think I captured Lyle perfectly. What a compliment! I'm just recovering from flu right now and these reviews made my day. Yes, you're weird for laughing. SO I AM. Weird is a requirement for TP Fans.
Yep, poor J, he's got a few more headaches before this ends, haha. Poor guy.
Oh, now Miss Parker was slightly mroe difficult. She's never been in this position and trying to figure out how she'd react isn't easy because underneath the concrete and steel, she's not always so tough. I'm glad you liked it, really. Wow. These long stories are so easy to abandon, I just want to give up.
There may not be too many more lyle-parker scenes, just posted one and I'll see what else comes to mind. And I promised, Parker's behavior concerning Michael Patrick will be explained in the very next chapter. Thanks so much for the r &r.
Reviewer: IceAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 28/02/11 09:31 pm
The intrigue just keeps up!
Best story I ever read.
Please keep going - can't wait to find out what is the big secret, that Parker has...
Author's Response:
Hello and thank you, Hanna. We find out all about Parker's big secret in the next chapter that will be titled, "..and the truth shall set you free" in which the truth about everything comes out and it get might get just a hair syrupy.
And then shortly after, all of this should end. Mercifully.*fingers crossed*
Reviewer: Hanna Anonymous [Report This]Date: 28/02/11 08:18 am
Both pretender movies should have been based on your story - its so interesting and exciting... the intensity of characters is awersome !
Please, please, please don't keep us waiting too long for next chapter... I really look forward to it !!! :))
Author's Response: Hi, Lisa, oh, I don't know what to type. Thank you. So much. The intensity is a bit crazy but I'm working on it. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 27/02/11 09:33 pm
Great update! really look forward for next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks, Phoenix, the next chapter was just posted. Reviewer: Phoenix Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 27/02/11 01:21 am
Best plot ever! Please,please update soon !
Author's Response: Thanks, Cuddles, erm, I wish it was the best plot ever. Thanks for thinking it is. Just updated.
[Report This]Date: 27/02/11 01:17 am
Another amazing chapter! You keeping this story going is truly appreciated. There are so many amazing writers to this fandom that haven't updated in ages and it's great that you're still here chugging along.
I love the tone of your story. And I love how tense Parker and Jarod are. I believe you're doing their characters justice! Thanks so much for all your hard work and please keep going!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, greyphoenix, it's been a blast writing for the most part. I'm hoping to end the super tenseness and give them some happiness, to some extent. Wow, I'm so relieved that I'm doing justice to the characters, they're so difficult.
There are some very amazing writers and I'm pleased to see that a few are making their way back here.
Reviewer: greyphoenix Anonymous [Report This]Date: 26/02/11 05:53 am
i LOVE this...please please update soon :) i love the angst, drama, and ohyeah did i mention angst? :D
one of the very few writers that still write pretender fanfic and is still updating...u deserve a truckload of pez candies!
Author's Response:
Thanks, judy. I'm fairly certain that there will be more angst. Good news. I'll update again as soon as possible. Oh and there are a few more writers now, and I'm so glad to see that. Check out their stories. Thanks again for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: judy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 25/02/11 07:06 am
This story is amazing! It happened for the first time, that I read the story with flushed face and with heart beating faster:) It's terrible, that Miss Parker had to go through so much pain, but maybe she needed it to understand some things... But I'm happy, that it was no rape in your story, she didn't deserve that. If they made the third Pretender movie based on your story, it would be better than the previous two. Can't wait for the continuation:)
Author's Response: Thanks, Kama. Wow, I'm completely blown away by the compliments. The continuation was just posted and I hope it will be at least as good as the previous chapter. Thanks again for the r&r.
Date: 24/02/11 07:40 pm
Oh, Mirage, that was lovely and angsty, so Parker and Jarod-ish. They're attracted to each other but conditioned to hate and it's hard not to fall into old patterns. Toss in the fact that he's frustrated and angry as hell, and we have a volatile frappe. I liked the Lyle and Parker scenes and you wrote that with such detail that I could see and feel it. Jarod is grown up finally but he can't exactly hop into bed with her quite yet and I don't blame him for being guarded. She's hurt him before. Well, in summary, this was brilliant. My only complaint is the chapters are too short. Give us more darkness please?
Author's Response: Mmm, can't give you too much more darkness. I don't think. They are conditioned to hate but they're working on it. Maybe. I guarantee nothing. Thanks for the r&r.
[Report This]Date: 23/02/11 08:37 pm
Uhh..ouch! Leaving MissP hanging high like that sure screams for trouble. ;-)
Can't believe you FINALLY let the lips of those two get to know each other. ;-)
Again very exciting chapter.
Love it how you bring all different sorts of characters from the show together. Every one adding a little secret to the whole piece. Makes it very X-files-conspiracy-like...and I'm addicted to those kinds of conspiracies. :-)
Am sure curious what that whole Michael Patrick deal was, Jarod was referring to. Hope I didn't miss anything there. ;-)
Verymuch enjoyed that stammering Jarod moment "You were somewhat pixelated..uh, in places, and some areas were entirely blacked out." *chuckles* Had immediately a picture of "The Sims" (PC game) in my head. Embarassed Jaord is cute and fun to play with. ;)
Am intrigued,as always, as to what is gonna happen next.
Hopefully boy wonder will survive MissP's hurt pride. hehe.
Author's Response: Thanks, Ice Angel. haha, No ouches for Jarod. These two reacted without thinking, so it's not one of those rejection/spurned/hurt pride situations, and I'm addressing all of that in ms word at the moment, just taking a break. Indeed, an uncomfortable Jarod is a riot to play with, but all of the characters are great fun to play with. Thanks for the R & R. Reviewer: IceAngel Signed
[Report This]Date: 31/01/11 09:05 pm
Ahhh!! You gave it to us, and then you yanked it awayyyyy! :) Of course I loved the kiss, but I also like how Jarod & MP seem to be tiptoeing closer. They fight, but they make-up, and try to restrain themselves even in the midst of the battle. Parker's a good sister (at least to a non-psychopathic brother), and I like when Jarod makes her laugh or smile. She doesn't seem to have done much of that in the past.
Forgive me, but I can't recall - did we ever learn if Syd is her biological father? I can buy their relationship and closeness either way, but I was thinking I might have missed the explanation.
Can't wait for Chapter 15!
Author's Response:
Hi, Jane Q. Doe, yes, I know I yanked it away but at least I gave it, right? Right? They are tip toeing closer. She is a great sister, always was on the show. (not to Lyle)
I'm hoping P and J will share many more smiles because she certainly deserves it. No, you're absolutely correct, Jane, I never explained Parker's paternity, only made mention Syd as her dad a few times but I will and thanks for understanding. 15 chapters already? WOW! That's insane. I'll try to end this thing under 20.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 29/01/11 12:36 am
Love your story, best plot I have read !!!! Really look forward for sequel... u left me wondering on the most exciting and captivating moment... KR
Author's Response: Thank you so much, the update is in the works. I'll have it up by Tuesday. Thanks again.
Date: 25/01/11 05:15 pm
Interesting chapter and amazing writing and i just want to know what happens next!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the r&r dimana, I'm writing as fast as I can.
Date: 24/01/11 08:46 am
You NAILED this chapter. Sex scenes are difficult to write and make them work for the reader. Your scene was well done. Yes, I know it wasn't complete but the way you wrote it and how it ended was exactly as I would have pictured Jarod behaving under those circumstance.
Your writing had clarity stamped upon it. It was clearly writen, no misunderstanding what was going on. I liked the emotional tone between all the characters, but particularly P & J. Fantastic job with the writing, with capturing emotion and for adding another fun chapter to read.
I totally enjoyed it.
Author's Response:
I tried to nail it and in the end, crossed my fingers and posted it. Sex scenes are extremely difficult to write, well for me. You make it look so easy. *sticks out tongue* I'm envious.
Jarod is not only concerned for her but he's afraid for his heart as well. Can't blame the guy, really.
Once again, I'm blown away by a review. Just..thanks. Thanks so much, nightowl.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 23/01/11 03:56 am
