looks great hope to read more soon
Author's Response: Thank you! Feeling guilty as I read, "hope to read more soon," then see a date from over a year ago, hehe! Reviewer: Janeway Signed
[Report This]Date: 05/05/09 08:08 am
For a first time out, you've done a wonderful job. Leaving the reader wanting more is one of traits of a good writer. Your plot is unique and creative; I'm intrigued by the idea of Margaret and Catherine being sisters and the subplot of having Mr. P. alive gives great opportunity for new storylines.
I suggest you proof your work by reading the story out loud; it really helps you catch goofs that spell check misses. The other recommendation is that you try to weave in more descriptive prose, i.e. create the setting by describing the environment in which the characters interact. What really helps with that is the use of metaphors.
If you couldn't tell I'm a beta reader; my email is: topanga90290@sbcglobal.com Let me know if you're interested in working with me. In any event, keep up the good work. You're off to an excellent start.
Author's Response:
Hi Topanga,
I read your review a very long time ago and feel rude for having never responded (I meant to, yet never did for some unknown reason)! Thank you so much for the compliments and also for the constructive criticism. I appreciate them both and find everything you so nicely said absolutely true. I've reworked the chapters I had previously uploaded in the hopes of making them better.
Thanks again!
~Amelia
Reviewer: Topanga Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/03/09 08:49 pm
I like your story very much. It seems to be a good sequel to IOTH. I hope you'll post more soon, and I hope to read an happy ending...or I'm asking too much? Sorry, I can't help, I'm a shipper...bye
Author's Response: Thanks (and sorry it took so long!) :) Haha, well, who doesn't want a happy ending?! Reviewer: loveyoujar Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/02/09 08:02 pm
An interesting new perspective. I can't wait to find out what Miss Parker is up to. Awaiting the next chapter!
Author's Response: A very belated "Thank you very much"!!
[Report This]Date: 22/10/08 10:42 pm
Hi Skyline,
I really like this story, even if it's only just starting.
I like how you have written it from different points of views, I have a feeling they'll soon mix up though.
Pleeease write more!
xxx
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm sorry it's taken almost two years for me to thank you for the very kind review! Reviewer: LS Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/10/08 10:31 pm
Great start to this story. I'm loving it. Will Jarod find his Mom when they go to the house? Will Mr. Parker make it to his destination? And why is Miss Parker leaving the Centre? Please update soon.
Author's Response: Though this review is from a long time ago, I figure it's better to say "Thank you" later than never. So...thank you!! :) And I'm sorry I didn't say it sooner!
[Report This]Date: 22/10/08 10:24 pm
