The interaction between Parker and Lyle is great, they are both so in character. Jarod's bouncing is hilarious.
Poor Emily really does seem to be having a bad hair day, though ;) And then to be stuck in a car with a mightly nervous Broots...
There's one thing that I don't understand in this chapter, though: How does the first part from Jarod's POV fit together with the rest of the chapter that starts with MP's POV?
Hehe, "bad hair day" that's one (very clever I might add) way to put it.
Oh yes, got to love the twin powa, yay Whashaza and KatieQ, and Tinanaz's nutty Jarod too of course.
As for the Jarod/Miss P bit, I believe that would be my fault (supposed to be coding it and all), I was supposed to put it all in italics *cheats by going back and doing so now instead* insinuating that it is a druggy dream sequence and therefore not actually taking place outside of Jarod's head. Sort of like when Alex "woke up" a few chapters back, which I coincidentally also forgot to put in italics now that I think about it (I'm not a very good coder, am I? *smacks own wrist*. ). Thanks for asking so I had a chance to clear everything up. After all what would we be without feedback? Not fanfic writers that's for sure.
Enjoy new chapter
- ManolineReviewer: Cathy Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/08/08 03:29 pm