Very well written, though the twin thing does give me pause. I thought Kyle was considerably younger than Jarod. Though they do look pretty close in age in the Centre flashbacks, in the "current day" parts there's a great deal of difference in their ages.
Fascinating idea, though, having it all kind of be Major Charles' fault.Reviewer: Haiza Tyri Signed [Report This]
Date: 29/06/09 11:24 pm
Interesting! I am looking forward to see how you develop this!
Why thank you! I'm looking forward to seeing how I develop this too:)
My thinking for this is to write it like a series of episodes; questions will carry over from story to story, but each will have a separate focus and an independent storyline (cause I'm told it's no fun to find oneself stuck in the middle of two multi-chapter pieces at once with fans clamoring for more of both *wink, wink*)
Anyway, thanks for another great review!Reviewer: KatieQ Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/11/07 09:14 pm
Good job. I like this story a lot so far.
Author's Response: Thanks! This series is a lot of fun, so it's good to see that people are enjoying reading it too. There's more in the works, but it'll have to take a back seat to other projects like developing "Flight of Memory" and not flunking out of uni. Reviewer: Starbits7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/11/07 06:35 pm
Ohhh, I like this story. So the evil Dr. Raines has had his hand in the breaking up of more than one set of twins for the Centre. And having Jarod and Kyle as twins helps explain why the boys looked so much alike in age when they first met. The only question I still have is how did Harriet Tashman know about Kyle, then. I can't see the Major admitting what he did. Did he just it off as an elaborate kidnapping scheme later on? Hmm.
Author's Response: Yes, the "twin" angle was one I hadn't seen done--which is surprising considering how much fanfic is devoted to strange and surprising family connections. There's more in the works, so hopefully I'll be able to fill in the blanks with plausible explanations. I'm mum till I have time to sit down and write the next installment!
Date: 10/11/07 11:08 am
You kept me captivated for the whole chapter. Good start and conceivable. Looking forward to more. Hopes this kicks my muse into action. ;-)
Yay! I like it when I'm captivating:)
Glad to hear you thought it was conceivable; that was my biggest worry with this piece--that it would stray too far from the "canon" path. There are sequels planned, but like I said, this is a side project for when I have down-time from "Memory."Reviewer: whashaza Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 10/11/07 04:12 am