Very nice!  I have to say I really liked this one.  The only complaint I have is that it's too short and I wish you had taken the time to develope it more.  You could have done so much with this story and the story line and I've seen some of your other work so I know you have the talent to craft a great story.

Author's Response: Thank you. Your comment meant a lot to me. I'm glad that you liked it even if it was short.