Wow, that was hot, such animalistic passion! Makes me look forward to the next chapter. But you should definitely up the rating on this one. I so need a cold shower now.
Author's Response: I will take the rating under advisement, and I suspect the next chapters may get even hotter. I have this strange desire for a computer genius, and Broots just floats to mind... who knows where that might lead before I get all the problems solved. Reviewer: Cathy Signed
[Report This]Date: 05/02/07 04:59 am
Jacs, this chapter is definitely hot ! I'll admit it, I was on the edge of my seat biting my nails at the beginning! But you really turned up the heat and I could feel the passion of the characters. Never have I seen such raw animal instincts displayed so graphically. I really think you should change the rating, this chapter left me blushing. I'm as amazed as Blade is with all the sexual over tones. Little did I suspect you could be so bold and explicit!
BTW are you saying that I have a problem with adding color to my stories? ;)
Author's Response: Absolutely not. lmao. I was making no reference to your coding of colours at all. I see some Parker-like paranoia seeping in there.. hee hee.
I may have let the smut get a little out of hand but, meh, what can i say?
[Report This]Date: 05/02/07 12:55 am
This is the sex chapter isn't it? Wow, so hot. And blue. Hot and blue = the best ever.
Plz continue omg.
Author's Response: If i clearly mark it as complete, then will that just encourage you to want me to continue even more???
I think we can expect much more continuing coming up... i hope
Reviewer: Blade Mistress Signed
[Report This]Date: 04/02/07 10:30 pm
Wow, I really don't know what to say about this chapter. I'm beside myself. I can see why you said more trouble on the way. Hope everything works out. Can't wait until the next chapter.
Author's Response: I am afraid my prediction has turned out to be prophetic. I think i have the Innersense. Although i think it is of the Angelo-garbled variety. The little trouble i was predicting has turned out to be big steamroller trouble. So the damn voices LIED!!!!!
Date: 04/02/07 09:34 pm
this installment really didn't have the same emotional investment as your previous parts. I could feel the frustration of the main character as if i was living it myself. Nice portrayal, although i much more for angsty type pieces myself. Blue is cool though. Can't wait to read chapter 8!
Author's Response: I am sorry to disappoint you KatieQ. You can well imagine how difficult it is to keep up with this kind of emotional intenstiy, I fear it is all getting to be a bit too much for me.
Date: 04/02/07 07:37 pm
