Very good! I like the story, it's interesting and I can see you really tried to slow down and be more detailed then some of your previous stories. I'm so happy to see that you did that! It still feels like you're trying to find a balance between writing too fast or too slow. That delicate balance takes time so don't feel discouraged. I'll be the first to admit, I haven't reached that point yet and I often drag things out. But you are getting there and this story doesn't feel rushed!
I liked the details and I'm hoping you will continue with a chapter 2. This is a very nice start. :)Reviewer: RaChell Signed [Report This]
Date: 25/04/07 09:18 pm