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Title: Chapter 3

Gotta say that my favorite part of how you write Miss Parker is how she doesn't flinch at all from anything. She interrupted Jarod quickly and just told him she'd had an abortion with no shame and omg I love that. Women have been having abortions because of men's crimes since the beginning of woman so yeah fuck everyone who has a problem with it. It's almost like MP wanted to piss Jarod off or upset him but I love Jarod for this he didn't condemn her. Perfect. Your no taboo no shame approach is fucking awesome.

 Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/09/20 02:14 am
Title: Chapter 2

Jarod hasn't changed.... and Jarod has changed. They both have and haven't. They've grown but together that tension sinks between them and it's like sparks but Parker doesn't have a gun anymore so it's not as exhilaritating as it once was.

You nail the characters like no other and the dynamic between them and the dynamite between them. These are just gonna be small thought reviews I had when I read this a moment ago. You can tell I got to get back to work lol.

 Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/09/20 02:11 am
Title: Chapter 1

So let me tell you. I just read this whole thing and so far I love it!

I tried to get on twitter to tell the world how much I love it and share you and spread the pretender love like it says to do on this page but twitter locked my damn account and suspended me or something but not really suspended just the fascist we want your phone number and personal info type of suspended. But I love this.

You should know it. Keep writing. I'm gonna review all of the chapters cos sista lady you deserve it.

 Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/09/20 02:08 am
Title: Chapter 12

1. You portray me better than anyone else I've read.

2. Write more.

3. Now.

4. Thank you.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind words.

 Reviewer: Jarod n Michael Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31/08/20 01:51 am
Title: Chapter 12

Ooh this chapter is a refreshing shift from real life and maybe from so much Pretender darkness. I'll be honest anything seems better than real life sometimes with all the politics and police brutality. I don't live in the US and even I am tired of hearing about Donald 'pussy grabber' 'wishes a sex trafficker well' 'uses music against the wishes of the artist' Trump.

 

I even read Forces of Nature again.. my printed copy of it.

So thank you. I mean... really thank you Mirage. You write and you write so well that I can escape from dumb trump and coronavirus for as long as I read you. That's special. You have a special gift and I thank you for sharing it with me.



Author's Response:

Haha. Oh, my God, you read FON? Again? You're a glutton for punishment. I wrote the damn thing and haven't read it.

Try to PRETEND that the rapist in the white house doesn't exist, and eventually- *shrugs* No one lives forever.

I'm glad I could be a distraction.

 Reviewer: Imogen Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/08/20 06:21 am
Title: Chapter 12

Let me tell you why I love this.

You have Stella, a poc, a transwoman, a lesbian, and she loves Parker unconditionally, she loves Parker's children unconditionally, she validates Parker, she supports Parker WHILE also calling Parker out on any bullshit like "you knew he was Jarod when you had sex with him" while also being compassionate and sympathetic. She is the best friend I've never had and have always wanted. Stella and Parker found each other and connected because they were both the outcasts. Parker with children and no father and Stella a lesbian trans poc. 

I think there's a real struggle for Parker to want to be who she was back when she was pretending to hate Jarod AND to still be worthy of Stella's friendship. I think Parker doesn't know who to be. You have done an outstandingly amazing job of displaying that identity crisis, the crisis of conscience.

You also have Parker being accountable, which shows enormous character growth on her part. She said it wasn't a mistake, wasn't an accident. Jarod danced her to the door. Parker recognizes all of that.

 

My favorite characters are all grown up and mature and I love that. I can't help but love the addition of Stella.

Please write more and please update all of your other novellas and works. You're amazingly talented, really gifted.

Thank you for keeping the dream and fandom alive!

 Reviewer: Melinda Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/08/20 05:29 am
Title: Chapter 12

Parker's responding to Stella about dental dams lol priceless. That sounds like Miss Parker. I love this story. More!!

 Reviewer: Kayla Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/08/20 12:51 am
Title: Chapter 12

Well done. I love this. I'd love to read more. Thank you!!

 Reviewer: Gina Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/08/20 06:16 am
Title: Chapter 12

These chapters are TOOO short. Other than that this is perfect. I know life's crazy now so I wont' complain too much. Post more soon.

 Reviewer: Gunner Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25/08/20 09:27 pm
Title: Chapter 12

 don't hate me for my name. don't shoot. put the gun down. i'm the good guy!

ok. seriously. this is top notch writing really professional and pretender quality and i'm gonna need another bump real soon cos i'm addicted.

stay well fearless girl author.

 

 Reviewer: Jarod Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25/08/20 05:31 am
Title: Chapter 12

can't stop grinning at your spot on characterisations and I can't tell you how much I've missed Miss Parker's voice and Jarod's voice. I love the new voices too! You never disappoint Mirage. It's magic. I've been saying it all along and I will always say it about you! Magic. I can't wait for more.....but I'll try.

 Reviewer: needlepoint Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/08/20 11:43 pm
Title: Chapter 12

OMG I love this so much. I could read you forever. More please?

 Reviewer: Lori Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/08/20 12:15 am
Title: Chapter 12

Top notch Mirage. I've come to expect only the best from you. Thanks for sharing your gifts with us. Cheers mate!

 Reviewer: Brian Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 22/08/20 10:56 pm
Title: Chapter 12

More of this right now young lady!!! I demand it.

 

 Reviewer: Rachel Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/08/20 06:30 pm
Title: Chapter 12

"he's........Jarod."

 

That's it.

There is no real reason and never was to not be with Jarod.

You capture them perfectly.

MORE?!!!!

 Reviewer: JarodandMissParker4ever Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/08/20 01:48 am
Title: Chapter 12

So freaking addicting!

SO many shipper feels here and omg Stella is beautiful.

More!!!!

 Reviewer: Lorraina Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20/08/20 03:02 am
Title: Chapter 12

So much to take apart. I read this twice and I anticipate crazily the next update from you.

Is Parker standing Jarod up or is she gonna dine with him. I can't wait to find out. I love that Parker has a bestie and someone who wants to protect her from stds. Keep keeping it real. I love your writing.

 Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20/08/20 12:05 am
Title: Chapter 12

Bravo!

More please?

 Reviewer: Amelia Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 09:09 pm
Title: Chapter 12

It's fantastic to have you back. I hope you're well and happy.

Impressive writing as always Mirage.

I know that Jeffrey Osbourne tune. I love that Stella would simply begin singing at random. I know a couple of women who break into song in the middle of a conversation. They are the best people. Stella's a good spirit and more than just a supportive role. She steals the show really and fits with the established characters. More when you're able please. I'll be waiting.

 Reviewer: Michael Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 06:02 am
Title: Chapter 12

Parker asking Stella if she really looked as not ok as Jarod had her believing she did is the most Parker thing ever. She had to make sure she looked ok. I like that Stella speaks haitian and I love everything about Stella. She is the best friend we all need right now. Thank you for this. I know things are super nuts and there's a pandemic. You manage to not let any stress show. You really are professional..

"Right, because I always bring along a dental dam when I break into someone's house, y'know, on the off chance they're home, and maybe down for a little mid-morning cunnilingus." lol Love that.

I also love that Parker admits that the only problem with Jarod is that he's Jarod. Stella nailed it again. More please.

 Reviewer: Chloe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 05:18 am
Title: Chapter 5

Whows!

That's all I got.

I could copy and paste the entire story I bet to show all of the parts I love. I'll spare you all of that reading. You worked so hard writing this I can tell it's so professional.

Need more. But I have to sleep or I'll get fired.

 Reviewer: Jameason Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 04:37 am
Title: Chapter 4

You excel at every aspect of writing, including children and children is where most authors lose me because most people think kids are just dumb.  You give them personalities that I fall in love with. I love their snark.

More tension. There was a lot of tension on the show and between Jaord and MP so yeah, makes sense and I love it.

This part where Parker tells on herself.

"Avery's a rather obstinate child, but polite and intelligent," said Jarod with an amicable smile. "She reminds me of you at that age. Eli reminds me of you, too," added Jarod tersely, his smile vanishing. "He's distrustful, guarded, suspicious of questions."

"It's not too late to walk away, Jarod, before this becomes complicated, and be remembered fondly as a family friend who came to dinner. Full disclosure: they aren't always this well-behaved. You don't have a monopoly on pretending, artfulness, acting charming."

Jarod gazed steadily and silently at Parker, absorbing her words with an inscrutable expression, detecting nuances of chicanery, deducing that the developing amicable rapport was feigned. Reestablishing credibility and communication, he realized, would be challenging. "What," she demanded in apparent perturbation, her eyes wide and fierce.

"You're trying to frighten me away."

and all of this too

"Someone else, you mean?" Jarod asked pointedly, dropping his voice to a hush, deliberately enunciating her name. "I'm sorry that I hurt you," he asserted, categorically accepting the responsibility evidently assigned to him, "for whatever my apology is worth."

Parker scoffed her incredulity. "I'm perfectly capable of saying precisely what I mean," she snarled at him. "For all the good it does," she added hotly. "That isn't my name."

"Nevertheless," Jarod said, maintaining a placid, soft tone, observing as Parker opened a drawer, shuffled its contents. "It would have hurt you a lot more had I stayed after Glasgow, after clarifying my feelings when, clearly, you didn't reciprocate."

"I'm not doing this," insisted Parker, slamming a cabinet closed.


"No," agreed Jarod, the passivity and softness in his voice bizarre if not incongruous, considering the implied audacity. "I am. Each time I considered returning, I remembered the tears in your voice, your eyes, and those words." Just forget. "I believed I was only capable of causing you pain and, apparently, I wasn't wrong."

"Heaven forbid," snarled Parker, bordering contentious.

Heaven forbid Jarod ever be wrong about anything. I get you. I love it.
You are magic. I'm under the spell definitely.
so eloquent, too

Reviewer: Jameason Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 04:33 am
Title: Chapter 3

OH. MY. GOD!!! Eli is .... oh my god!!

 

How am I supposed to be able to think now?

The tension is palpable.

"Parker reeled back in surprise and asked in a low, throaty voice, "What else did Angelo tell you?"

"A hell of lot more than you're telling me," returned Jarod fiercely. "Answer the question."

and Parker wants to kill the tension, will do anything to stop the tension

"This conversation is over."

Jarod offered her a sympathetic smile. "I know you want it to be over. I know you do," he said softly, his brow creasing. "Don't," implored Jarod when Parker's lips parted, shaking his head. "Don't beg me to leave. I don't want to be the villain, compared or conflated with Lyle. I don't want to coerce you to do anything."

He's so understanding but he's still so much an asshole for leaving but he had to leave but oh...  you know what you're doing. You do it expertly. Ive never been so unable to walk away from a novel/book/story. I can't put this down.

Reviewer: Jameason Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 04:28 am
Title: Chapter 2

"He was my only family," said Parker sorrowfully and with a sudden stridency in her voice that was as startling as it was troubling.

"He still is your family," reminded Jarod gently. "Look, I was hoping-"

Ohh god. I can't even.

Mind blown. Heart broken. They hurt so much. They hope so much.

The characters ... ARE the characters. You write them pretender perfectly. You think up the most intriguing stories. This chapter is poignant. The pain is profound. You write with clarity. I can't say enough. Because I'm not a writer.

I will always come back to you. Thank you for writing, for being prolific and for keeping the fandom alive.

 Reviewer: Jameason Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 04:24 am
Title: Chapter 1

I've been away too long. Am loving this. Mind blown.

 Reviewer: Jameason Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/08/20 04:20 am
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