So many visuals here. The entire story is like being right there with them. It's like watching the dvds only this will have an ending. You write like the professionals and really need to be on the Pretender team.
It's all stunning Mirage.
"When did you decide to care if I mind? You break in, threaten-" Parker fell silent with alarming abruptness. The rage dissolved with the same suddenness it had erupted from her. "Jarod," she whispered tremulously, "what are we going to do?"
I can't get enough. Pretender perfection. More please?
Reviewer: Gunner Signed
[Report This]Date: 14/01/21 02:12 am
What are you doing writing fanfic? You are one of the few talented authors I've read here and you could do so much more with your mind. You should be writing novels and selling them. I'm sorry if you think it's rude of me to say that.
Reviewer: David Levin Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/01/21 09:28 pm
Oh doh. I just looked at your profile and saw you have other works and you've completed tons of them. I don't have to ask you to keep writing. Sorry. Sometimes I'm a faithless heathen but I have begun reading way too many fics that never got finished and I hate being left hanging .. I say that after being left hanging by Sickle and Mitchel for forever.
Reviewer: Nikki B Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/01/21 02:20 am
Fear is an entirely different beast. I love your writing voice and word choices, and I can see Parker's lips just open a little bit and give Jarod that suprised/offended/disappointed/angry look. You freaking nailed them. Please keep writing. I need more.
Reviewer: Nikki B Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/01/21 02:16 am
Is Sydney gonna be ok?
Please update soon.
Oh, let Jarod and Miss Parker get together!
Tell me more about that weekend. I need the dirty details.
Reviewer: Jameason Signed [Report This]Date: 13/01/21 12:13 am
Now this is what I'm talking about right here. Coming back here to see that fanfic is still alive was great and finding you was beautiful. This is the Jarod and Miss Parker I know and love and want more of. Make it happen!
Reviewer: Trickythrills Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/01/21 11:15 pm
It's always a pleasure Mirage. I gasped in horror, giggled in amusement, shook my head in agreement with Jarod and grinned way too much. You know these characters and where to put them and do it brilliantly.
More please?
Reviewer: Jarod Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/01/21 04:20 am
Oh, yay. Mirage is in the house! You've been missed so much. I'm loving the insights into Sydney and just a thought but maybe he's the person that taught Jarod how to escape during torture. Ok!!! On to Jarod. Oh, holy wows. Well played. He does the most Jarod thing ever to find a way to reach a compromise with her. Totally top notch. I would pay to read this. I feel guilty that I get to read this for free. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. You're the best author, not just in this fandom, but period. Please update when you can.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 12/01/21 03:50 am
Thank you for updating, and it's an amazing update. I haven't seen these characters MORE in character since IOTH aired. I know I have said that before about your writing, but this time you surpassed yourself in excellence and professionalism. It's not an insult either. It means you're even better now than you were before and that means you just keep on getting better and when I think I can't be more impressed you blow me completely away. I don't know how you do it but I'm so glad you do it. I hope you will always write for us. Congrats!
Love Jen!
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 11/01/21 07:39 pm
Awesome. I need more please?
Author's Response:
I'm working on it. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jameason.
Reviewer: Jameason Signed [Report This]Date: 22/10/20 11:45 pm
You always snatch me back here. I'm addicted.
More please?
Author's Response:
There shall be more. Thanks for the r&r, Con-0.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 21/10/20 02:06 am
I LOVE LOVE Freaking LOVE Parker's concern for Syndey. She was really afraid every time Sydney freaked out on the series and even hugged him when his brother died and he seems to be an achilles heal for her in many ways. I think she would drink when she came to a point where there was nothing else to do to find him. She had all the men on it and she was tired now after looking for him and she was busy with Jarod. She would want to handle Jarod personally to be sure nothing bad happened to him ... because she knows Sydney would want that of her.
It's one thing just to read but then I can't help but go beneath what you wrote and explore. You're one of those authors that I want to analysise all of your work and find easter eggs. Your prose is intelligent and thought provoking, always profound. I need more now.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading, and thank you for the rather generous review, Leslie.
Reviewer: Leslie Signed [Report This]Date: 18/10/20 11:41 pm
Impressive as always Mirage. You write so eloquently and lyriclly. It's always a pleasure to read you and the characters are... the characters.
I hope you update soon.
Author's Response:
I will update soon. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Amelia.
Reviewer: Amelia Anonymous [Report This]Date: 17/10/20 06:02 pm
Squee! Mirage is back. I've been surviving the trumpvirus thanks to you. Really you've helped so much and it's so wonderful to have my Mirage fic fix. More please?
Author's Response:
I'm glad to hear tthat you're surviving the trumpvirus, The Miss Parker. I hope you continue to. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: The Miss Parker Signed [Report This]Date: 17/10/20 03:52 am
Bravo! You're the one to read when I'm feeling nostalgic and want to be fully immersed in The Pretender. You've captured the spirit of the series, the dynamics. You know the characters really REALLY know the characters. You leave me hanging on waiting for the next installment. It's really Craig and steven of you to do this to me. You've developed the characters or let us watch as the characters are further developed in way that is plausible and enjoyable.
I want to know more about that weekend. I'm gonna admit now that I didn't expect this closeness and a weekend of possibly conspiring against the Centre from you a non shipper. I know you find Jarod annoying I guess is the word. You don't seem to like him. It's a pleasant surprise. I never thought of them as a couple either until that last episode with then on the isle. I get it.
I'm hungry for more.
Until next time.......
Author's Response:
Ah, it's "Craig and Steven of me", is it? I consider that a compliment. In fact, I'm now considering leaving you hanging for a little while longer. No, I don't find Jarod annoying- not always, and I do like Jarod, quite a bit, when he's torturing child molesters and rapists. In fact, I like Jarod more than I should when he's torturing them. There shall be more. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 17/10/20 12:21 am
Girl keep going I love it. You are the best I've ever read and honey I've read em all.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the r & r, Stacy E.
Reviewer: Stacy E Anonymous [Report This]Date: 16/10/20 12:46 am
OOOH uuuh. It's no miracle at all. I had Sydney.
LOVE.
So much tension and drama. Agnst. Snark.
I need more.
Author's Response:
You shall have more. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Leese.
Reviewer: Leese Anonymous [Report This]Date: 14/10/20 11:36 pm
Hey hey! So wonderful to have you back Mirage. You are always missed when you're away.
I love how closely this stays to the original tv series. Jarod needs to issues his threats and Parker hers because that's what they do because they are hurt right now. I like how Lyle is the voice of reason but only because Jarod and Parker need to threaten each other.
There were comedy elements, always gold. You always keep me coming back Mirage.
More please?
Author's Response:
I missed you, too.
There will be more. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gunner.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 14/10/20 05:06 am
Top notch. I'm new to fanfic not new to the tv series and not into the "official" novels written by C & S and co. They did a brilliant job creating an addicting tv series. I'd like to see more of the tv series.
I know I'm not the only Michael in the fandom and will set myself apart this way so you know who is reviewing. I read somewhere on twitter I might spook you if I just wrote Michael with no last name and someone said there were pretenders among us. You don't have to worry. I'm not actor. I'm definitely not a stalker. All stalkers probably say that teheheee.
I just wanted to say I love your work and I can tell you spent loads of time working this to pretender perfection. The quality shows. I've only read this story by you and it's brilliant mate. I could read more if you get my hint. Cheers!
Author's Response:
Hello, Captain Obvious, and welcome to fanfic. Dude, you have a hell of an imagination.
Spooked, huh? That's weird. I've certainly never been spooked by him offline/IRL/several feet away (relax; those occasions were all pre- pussygrabber pandemic 2020).
Furthermore (to lay this to eternal rest), I was raised in the American south (all of the stupid/weird/touchy/grope-y/criminal fuckery you've heard about the south is true). Spooky is excessively-perfumed, whacked ass southern baptists speaking in tongues and throwing their morbidly obese bodies on the floor. I've seen some crazy fuckery---including an Agolf Twitler presidency, which, it seems, I might actually survive.
Needless to say: I don't spook easily.
Or did you intend to suggest I'm spooky online?
No, I have only minutes to scribble fanfic, and that's probably evident. I'd love to spend more time practicing fanfic to perfection (whatever the hell that is), because readers deserve it, but capitalism has made me its little bitch.
Thanks for the r & r. Cheers right back at you.
[Report This]Date: 13/10/20 11:22 pm
I need more of this right now.
I love Jarod's words when Parker ends the call. He's right. It used to be so damn satisfying to slam down the phone and hear it echo through the room. Damn. I miss that.
Your writing is wonderful. It's so real. OMG. You're the best. More?
Author's Response:
Thanks, Melissa B, for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Melissa B Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/10/20 03:26 am
Impressive as always Mirage. All the shippery feels going on right now. Jarod's concern for Parker finally after all the anger we've seen. He's like this so many times on the tv series. Anger but he still loves her I think even back then and still does. I want to know more about the weekend they shared and the safehouse they stayed at. Please make it so. You keep The Pretender alive for me!
Author's Response:
You'll read more soon, I think. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Amelia.
Reviewer: Amelia Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/10/20 12:43 am
Awesome. I want more and more. Please?
Author's Response:
Please is the magic word. You will have more. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gwen.
Reviewer: Gwen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/10/20 11:43 pm
Nothing I can say here that hasn't already been said.
I'm autistic and so I sometimes struggle with nuances... like I can have some idea of what is going on but not enough to be clear and explain it to others. So what you do that I love is explain it all so I know exactly what is going on and if Jarod or Parker or another character crosses a line and commits a crime.
I love what you write and I love the way you write and how plausible your stories/novels are always and I love how everything is clear like I know that Parker sort of lied in this because she didn't want to confess to Jarod she'd killed someone. It was subtle but even I caught that and I love that.
You do this really well and transition perfectly and the characters... yeah they are the characters like always just like they are on my DVDs. You know how to write and where to put everyone and what they should all say. This is a natural easy gift and talent and you are skillful. I love this story.
While I'm here I want to ask you a question about another story on here that I love that you didn't write though. If that's okay? I asked the author, have emailed the author and reviewed but still have no response. I was hoping you could shed some kind of light for me so I can understand. So if you read Winter's Thaw by Bucky LaFontaine can you tell me what is going on when Jarod says they were playing with sensory overload and then Parker snapped? Just read it if you don't mind and begin with "I was so nearly blind with want, need and desire" and end at "literally caught with your pants down and in pain" if you don't mind and help me understand it. It really bugs me when I don't know what is going on.
Please update this soon and please please update Devil's Advocate and the others. I miss you when you're gone. Stay forever please.
Author's Response:
Thank you for all the kind words.
On to your conundrum: Nice; I just read it; it's a damn find read. I think authors sometimes want to leave certain elements of the story to the reader's interpretation (and I am terrified of fansplaining their fics). But I'm sympathetic and you are pleading, and--- fuck. Here goes:
This reader's interpretation is that they could have been approaching, and then withdrawing from, consummation, rinse and repeat- all senses on full alert while delaying eventual gratification/sexual teasing-- but I have a limited imagination. Also, I want to note that I'm making a guess within the confines of the "sensory overload" in question, because what ever that entails it must fit with everything else Bucky has written.
More specifically, the sensory play has to be something that allows Jarod to realize that Parker is unmoving and still believe that Parker not moving is part of their game, something that allows him to decide he's still got the green light. We know Parker is impatient, and she could possibly become frustrated and still when Jarod delays consummation too many times, as if mutely declaring: "I'll just sleep now if you're intending to play that game all night, lowly peasantBoy" or a mute, "What? Not man enough to finish this? (she did something similar with Thomas "man enough to take the shirt"-- only aloud).
AND while she's suddenly still and thinking about Thomas, Jarod could possibly be feeling duty-bound to please the Goddess before she loses all patience and kills him-- unaware that something else entirely has begun to transpire inside her mind and that the game, whatever the game was, ended.
I think it's safe to assume that the "worst possible moment to freeze" is when his penis is entering her body.
She, justifiably, reacted to that intrusion/misunderstanding by punching him.
He reacted angrily to her reaction (held down her arms and said some hurtful things).
She pushed him off and fled (Bucky explained that the punch Parker had landed had given her the advantage that allowed her to easily push him off) (he is also naked while all of that transpires, evidently: "caught with pants down").
That's my initial interpretation (this sort of thing is not one of my strengths).
Again, that's a damn fine read, and a job well done by Bucky. I hope my stupid interpretation doesn't ruin it for you.
[Report This]Date: 11/10/20 09:42 pm
I love the deeper explorations of Lyle, the whys, his psyche, and the damning info about Sydney's knowledge. Sydney is often idolized and Lyle demonized but Sydney is just as responsible and Lyle is actually a victim.
Thank you for something I wanted to see done on television ages ago.
I want more. You're writing is so clear and you are so talented and I'm not going to harrass you at all about you know who and that selfie you probably still don't have with him. Winks winks kisses kisses xxoo
Write fast.
Author's Response:
There will be more. I think.
Thanks for the r & r, Lorraina.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 10/10/20 09:57 pm
OMG you are the BEST. I need more. I need it now. Please!!!
Author's Response:
Patience.
Thanks for the r&r, Kels.
Reviewer: Kels Anonymous [Report This]Date: 10/10/20 06:42 pm
