Well well well we meet again lol. I love this story. Great chapter and I had to read the entire story again but I know you have real life and can't help the time between updates plus you are writing what like 5 stories. So I get it. That doesn't mean I like it. But I do love your writing. You do it best. I've read all the stories, all the books. You're the one I can read again and again. and will have to because you've done gone and gotten yourself busy. lol. I wait for more impatiently. Hurry hurry.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed
[Report This]Date: 24/09/16 01:05 am
LOVE your writing. You're a brilliant storyteller and author. The way you write...seriously Mirage you blow me away and I'm an avid reader so that means something. Trust me. You're a fine author. This is the Miss Parker I know and love dearly.. "don't ever pretend with me" Yeah, that's her. Totally. But she knows he's not pretending. She knows he hurt her deeply with the truth in the past and never pretended with her. He's revealed all of his emotions to her. She slapped him because she can't deal with the truth. She's probably afraid of her own feelings. I think she when she hit him and kissed him in the lodge after he came back it means she has feelings for him too and if she grieved him...either way I think it hurt that he went away without saying why or goodbye. I love the double and possibly triple ...and maybe more meanings in the chapter title. Gone. She is gone from him in this and his trust in Rachel is gone and those little girls are still gone. I think the FBI wants them dead. Please don't let them die. You write these characters amazingly well, better than the novels and you story is in line with the story from the tv series which is what I want. Always mature dialog and it all makes sense. Your original characters are a wonderful addition. I still love Olivia from Nemesis and Zina from Darkness Falling. I want to know more about Dante. Love that she called him Dollfuss lol not a well known dictator anymore. A very in character Miss Parker and Jarod. You know them better than anyone. Just more please. Keep going and going.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 23/09/16 07:10 pm
You updated 2 stories in a week? Girly you are badass over here writing circles around us. Please continue. I love the direction you're heaading in and hanging on every word. Keep going please.
Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed [Report This]Date: 26/08/16 12:08 am
I'm not logging in right now. I am always so excited to see a new update from you. I just want to thank you so much Mirage for keeping true to the characters. Many authors convey my own namesake as themselves and give Miss Parker their actions and reactions and make Miss Parker act and think and say what they would. You've never done that. She's indifferent and supposedly unbothered by Jarod and his overwhelming presence...that's who she is! Miss Parker would never fangirl over him. She might feel it and act like she doesn't but she plays cool. Like with Thomas...she didn't drool over him and she wanted him. She snapped at Broots to get that background check because she wanted Thomas but she played it cool and confident. Thank you for staying true to her and Jarod and all of these characters I love dearly. It's been a pleasure to read you. You write exceptionally well too and very clear. I did have to reread because the chapters are few and far between but I enjoyed the reread. I could read you forever. I hope I will. Please don't stop writing for us. I know you're busy writing and ghostwriting but please don't leave us. Congrats ie, etc and good luck.
Author's Response:
Guess who just realized she had reviews?
Aw thanks. "Jarod's overwhelming presence?" What is that? I haven't a clue (there, I've said it: I'm clueless). He's a man. He's only a man- a man when he's not being a child or a terrorist or just your average run o the milll pain in the arse. He's not "overwhelming"- is he? He's practically harmless (certainly when faced with Parker's gun at least). Oh, I don't know. I. Don't. Know. I don't know (X infinity). I simply write. I don't think about it. If I thought about it, then surely I'd rethink writing altogether and go do something else (sleep, for instance). Parker did sort of fangirl all over the Brootster (but that was a dream) (aha! or was it?). I don't have an opinion either way. It's fan fic. There's no wrong or right, there's only write. I'll try to update more frequently. I can't promise anything. Thank you, Miss Parker, for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Miss Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 21/08/16 07:20 pm
Merci beaucoup mon amie! Welcome back!! This is the wonderful. Mirage. I suspect Rachael is bad. She didn't tell Jarod there was ever a suspect. I always try to guess. This is the guess. More please.
Author's Response:
Thank you., MlleParker. Rachel could be bad. I'm working on the update.
Reviewer: MlleParker Signed [Report This]Date: 15/08/16 09:42 pm
Wow. This isn't going the way I thought it would. I'm glad it didn't. You always surprise me with a twist or a hundred. I love the way you got them here. Ive been a Pretender fan from the word go and am a long time reader of fanfic. I love the way you write them, how true you are to the characters and the story. I wasn't happy with the novels comics merchandising as they are a retelling of the dvds and an inferior one. I'm glad you haven't sold out. I'm glad you write the universe I know and love. Thank you thank you thank you thank you. Please continue.
Author's Response:
Haha. Um, no, the stories never exactly stay on course. I'm as shocked as you are. No, I'm appalled actually. Mortified. I have a feeling I'll be snarling at the laptop before I'm done. I will continue. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gunner.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 14/08/16 09:53 pm
Wow. Excellent update Mirage. You know these characters and have command of them and command of the language. You write with clarity and coherence. Your talent and genius is so striking and is unparalleled. I love this direction and I've enjoyed each chapter, each building up to what I know will be an amazing climax. I don't think anyone grasps the complexities of Jarod and Miss Parker and all of the characters like you. It was a pleasure Mirage. Welcome back.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Christoph. You're awfully sweet. Don't get your hopes up please. Thanks for the warm welcome back.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 14/08/16 06:39 pm
I see I haven't reviewed in a couple chapters. Sorry about that. Its getting a little confusing for me. I may have to re-read from the beginning. In one chapter Jarod and Rachel had separate rooms and in another they are f-ing like bunnies.
Plus the missing for six years, back to save JR, then part of the Triumvirate, to workings for the F.B.I. I'm finding hard to follow. Miss Parker needs to kick his ass though. Not to mention Rachel's.
Thanks for updating. I've said it before but I truly believe it, you write MP and J keeping true to the spirit of the series. If Steve and Craig aren't going to bring them back I am relying on you.
I know you aren't a MP/J shipper but it seems like your muse is. Maybe not in this story. Yet...
Author's Response:
Don't apologize. If you're confused, I should apologize. I do apologize. The next chapter may very well involve some pain- your comment regarding kicking ass is timely. No, I'm still not a shipper. Miss Parker sails her own ship, raises her own flag- that works. I agree: I've always believed that my various Muses are traitors (ultimate shippers); I won't be shocked at all when the pair invariably wind up in bed- or on the floor or against the wall- together (smut obsessed muses). Thanks for reading and reviewing, Twisted.
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 14/08/16 12:37 am
Yay!! Mirage I'm glad you're back. Where have you been? Aghhhuuu! More! Please give us more.
Author's Response:
Yes, yes, Dark One. I'm working on it. Thanks.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 13/08/16 10:44 pm
Solid chapter Mirage. I think you're warming to Jarod after all these years. You certainly took your time dear. Miss Parker is still giving him the cold shoulder but I have a feeling that will work itself out. She's hurt right now and mourning her father.
I appreciate your descriptive work, and not only in regards to the gardens but the human landscape as well. You dive right in to tragedy and hold nothing back. I think you presented a realistic look inside abduction. I consider myself stable and slow to become emotional. I felt like I was in the home with those parents. I had tears in my eyes.
What will stand out most aside from Joana's instability is Jarod's desire to hug his sister in the middle of all that turmoil. That brought on the waterworks and a big grin. I heard grown men don't cry. People who say that haven't read your work. I'd love to read more of you. As always Mirage.
Author's Response:
Warming. Huh. I don't know. Jarod is okay. He's always been okay. I'm an objective observer. I'm glad you're liking it and I appreciate your taking the time to read and review. Thanks.
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/08/16 10:06 pm
Love! A crazy long wait but worth it. Keep it up.
Author's Response:
I apologize for the wait. Thanks, Lorraina.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 13/08/16 07:47 pm
I'm going to properly review this but now I just want to give props for this chapter. Girlfriend, you don't like Jarod? Most people can see he's sexy. I wonder if you sense what you're dealing with here in him or if you feel nothing because I'm like Michael's costar was on Jeffrey always like 'oh my god there HE is', mouth hanging open and in awe and I'm curious how you react. You've actually seen Michael in real life. Were you like 'omg'? Did you stop and stare, feel anything? Please tell me you didn't throw up? lol Did you realize at the time that many women would have traded places with you and probably asked him to bed? Did sex cross your mind at all?!! lol Once in a lifetime opportunity Mirage. You could have claimed it was research for your fiction? Think about it?! Not that you need to research. You nailed it honey. Anyhoo! Very profound the way you illustrated his similarities to the Triumvirate and his ability to split himself ie be concerned for Parker's feelings while preying on her feelings. He's a gorgeous pyschopath, inn't he?! You reveal his darkness without a physical action ie he doesn't have to be physically or sexually abusive not that I'd have a problem reading abuse. It's been a while since Circles and Forces. Just putting that out there. Your wording showed tact. There are too many quotables to mention. Thank you for continuing to write Mirage. Thank you a million babes. Welcome back!
Author's Response:
Hi, Xena. Mm. No, I didn't vomit (I'm anti-vomit, actually). They were all completely benign non-encounters. I can't remember what I was thinking; I, do, however, know I've never ventured outdoors like a dominatrix in search of prey (and at 5'9 & 121 lbs I wouldn't be a terribly intimidating predator, I'm afraid) (I'd have to stalk the shorter men) (where did I leave that darn whip?) (haha). No, I didn't stop and stare, my jaw didn't unhinge. He's a human (not a veritable sex god or chew toy).
Yes, I am aware that Jarod's player is a wanted man: the incubator is the ultimate fangirl; she watched "sex" operas 24/7, all day, every channel, dvds and it just so happens that- (that I don't want to finish the sentence). It's weird what I didn't remember remembering (until reviewers began talking to me more and more about Dr. Mike). It's safe to say that I'm more aware than I want to be. Fortunately, it skipped a generation or I developed an immunity.
I think that covers your questions.
I'm glad you're liking this. Thank you, Xena, for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Xena Signed [Report This]Date: 13/08/16 06:41 pm
Wow. Just so much wows. Mirage! Welcome back! You have been missed. I was really worried about you this time because it's been a little while. I'm afraid you're going to not come back and update one day. Let me just say that I'm glad you're here! Now this update. Wowsers! Did not see any of that coming. First Parker's repsonse to Jarod's slip up presuming the girls dead but then Parker. She saw the photo and probably only decided to go along with protesting too loudly for too long because she thought the girls were alive. Jarod does manipulate her ,he has in the past. But it was subtle even here that I ddin't realize what he'd done until she called him on it and put him on the same level as her father and the Triumvirate. Then the landscape descriptions. Love! Such an emotional reaction from Gracie's mom. I feel so much for those parents. The ending...you always cinch it up and tie together so right. Jarod lying to the parents...heart is broken. I'm excited for more please make it so and make it soon if you can.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 13/08/16 03:00 pm
Excellent update Mirage. AS always! You are the reason I still call myself a fan of TP, you are the reason I still read anything Pretender..your fanfic is more like fiction than fanfic. Woman you are the best. I'm glad you're still here but I know you could be on the best seller's list...and maybe you are and just haven't told us??? The way you wrote Tess is incredible Mirage. Just amazing. What a vivid picture you painted of that family's life and the glum atmosphere Tess is now in without the door open. :( Brilliant insights. It's just like being there. I'm so in love with your writing, your voice. You are a genius. You're the only one who writes Jarod and Miss Parker the way they are on the show. Keep going please.
Reviewer: Con-O Signed [Report This]Date: 06/04/16 06:51 pm
RE your author's notes, and I quote "hand-crushing scene" ?? Mirage I'm sure that Jarod wasn't crushing Miss Parker's hand.... But I guess I could see how you'd reach the conclusion. But I guess he was pleading with her and maybe was pressing her hand hard in his. I guess that's the same thing as crushing. It sounds so much worse the way you say it. Brutal truth teller that you are, your way with words is aweispiring. I still believe that you REALLY don't like Jarod. It's amazing how much you don't like Jarod. It's kind of disturbing how much you don't like him. Most women love him. I'm just putting this out there. Over all this is a completely solid chapter, well rounded. Damn but Jarod is mean sometimes. He has been cruel to her in the past and so again I can see how you'd write him in any specific way. You are one of the few fearless authors. You aren't afraid to round him out and flesh him out, showing the darkness and the light, letting the evil out to play as you've said in the past. You do have a tendency to lean towards the darker side of Jarod. Your most riveting work shows Jarod as his absolute worst, the bottom of the spectrum really. I read your other responses to other reviews and see that you haven't met him, and I guess I'm relieved. I was wondering if you'd had a bad experience with either him or just actors in general and especially when you do things like this "famous" people, as if "famous" is a bad thing. But then again you've had some acting experience and you are empathetic, or you say you are anyway. Oh, I don't know. Maybe you're just misunderstood and I'm overanalyzing. You're fantastic and mysterious. It's intriguing. I wait impatiently for more from you. I wish you would write a honest, serious bio, maybe post a memoir. You're hard to figure out. Know that this means I get more and more curious each day.
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/04/16 07:19 pm
Sorry for not longing in. I just consumed this fic and I love it. Your writing style is amazing and in short you are everything I've heard you are on twitter. Magic. In a word. Just please please keep doing what you're doing. You've raised the bar so high Mirage. This isn't fanfic. This is fiction. Amazingly well written fiction that blows me away.
Reviewer: Miss Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/04/16 07:18 pm
Mirage, Mirage, Mirage. I love this. "The banners and ribbons, however, had already been replaced—as a matter of course. Small town priorities."
The way you introduce us to new places and people. Genius. Always original and that can't be easy in a fandom as old as this one. More, please.
[Report This]Date: 01/04/16 12:20 am
YOU WOULD WALK PAST Michael T Weiss and not realize it. 2 flipping times! Mirage. What is wrong with you?! Are you crazy?!!! Some women would be all over that man!! Why not a selfie? Why don't you selfie? Or autograph? Come on. You just pull him aside and ask him to give you one. You've never taken a selfie and you have never asked anyone for an autograph??!! SO.... Michael COULD BE YOUR FIRST! lol. Don't kill me lol.. but ..You got to get really close to him. real close and smile really big! Ask really nice for an autography and he'll give IT to you. Ok so now I want to meet your "significant man" who has got you blind to other men. You must be really in love or something. So I know I already reviewed this but I have just read your author response to my review of Who will guard the guards and I had to respond to that. Your response was epic and so funny. OMG. Sorry. But yes, I do love this chapter. It's worth another review. Update soon!!
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 31/03/16 03:11 am
Oh, Mirage. So much goodness here. I have a watched tons of The Profiler and I can hear Rachel saying that about Miss Parker. Funguses living in shit and dark is like something Rachel would say. I love how you show Parker cares for Jarod even if she is angry with him. She's going to watch his back. I like that. He can be mean. You remind me of that and then I watch the show again and I'm like 'yep Mirage is right. Jarod CAN be an asshole' lmao. I hate hate hate that Jarod and Rachel are having sex and within Parker's listening range. That is cold. That is LIFE. So touching the way Parker connects with Tess and shares that one thing in common. Keep keeping it real. You do it perfectly. More soon please?
Reviewer: Contessa Signed [Report This]Date: 31/03/16 12:29 am
Merci! Want more. Please. Soon.
Reviewer: Mlle Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/03/16 01:40 am
Fact check lol. I'm laughing through my tears. You don't have to worry about facts but that is so cool. But what's more. The way you describe people..Tess, her dad. He's disturbed and just in despair and I can tell by his worrsome, almost defeated it seems "please don't let her out" and Tess. Just crazy amazing Mirage. You bring people alive, to life. They stand up on the page and in Tess's case toddle around and whack the windows and look cute and eager. Her reasoning is the reasoing of child. But her realiazation that people go away and don't come back sometimes no matter how hard we cry for them...that broke my heart wide open. I am still crying.
I sobbed Mirage!! SOBBED! Where does that kind of pain come from that you feel so deeply that you turn around and translate it so vividly to me? Or is that too personal? You've had loss and I think it pours out of you when you're least expecting. I think it makes you write. I don't know what I'm writing. I'm not even sure you realize what you've done to me. Keep doing it. The laughter and tears you bring me are wonderful. I've been saying it for five years. Magic. What you do is magic. Can't give it anything but an all star rating hon.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed [Report This]Date: 30/03/16 01:20 am
Brilliant Mirage. Like a crime show inside my favorite show. Jarod is so cop py with his mirrored glasses and the way he goads Parker is just too damn funny but totally in keeping with his personality. Matured but still a pain in the ass. I love your writing voice and style. You are the reason I read anything that has anything to do with the Pretender. You and you alone. Stay brilliant! Give us more soon.
Reviewer: Lorraina Signed [Report This]Date: 29/03/16 09:53 pm
"At least it's free" you must be kidding! I would pay to read you! I've never said that about a fanfic author before. Your work isn't like fanfic. This is perfect Mirage! LOVE love love that Parker gave Jarod a flash drive and I know you are going to tell us what's on it right? Soon I hope. Lot of things going on here with the communication and implied language between Jarod and Parker. He's got some issues and you know them well and have them outlined concisely. He really can't be alone. WOW. I love Tess, your characters and descriptive work. Just blows me away every time I read you. I really love that Parker is sticking around only to watch Jarod's back. Wonderful. I love your writing style. You really know these characters. I'm kinda glad you aren't writing with Craig and Steve. I like your writing so much more.
Author's Response:
You are being kind. This chapter, like its writer, is far from perfect. You know I will eventually tell you what Jarod discovered from the drive. The dysfunctional duo seem to communicate even when they aren't speaking. Thank you for the generous review. It's okay if you want to be honest, however. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 28/03/16 05:42 am
More please? This is so fantastic! You have complete command of language and these characters...you are an amazing author and storyteller.
Author's Response:
The remainder is coming along quite nicely. I hope to post it soon. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Anna.
Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]Date: 27/03/16 07:08 pm
Ive been thinking about this so much. The song that Jarod pulled the cord on is RULE THE WORLD by Peter Cetera...you referenced that song without naming it in Circles Of Hell...and I just put the clues together and finally found the song. It's really good! I love the song now. and the part about the 'sweat and the tears...and "someday when I rule the world, gonna stand by you, love you all I can" GOOD STUFF> and Jarod is supposed to be the chosen one. DO you like the song? Do you like Peter Cetera? I can never tell with you. I just discover Peter Cetera thanks to you. I like 'Do you love me that much' too and it could be a Jarod Parker song "can you find it in your heart.. let me go and give me up...do you love me that much" so sad. I'm totally a fan now. I have to read circles of hell again now. BUT FIRST>.. the song RULE THE WORLD was playing the whole time Jarod was in the hacienda and he didn't pull the plug until after the final "oh don't give up on me" and then silence...but the song is nearly over then anyway. lol. So tell me if like these songs. Great story as always. I bow to you!
Author's Response:
Do I like those songs? Er. Mm. I wish you hadn't asked. Certain compositions cause nausea and a general sense of unwell-ness (those two songs included). I refer to it as my music anomaly; it's not limited to those two tunes or that one artist/genre (because that would be too easy, and life can't be easy, now can it?). There is a scientific explanation; music can even trigger seizures in some listeners (at least I've never had a seizure) (yet). I do like him; he was Chicago's bassist and front-man (for a while, but no longer) (I think?), and while the band is before my time, the early albums are kind of awesome (25 or 6 to 4) (they had some epic brass).
I must state clearly for future reference: you should not look to my fics for music recommendations (you shouldn't look at some of my fics period, particularly Circles, which I haven't even read) (and that's why it's still littered with typos). Thanks for reading and reviewing and playing along.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 13/02/16 09:05 pm
