OMG. If Miss Parker is dead I swear to god.... I'm going to read this anyway but I will be really upset. Other than that bit of anxiousness I love this story. It's pretender perfect like everything you share with us and well written and ahhhh I love it. I love it. Your original characters are epic. Takahashi has that weird humor but seems well intentioned. I love the dynamic between Jarod and his mother and that she sits him down when he became smug and angry with her. I think her words helped him see things from her perspective, as a mother. He hasn't always had someone hovering in concern or mothering him. I also like that she didn't really interact with Sydney or Broots.. that was realistic.. except for some unseen scene where she apparently coerces the Centre figures to withhold the full truth from Jarod. It's perfect. All of the blood talk was spot on too.. I can confirm. Thank you for sharing your mad skills with us.
Author's Response:
Thank you for taking the time to read and review, Imogen.
Reviewer: Imogen Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 09/11/18 10:32 pm
Hello from Itlay! (sorry for my bad english^^)
I love this story and love little Miss Parker! Awww!
So... I'm very curios and hope that this story will be continued in future! <3
Thanks for this amazing story!
Author's Response:
Hello. Please don't apologize. I understand every word you typed. That said, you're welcome to review in any language with which you're comfortable.
Yes, I will continue this fic.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Clelia.
Reviewer: Clelia Anonymous [Report This]Date: 21/10/18 10:21 am
You were missed. It's nice to have you back here again. I am curious. If the stain isn't blood or rust what is it? Lipstick? Amazing descriptive work her and plausible motivation for Eliot to want to protect Jarod. I love the details you inject and your style and writing is top notch as always, Mirage. Until next time...
Author's Response:
Thank you. It's always nice to be here among fandomly.
I've finally answered the what-was-stain question.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Michael Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/03/18 03:51 am
"no not that kind of rising" lol! I've missed you so much. It's so good to have you back up here. Keep them coming. Two in a week. I'm envious. Beautiful writing like always. The flow is strong with you.
Author's Response:
Ha. I'm glad you enjoyed that. I will keep the chapters coming. You are not envious. Write something and share; I'll read you and review. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jen.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 28/02/18 05:17 am
Thrilling excitement and attention to two things that need it. Human trafficking and the environment and what happens when one gets in the way of the other. I like the way you draw attention without being too overt. Well done. I think of your other story which I'm read and will be reviewing in a moment and then I think of all of your stories and most of them contain serious issues and it seems that you are using Jarod and Miss Parker and these characters we love to make a point. It's not just get fan tongue wagging drooling excitement but there is something deeper. You are educating in a round about way so it won't be dull. Amazing. I should have seen this before. Keep doing what you're doing. I love it.
Author's Response:
I agree that more attention needs be focused on human trafficking and this planet. I think we've dropped the ball on both and will continue to. It is plausible that Parker and Jarod are being used to draw attention to the important issues. I've never exactly contemplated my motives. I'm glad you're liking it. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Angela.
Reviewer: Angela Penn Signed [Report This]Date: 24/02/18 08:52 pm
Good to see you up here again. You've been missed terribly so. Wow. You continue to outdo yourself. When I think you can't get better you do it anyway. Excellent story, brilliant storyteller. You're a wordsmith. I'm along for the ride where ever you take us.
Author's Response:
You're rather kind. I don't even know how to respond. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jameason.
Reviewer: Jameason Signed [Report This]Date: 24/02/18 04:07 am
You really ARE back. Yes. Stay back this time. We need you. I still wish you were writing the official novels though gotta say it Mirage cos no one else comes close.
Author's Response:
I do have a real life and responsibilities. Adulting kinda sucks but no one else is going to do it for me. You're kind, Gunner. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 24/02/18 03:17 am
Two story updates in less than a week and they are both super amazing! Thank you. Mirage you have made my week.
Author's Response:
I'm glad I made your week. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Needlepoint.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed [Report This]Date: 24/02/18 02:18 am
OMG! I hope Jarod is ok and MP will be ok too. I need more.
Author's Response:
It seems that Jarod is okay (as okay as Jarod can ever be and still be Jarod) (bless his heart). I can't spoil the rest, however. You shall have more. Soon. Thanks for reading and reviewing, JarodandParker4ever (I have a sneaking suspicion you're a Parker-Jarod shipper) (just a wild guess).
Reviewer: JarodandParker4ever Anonymous [Report This]Date: 23/02/18 09:19 pm
Ahhhhh I could read you all day and night. I have you know? All day and all night. This is so exciting and now I need to know what happens next. Please hurry Mirage.
Author's Response:
I'm hurrying. I apologize for my tardiness. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Imogen.
Reviewer: Imogen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 23/02/18 03:30 am
Oh Mirage. First, I have to say thank you for that response to my review. I am going to talk to someone, taking your advice. I remember Bush was an awful potus but he didn't brag about raping women and then get elected... or mock a disabled person.. and he wasn't a reality tv star or failed business-con man. I'm not handling this well at all. I don't feel at home in my own home any more. I will keep fighting and... wow thank you for caring enough to tell me what I need to hear. I turned a review into a cry for help counseling session. It really is good therapy to read too tho ...just saying. This chapter like all of them is brilliant. Stay sweet Mirage and keep being you and please keep writing.
Author's Response:
There is a bit of good news now (in recent days); I hope that has lessened some of the anxieties. Regarding the "awful potus": his awfulness isn't nullified simply because someone else is more overtly abominable and imbecilic. We don't wipe a criminal's record clean and release them from prison simply because a more recent criminal has ambled along and is far more violent. We must remember history. It's tragic to see it repeated this way.
Please keep fighting. Continue. ; Always keep fighting. And know that you're not alone. There are groups. There are still decent people (you have to look closely to find them sometimes) in the world. I'm relieved that you've made the decision to take care of your mental health; I'm proud of you, Chloe.
I agree that reading is good therapy. I hear writing is good therapy, too.
Take care of yourself.
Reviewer: Chloe Signed
[Report This]Date: 22/02/18 08:52 pm
God!!! Jarod isn't GONE is he? Did you like just kill Jarod again? I can't wait to read the rest. Exquisite as always and packed with action and some guy stuff.. which is cool. Thanks for writing and always updating.
Author's Response:
What? I've killed Jarod once. ONCE. (thus far haha) Blame those pistachios. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Christoph.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 21/02/18 11:55 pm
Twice in one week!! YES! I Loved this. But oh, is Jarod going to be ok? Where is MP? ahh Don't kill her!
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 21/02/18 08:26 pm
I was too stoked to log in. Can I get more of this please? So much to love here. Your characterisations are always spot on. The dialouge is brilliant. The writing is solid and good. Nothing seems forced. The story doesn't lag. It's intelligently written. The writing is mature. It's plausible. The reactions are perfect. The descriptive work is fantastic. This isn't fan fic. This is fiction plain and simple and I love it.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Kayla, for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Kayla Anonymous [Report This]Date: 19/11/17 11:53 pm
"What the hell, Jarod"... that's definitely Kyle. Thank you for bringing him back and in a way that is more plausible than the heart donation storyline thing from the tv series because as a nurse I can tell you the heart isn't likely to be any good to anyone if it hasn't been perfused and the only way to do that is to keep the donor body on a respirator. Even with that, some hearts can't be used due to sepsis and other issues. Given what we saw on the show it's impossible that Kyle's heart would have been of any use. AS of now there are new devices that improve this, keeping the heart warm and monitoring the heart's vitals. When I first read your explanation for Kyle still being alive I screamed aloud because you got it right. I've been saying for years that the heart would have been medical waste. I think you probably have some medical training. Anyway the characters are just as I remember them except maybe wiser. You do a job good of developing them and also creating and developing your own original characters. I feel blessed to read you, blessed that this fandom has a Mirage to wow us. Thanks for being you and thanks from all of my heart for writing and sharing your talent with us.
Author's Response:
Thank you, Jameason, for reading and for the lovely review.
Reviewer: Jameason Signed [Report This]Date: 18/11/17 07:28 pm
I conitinue to be impressed Mirage. I hope real life won't keep you away from us so long in the future. You are sorely missed. More, please?
Author's Response:
I'm sorry about that. Sometimes real life will keep me away and it can't be helped. More will be posted soon. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: needlepoint Signed [Report This]Date: 15/11/17 03:39 am
Oh . My... God... Mirage Mirage! I wish I knew a real name to call you by but Mirage is good too. Imma gonna second what Twisted said. I know you don't want us to say negative things about Craig and Steve... and I don't want to piss you off. Twisted is braver than I am so refer back to that review again. You need to be writing the official novels. Until you are I will keep considering your writing the official Pretender story. The clarity you write with and our ability to flesh out the characters...yeah, honey you've gone and outdone the creators. Keep writing please. I totally honesty love your writing style and stories even the more graphic ones. I am worried about Miss Parker... she's not dead is she? Oh god more please?!!
Author's Response:
Please don't speak that way about those men. Please. There are many things I should be doing or need to be doing but what I'm actually doing here is writing fan fic and it's not official and most of the time I revolve my eyes at what I've written and then shrug and publish it anyway. It is what it is. I don't believe I've outdone anyone. I'm not competing with anyone (except myself). I'm glad you're liking this but let's be realistic. Okay? Moving on. Miss Parker probably isn't dead but who knows? Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 12/11/17 08:06 pm
This reads like a murder (and it had better NOT be Miss Parker's murder) mystery. With a huge amount of humor injected (thanks to little Miss Parker tormenting Jarod).
I'm very keen to discover what happens next. I wish you could devote every waking hour to this (and all your fan fictions) but I realize you do have a life. It's enough that you write and update your stories frequently. Thank you for that!I
I remain very appreciative of your talent. I wish you were a Hollywood producer with millions of dollars so you could film an ending to the Pretender seriies. I still feel Craig and Steven should turn over the right to you since you are willing to keep Jarod and company alive!
Author's Response:
Aw thank you, Twisted, for reading and reviewing. You are extremely kind. I appreciate every review.
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/11/17 12:58 am
More please! Oh godd girl you rock. Your writing is amazing!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Missy.
Reviewer: Missy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 10/11/17 11:15 pm
Oh yass! Honey every time I see that you've updated I scream and worry the neighbors and upset my pugs. Little Miss Parker always has had a smart mouth and I so love that she's still in character and still driving Jarod nuts. Ethan's POV of Jarod was really telling...that's when I knew how badly Jarod was handling Parker's abduction. I know he almost struck Rachel in the previous chapter but when his eyes are saying one thing and his mouth is saying something else...ahhh I love your words. Mirage thank you so much for writing and sharing your work. You keep the fandom alive and wow, those characterizations are so spot on! More, please?
Author's Response:
Thank you, Dark One.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 10/11/17 03:48 am
Oh thank YOU! Please don't stop. I mean like ever. Just keep all the stories going you know. Forever. LOVE Your stories.
Author's Response:
Well, I have to stop eventually. Ha. Thanks, Christoph, for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Christoph Signed [Report This]Date: 27/08/17 01:55 am
Am laughing out loud at your author chapter note at the top. HE DOES HAVE IT COMING. And I love Jarod so... jus sayn.
Great work Mirage and I can tell you put effort and thought into it no matter what you say. These characters POP off the screen in much the same way they do when I POP the Pretender dvds into my player and watch them. Superb writing!
So you told me in email that you had something new planned for fall and that won't be long now. Just reminding you. I know you already have 4 or 5 fics in the works at the same time but I want more! I looked at your stories just now and most of them begin between August and November. Hmmmmmm interesting Mirage.
Author's Response:
He DOES have it coming. I'm glad you can read anything I write and laugh. Okay. I wish I had the time to put effort and thought into anything. I did mention a new story (because apparently I don't have enough of them). Strange. There is something about Autumn. And - what do you know: as of a few moments ago it's Sept. 22 (it's official). Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gunner.
Reviewer: Gunner Signed [Report This]Date: 25/08/17 07:17 pm
I absolutely loved this! I really did.:) I can't wait to come back and read more. All the characters feel very spot on. I didn't jump to this story right away because by the summary, I thought it would be a Raines/Kyle centered story with Jarod long since dead and having no parts in it.
Instead I opened paradise. The use of the vocabulary and clear detailing really made this a fantastic read. You captured the characters extremely well, and as soon as Jarod took her from the Centre, I was hooked. This is a new and interesting world you've painted up in here. Keep splashing.
Author's Response:
Hi, Serenaspacey. Thank you for reading and the extremely generous review. You're so kind. Also: I see you've posted a fic (I'm not ignoring) and I look forward to reading and reviewing it when I'm not completely swamped. Welcome to the fandomly.
Reviewer: Serenaspacey Signed [Report This]Date: 25/08/17 01:27 pm
Wow. That went fast and was amazing. You're writing like six stories like a boss and I can't even write one at a time without getting blocked. How do you do it?
And they are all high quality Pretender-calibre stories. Mind. Is. Blown. I need more of this in my life! Thank you for giving us Little Miss Parker in Big Miss Parker's absence. I'll take the snark in any form I can get it. So plausible, so well written and in character like they are my The Pretender dvds. Please please don't stop now Mirage.
Author's Response:
Not like a boss, Jen. It's just fan fic. Mm. I've never been blocked. I'm the opposite. The words spill out of my fingers and all over the page. What a mess! And there's a constant stream of ideas. Tell me how you get blocked? I'd like to know. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jen.
Reviewer: Jen Signed [Report This]Date: 25/08/17 12:45 am
Oh YES! Mirage. This chapter is thrilling, frightening, humorous, enraging, filled with suspence, action, angst, tragedy, and adventure AND heartbreaking and just- god. It's drama at its finest sweetie aww I love it. All in under 2000 words! Wow!
The back and forth between Little Miss Snarker lol and Jarod is perfect. I love it. "Nancy Drew" "Einstien" "Wise Guy" lol. You added just enough of the funny to keep us from losing our minds about missing Parker. Top notch Mirage and all around solid chapter. Thank you for keeping these characters alive (MISS PARKER IS ALIVE AND WILL CONTINUE TO BE RIGHT?). Thank you for staying true to the story.
Author's Response:
Hello, Dark One. Suspence? Mm. Action? Really? I had no idea. I am being punk'd. Yes, Miss Parker is alive (of course). Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 24/08/17 09:41 pm
