It was wonderful journey,thank you! Don't let us wait too long for something new,please!;-)
Author's Response:
Thank you, dimana for accompanying me on the journey. Lady Muse is kicking around some ideas- I might allow her to convince me. We shall see. Thanks again for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: dimana Anonymous [Report This]Date: 28/05/11 12:44 pm
Great job on the fic!! I wish there was more but I 'reckon' that all must end, even the best stories. Yay that you gave them a chance for happiness!
Author's Response:
Thanks, Jade.
Reviewer: Jade Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 26/05/11 08:27 pm
Mirage- I re-read my review and was worried it seemed harsh. Then I re-read 'Reckoning' and realized it was not as abrupt as I had originally thought. I guess I felt it was over to quick [what will I (we) read now?] But it was beautifully written and a great ending to a brilliant story! With appropriate endings for Mr. Parker; Michael Patrick and of course Miss Parker/Jarod. Thanks again for writing! :-)
Author's Response:
Hi, Twisted and thanks. To date, I haven't had a harsh review. To date, haha but I will sorta address both of your reviews.
I know that you specifically mentioned the Michael Patrick interrogation and I obviously didn't go that route. I wanted to touch very briefly on Michael Patrick's fate during the Nicholas-Jarod confrontation, momentarily shift the sole focus to Jarod and his God complex/flirtation with darkness. Did he kill Sammy Tanaka? Did he leave the safe house and brutally coerce Michael Patrick to confess? Those secrets are a time-bomb that could potentially blow things apart.
Mr. Parker's departure may have indeed been anticlimactic. I really didn't want to include him at all but Lady Muse stomped her feet until I agreed--I did so on one condition: Mr. Parker couldn't interact or be "seen" directly by the main characters or the reader. He left this world with the great Mr. Presnell (may he rest in peace) and no one will ever fill those shoes, not even in fan fic. And also, his death wasn't meant to be the focus of the fic, it was meant to be yet another disappointment for Parker and Jarod. They wanted him alive for questioning.
This thing may have very well ended abruptly. Lady Muse doesn't agree or I'd still be writing but no, I wrote until it ended and that's all I can do.
Oh, please, haha. No offense will be taken. Ever. I haven't even written the twipper fic yet. At the moment, I'm looking forward to spending as much time as possible (day and night) in/on the water and doing anything, anything at all, except writing.
What will you read? There are hundreds of fics to read. "I'll be seeing you" by Melanie Anne and "Affliction" by Laura W aka kelsey are both excellent if you want a real hang-onto-the-edge-of-your-seat thrill-ride of a drama. There is so much talent here.
And with that said, Mirage is off to read more fan fic.
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 24/05/11 05:48 am
Well I have tyo say as much as I enjoyed your story the ending was kind of abrupt. I was so looking forward to a reckoning with Michael Patrick. And Mr. Parker's death was anticlimatic to say the least. Still you are a great writer and I will look forward to future works [although no offense but I will skip the twincest one! Lyle and MP? UGH!]. Thanks for writing! [I'm looking forward to the ending of 'Happenstance' as well]
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 24/05/11 02:24 am
Wow - I'm late to the party! :) Stupid real life.
Parker's ordeal just gets more horrible with each chapter; and adds to how impressive she is to have survived such torture. I hope Michael Patrick falls afoul of some very large, and very amorous men in prison.
I like that Parker and Jarod are still edged, even though they're together. Their lives (especially since we last saw them on TV) haven't been easy, and it wouldn't seem reasonable for them to just be all "Whee, we're in love! Puppies, kitties, and rainbows!" She's probably always going to default to suspicion; the fact Jarod and her family have gotten as close as they have is amazing.
I admit, I was a little worried Jarod had crossed the line and revealed some of her secrets, because if he'd convinced himself it was for her benefit, he's capable of most anything. And you know I love it when Parker bests him! Although I think she'd have much rather it been Alex than Mr. Parker. Yikes! You got me! I hadn't thought of him at all...one more layer to shred of MP's psyche!
Glad the fighting couldn't keep them apart and out of bed for long. And although it's very sweet that Jarod can be painstakingly gentle with her (Mr. Cuddler), it was good to see that they don't always have to be. Poor confused Nicholas! Did Janeane over hear that I wonder? Would the FBI look favorably on their agent boinking his protectee? Inquiring minds want to know! :) Keep up the great work!
Author's Response:
Hello and thank you, Jane. Better late to the party than never, haha. Oh yes, Michael Patrick gets his, in a most horrific way and most likely repeatedly but I can't give it away.
Their lives have been difficult so yeah, I think Parker and Jarod would have those intensities- even as couple- under these circumstances and right, it can't always be rainbows and butterflies. Nicely put.
Oh yes, the family. Nick has a really good reason for working with Jarod and not arm wrestling and having the perpetual pissing contest and you will read about that in this last chapter.
A few people were worried that I would allow Jarod to cross that line and get away with it. No. I wouldn't do that.
Haha, no, I imagine the Federal Agencies wouldn't be too thrilled to learn that Jarod was ahem, "boinking" their suspect-turned-victim. Nah, Janeane didn't hear that- not that Janeane would have cared. She would have probably sent them a care package filled with naughty toys, haha.
I find myself snickering every time I read you reviews and I have to wonder why in the world you haven't written anything. Join the fun.
Thanks again.
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 20/05/11 11:21 pm
You are incredible author! Good job! I have read your stories and really BRAVO !
As to this story it is amazing ! The plot and everything about it ! Really great job!!
Author's Response:
Thank you, Tsvetelina. I'm happy you're liking it.
Reviewer: Tsvetelina Anonymous [Report This]Date: 18/05/11 08:50 pm
Love it...even the end notes lol. Your explanations were well done, I liked the way you introduced information and still had the story flowing. I'm curious about the pain in Parker's toes. I enjoyed the family interactions, the closeness is something Parker never experienced and now had. Nice cliff hanger ending of the chapter!! Mr. Parker..... add twilight zone music now. lol. Great job again. Thank you!
Author's Response:
Thank you, nightowl. Those end notes were written specifically for you, haha. Wow! You always wow me with your reviews. You are incredible author and it has been a honor to read your thoughts, what you've enjoyed- or not. I was amazed that you (or anyone) would even read my meager ramblings so again, wow, and the advice you've given me has been extremely helpful, so thank you.
I am looking forward to reading your updates. No rush. Real life can be a pain, I know that.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 16/05/11 04:21 am
Wow! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Thank you, Anna.
Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]Date: 15/05/11 11:42 am
My goodness! You're writing a wonderful fanfic. Methinks you misread my "tone". Don't mistake me for a Beta Reading Nazi. Believe me my knickers aren't in a twist. lol I was just funnin that I'd emasculate Jarod. And I was only wondering if maybe Miss Parker's father could be Wylie Coyotte.
: )
Write on, McDuff!
Author's Response:
Not only did you offend a couple of readers by using the term "Nazi", you also misspelled Wile E. Coyote so rest assured, no one here has/will mistake you for being a beta reader of any kind.
My response (and your reviews) speaks for itself.
Oh, and I received your email. I could only see the code, headers, ip addresses and had to forward your mail to my uni account but I was finally able to read your message (gunslingergirl / preferably /) and if you really want to know what happened, you'll have to actually read the fic (simple concept) but reviewing is unnecessary. Really. I'm not going to respond to you.
Do try to show respect for others in the future and if you simply have to communicate with me, send an email.
Date: 12/05/11 01:44 pm
Mr Parker has been a very naugty boy! Your updates always make my day.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing, g18. Mr. Parker is a naughty one, indeed. Your reviews always make my day. *smiles*
Reviewer: g18 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/05/11 03:44 am
Thank you, thank you!! I was afraid that Jarod shared the details of her torture with her family and betrayed her trust....I was extremely relieved that it was just a misunderstanding on Miss P's part, that he was only breifing them about the possibility that Alex was after them. Even though Jarod is in charge, Parker was dead on right about the mad man and I love you for writing it like that. The power struggles are wonderful, but I'm glad Jarod put his foot down when it concerns the investigation...it shows that he's trying to protect her because he loves her, even if he was wrong about Alex's MO...Jarod isn't perfect lol and you always shows us that. I can't wait for the next update! You are so awesome!!!
Author's Response:
*bows* Thank you, thank you, dark one. If Jarod had divulged that information, Parker would have terminated further contact with him and Lady Muse wouldn't allow that.
Ah, yes, Alex. Indeed, Parker was spot on about the "mad man", and actually, that's what I liked about Alex- he doesn't torture (like our gorgeous devil Lyle) or experiment (like our whacked bible thumper Raines) and he wouldn't recruit someone to squeeze the trigger.
Jarod did put his foot down (this time). He is so afraid of losing her that he may just end up losing her- while attempting to protect her. *evil grin*
Correct. Jarod is far from perfect and I enjoy demonstrating that. The next chapter is in the works.
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 10/05/11 06:12 pm
And I thought I was 'twisted'. Way to leave us hanging! Nice chapter. I like how you're not making things easy for Jarod and Miss Parker. But not too hard at the same time. Can't wait to find out what happens next. I am especially looking forward to the Michael Patrick interrogation.
Author's Response:
Haha, I think several people here are twisted. The next chapter is almost completed and nope, nothing is ever easy, not even for fictional characters.
Reviewer: twisted Anonymous [Report This]Date: 10/05/11 04:21 pm
It started out good with the nightmare recaps. But must Jarod win every argument? I would have had his balls in a sling after the psych exam! Now he's giving details of her torture to her father and brothers? Hell why not just give em to the kid too? Anyway, can't wait to learn more about why Mr Parker is orchestrating the hunt to kill his "daughter".
Author's Response:
Well, I'll be damned. *ahh, deja vu* You are the second newbie reviewer to misread this fic- that's two in as many chapters. Odd.
"Anyway"
Fanfic is trivial- it doesn't warrant getting ye olde big gal knickers in a twist and especially when YOU failed to comprehend the events that have transpired in this fic:
Jarod hasn't divulged the details of Parker's imprisonment.
Compromise- it means Jarod hasn't won every argument. ("Unfettered Access"?).
Parker made the decision to undergo the psych eval which means Franken-rat's testicles are safe for now. For now, haha.
If you are as displeased as the tone of your review implies, perhaps you should click elsewhere, scroll up and click on "Titles" or "Authors" - it's quite a very simple concept- and find something more agreeable.
Happy writing/reading,
~M
[Report This]Date: 10/05/11 09:06 am
I love this story. You are an incredible writer with great idea that keep me guessing and I never know where the story is going to go. But serouisy did you have to end it with such a cliff hanger you are killing me here. That whole situaticion could go very badly and Parker could freak out and it sounds like Nicks not very happy either. And top off all that Mr. Parker is behind the whole thing. Poor Miss Parker this is going to probably be a very ugly converstaion and she is probably going to to do something stupid like try and confront mr. parker herself. Anyway pretty please post the next update soon.
Author's Response:
Haha, there's no telling what will happen next.
Reviewer: Megan Anonymous [Report This]Date: 10/05/11 04:54 am
LMAO...I was very mad that it was Jarod with Olivia but then I saw it was not. Mirage don't do that to me again lol. I almost stopped reading I was so mad. I am so happy they are closer now and working together.
Author's Response: Haha, I couldn't help myself. One day, I am going to write a story where either Parker or Jarod walk in on the other while having sex with someone else. Not today, however, haha. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
[Report This]Date: 05/05/11 09:21 pm
What a wonderful chapter. You do you great keeping the drama going. The characters are spot on. I really like your original characters too. They are terrific Mirage! I like that you brought back some of the people Jarod helped in the past too.
Reviewer: jules Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/05/11 09:07 pm
This chapter is either Parker coming clean or perhaps another decptive move on her behalf... hmmmm hard to tell isn't it?
Time will tell! All of it was well written with a lot of great dialogue and emotion. Oh please quite with the typos! lol I truly have not noticed any, if they are there you writing over-shadowed them.
Good job!
Author's Response:
Hello, nightowl. It is hard to tell what's going on in Parker's mind (and Jarod's) at the moment and it certainly could go either way. It could be a little of both - Parker coming clean and at the same time, being somewhat deceptive/evasive.
As you stated, time will tell, of course. I hope. *smiles*
There are indeed typos (and you think that you are typo Queen, haha?!) but you are very awesome for not noticing them! I'll try to shut up about the typos, though. Just for you.
Thank you for reading and reviewing, nightowl.
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/04/11 04:14 am
lol I sniggered throughout much of this chapter because they are so cute together but can be dangerous and sexy together too. I was also floored by that kiss and by wonderboy's reaction. While you have given it some humour it is still very suspenseful in that murder crime drama way. My favorite part was when Parker hurt that Wednesday girl. I want to read more about what happened to Parker soon. It's great!
Reviewer: jules Anonymous [Report This]Date: 29/04/11 08:51 am
Gosh, a lot has happened since I last been on here to review. I like how careful Jarod is with her like he's scared and has good reason to be. You did well with him interrogating her..his no more Mr. Nice Guy attitude is good to see. This reminds me so much of TP 2001 and could have been the storyline. It's great! I promise to read and review the rest when I have time.
Author's Response: A lot has happened, Jules. I'm glad you found the humor in the fic and that you're enjoying the ride so far. Oh yes, Wednesday AKA Janeane- I have no idea where Lady Muse gets these characters from but I had to show that Parker is still, well, Parker. Thanks for the R&R!
[Report This]Date: 29/04/11 08:43 am
What can I say Mirage, you're an amazing author. I love this story and love how eloquently you write even the sex scenes and how you don't over coat the story with sugar eg you kept Miss Parker in character, that means ice lots of it because there is a reason she's called the ice queen and it means she'll even be frosty with Jarod at times so good on you for keeping her in character. And with Jarod you make him darker, tough, grown up and sensitive to her at the same time without making it cheesy. If you want, you could make him darker. I'm ok with that. or will I have to read forces of nature again? lol...My only fear is that you might marry them off and give them a happy ever after but I would let that tiny slip up slide for you if you don't put her in white lol as they have had several years to deal with everything and Jarod isn't reliant on Sydney for a mummy anymore. That's another vote for not wanting this story to end, it's just so fantastic and very intelligently written. As several others have said before, you always manage to think up something original, add your unique twists to The Pretender storyline and bring the characters to life with your abilities so that although it's written word, when I read your stories, I feel like I'm watching an episode, only your stories are much better. I hate repeating myself and repeating others but everything has been said except for this....hurry up and write the next chapter Mirage you tease.. lol.
Author's Response:
Thanks, DarkAngel. Lady Muse wants to make Jarod even darker- she loves to her have way with that man- I can't allow that to happen in this fic.
*shocked* Marry them off? Me? Fear not, I would never- oh wait! I know, I know, I married them off ONCE in one of the FON endings, but that was a very unhappy ending! Rest assured, if I marry them off, they will live miserably ever after, haha. Seriously, the wedding thing has been done, well done, and I would just screw it up if I attempted to write a wedding scene.
Say what? Tease? Au contraire, dark one. Mirage is not a tease. No. Mirage has a real life that can't be neglected. *winks*
Reviewer: TheDarkAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 28/04/11 05:27 am
Absolutley enjoyable. You did everything right in this chapter. The give and take between Jarod and Miss Parker. The way they finally consumated their relationship. I enjoyed the warm emotions as well as the anxious moments. Each chapter - seems to me-- to get better and better.
Now I see I have another chapter, I have no idea how I get so far behind in the stories when I never missed any!
Thank YOU, you know I'm going to miss this story when you finish it.
Author's Response: Thank you, nightowl. I'm so glad you approve thus far. Fingers crossed that I don't mess it up. Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 27/04/11 01:49 am
They're settling quite nicely (for Parker and Jarod at least) into being a couple. And who'd expect less than stellar sex from two obsessive, hyper-intelligent Pretenders? I love that you brought up the tatto, too. It's not like he'd overlook it after all. Beaten/whipped with hot barbed metal - poor Parker! It amuses me how Jarod (very characteristically smug, IMO) thinks Parker should be worn out physically and sleeping off their exhausting sexual exploits, but he of course is up bright and early. :)
I wonder if Jarod realizes that Parker really out-Pretendered him, at least until the horrifying conclusion. Granted, he did manage to capture her eventually, but it was pretty well established that he eluded the Centre on several occasions only with Parker's direct or indirect help. At the very least, she was as good at it as he was.
The picture of Jarod's work attire as his 'costume' is very apt, and also his thoughts about his former fantasies about her (cuffs, guns, etc)... We see a lot of those in Pretender-fic, very understandably, and it's sweet how Jarod pushes those aside to focus on their actual relationship.
And I'm dying to know how the rest of the family is reacting! :) At the very least Nick and Oliva should be noticing their condom supply shrinking rapidly... LOL. Always looking forward to the next chapter...
Author's Response:
Thank you, Jane. Right, the tat- Nemesis (Goddess of Retribution) is also the title of this thing because it applies in many ways: Nemesis (enemy) also applies to the bad guys they killed/encountered and are hunting and also P & J were each other's Nemesis (sort of but not really). I wanted to bring the tat back into focus, have a scene where Jarod has a look and approves and see also that Miss Parker is human, is somewhat self conscious.
Lyle did what he does best, he tortured and tormented, but that's his MO- I'm just glad that part is over. Yep, Jarod is smug, just like he can be, downright cocky, and I try to balance him with breathtaking sweetness. He doesn't make it easy.
And yes, Parker out-pretended a Pretender! That was my favorite part of this fic: Jarod popping meds, Jarod cursing under his breath, threatening the lives of co-workers, Jarod frustrated that she evaded him. Ha! I loved that part. It was so fun for me.
Right, the costume and fantasies, I don't where my mind gets this stuff, but I should probably get a drug test for the muse.
The family's reaction is coming up in the next chapter, I think. Oh yes, the dwindling condom supply. Nick and Olivia should be very afraid, haha.
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 27/04/11 01:37 am
I definetly don't want it to end! Although, all good things must. Actually I think your next sex scene between Jarod and Miss Parker should involve handcuffs, her 9 mm and her stilettos. Since you had to tease us with it. I haven't been able to stop picturing it. That would be WAY hot!
Author's Response: Haha, twisted. I don't know about that. We shall see.
Date: 25/04/11 02:17 am
This gets better and better. Please keep it on!!!
Author's Response: Thank you, pretenderoxx. I will hopefully finish, can't guarantee anything.
[Report This]Date: 24/04/11 10:56 pm
Wonderful chapter and thank you for entertaining us with this fantastic story!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing, dimana. I hope you continue to be entertained.
Date: 24/04/11 07:52 pm
