Hi I just got done reading your story it was very very good.

4 is great too. Parker is so kick@ss and tough..and she has to be now. This twist in the chase is so fresh of a plot and you do write it so well Mirage. The characters have evolved but are still the same only better somehow as the other reviewer said this could be the third movie!

Your chapters were longer when you wrote this..=) that's a good thing! I have this downloaded and I read it all the last three days and made some notes I will be sharing. I will have to It's soooo wonderful to see Jarod put through the same ordeal as Miss Parker had to go through when she chased him. Lots of cleverness here. It was so nice to see Parker deliever a baby and I could fee the tension in Jarod. Oh Mirage.. I love the way you write.

I just reread the whole thing and I once again enjoyed it! I got very frustrated with Jarod at times, but I think that'a part of the charme of your stories! At first I thought she might have had a child with this Patrick guy, but the marriage to Lyle was a real twist! Even though you gave us that scene were she had to sign the licsense. Overall great, thank you!

A bit angsty and drawn out in some of the earlier chapters but once the story got going it improved a great deal.  Enjoyed this.

My computer is giving me headaches but lol, this was great. Like that Nick found his sister in much the same way she found him with Olivia. I think it was wise of Jarod to set parameters for Miss P concerning the investigation but like that she went up angrily and they had sex anyway but I agree with Miss P about Alex and it turns out that she was right about his MO. So glad that Michael didn't rape Miss P and it looks like she might end up with Jarod.

How the hell did I miss the update? Well Mirage what can I say that hasn't already been said? The way she was lying there trying not to cry was so sad..I could see that in my mind as I read and I could imagine her actually doing that. Dark Jarod became sweeter but still dark-ish and very deceptive so I am pleased that he didn't get tototally soft, lol. So I've watched too many MTW movies, lol, whatever but he's better when he's darker. I'm pleased that he killed Tanaka and made Michael the patsy. Great ending too that he'd answer to anything she calls him after all the times he corrected her in story to not call him Spence or Agent but Jarod, lol. I love what you did there. Not many stories can keep up the pace and intrigue throughout but yours did in every chapter. Sad that it's over but Devil's Advocate is shaping up to be dark so I have that, lol. Keep sharing! waves.

had to read this one twice wow Mirage! "Torn between desire and duty, Jarod once again stood on a line that once crossed would be forever crossed" and then some epic sex, my friend! DOn't you want to change your mind about coauthoring a fic? First, I like how Sydney was with Parker, gentle and so Sydneyish, second, the Jarod - Parker fight, you like them figthing, and third the way she swallowed and nearly choked on her pride and Jarod's warning and he was right in front of her! Very good.

Paroxyms? Had to look that one up lol. You do well moving the story along, something I, as a writer, have difficulty doing and shut up, your characters are fine. I know you say you struggle with them but it doesn't show in your writing. The real struggle is the hooking up of Jarod and Parker...it doesn't happen soon enough for me but after years of hurting each other, I guess it wouldn't be easy if I were to think realisticly about it. Nice of you to point out how Jarod used Catherine to advance his arguments with Parker so true. I like what Jarod told her about love being unconditional and not contigent and her thank you was not syrupy at all.

Janeane is a trip with her weird sexual lifestyle, lol, funny phone conversation too. It was a nice comedy relief where needed and before the darkness that came during Jarod's watching of some horrible treatment that Parker survived. Very vivid detail, amazing writing. So Parker is aware of her feelings for Jarod and of Jarod's feelings for her so that's a good sign but will they ever stop bickering?

Good flashback sidebars and very Parkerish barbs...still looking forward to seeing the two of these people get together.

Great!

Great work. But DID HAVE TO END!! All good things do they say...Don't you just hate it when a good story ends! You did an absolutely wonderful job with this, the tapestry and all the threads were to say the least - very colorful, imaginative,  suspenseful. Your dialogue was inventive yet remained in character for each. I was glued to each word and loved each chapter.

I think the difference some may note as abrupt ending is in the ending you did tie up the threads but you didn't take 3 chapters to do it and you could have gone that route. There was dialogue mostly between Jarod and MP not between all the characters continuosly through the chapter. You tied up the threads without a definite ending... but most of the shippers (I was naive enough to think shippers meant we had an awful lot of export business people on the list. naive or is it stupid??) will plot that ending with romance.

I can't tell you enough how much I enjoyed your story. And please take a bow... you earned it. Big Time.

I am soooo looking forward to your next romance with J/mp. And I do hope to see more.

Thank you