Ooh Mirage, I love this! I neglected housework to read all nine chapters. Amazing work here, love all the little details and your writing style. It's brilliant. The story reads so smooth and fast, oh I can't wait for the next update. Please update soon. Love it!!
Author's Response: Hi Jennifer and thanks. The update is already spinning around in my head and I'll hopefully put something on paper in a week or two.
[Report This]Date: 05/08/10 10:42 pm
Another intriguing chapter, I hope you could manage to give us some more/the sooner the better/! I wish you great summer!:-)
Author's Response: Hi dimana and thank you so much. I apologize for the delay and I promise, I will try to speed the updates a bit. I hope you have a great summer too! Thanks.
Date: 04/08/10 04:23 pm
Loving this mystery thriller. Please update this and FON soon.
Author's Response: Hi tpfan and thanks. I will update this one soon and I know, I know, I know, its been a while since I last updated Forces of Nature but I promise you, I haven't forgotten about it. (Though sometimes, I wish I could ;) ) Another week, maybe two and I will hopefully have an update.
[Report This]Date: 19/07/10 10:30 pm
Awesomeness :)
Can I have some more please :D
Author's Response: You most certainly can Karen. I can't believe I didn't see this earlier, I'm a idiot. (you guys know that already.) The update is in the works, editing at the moment, size reduction, etc. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Reviewer: Karen Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/06/10 12:46 am
Wonderful new chapter! The story is progressing beautifully, and I disagree with other review, I believe that her trust is in order. Let's think back to when Jarod was out of the Center for some thing like four years and he was distrustful enough to break into her house and take out the firing pin. She did save his life, i think she wants to trust him, it's an amazing plot and so well written, nice descriptive work, good detail and so much emotion. Is your story, you've never let me down yet. I also vote that you could have him tie her up, would be okay to do that just don't make him as dark as those few chapter in Forses of nature and what tipos or typos? There is no mistake.
Author's Response:
Thanks James. Let's keep in mind that it's only fiction and it's all for fun (when Mirage can't sleep) and I will be addressing the "trust" issue in coming chapters. Again, I don't know if I should break out the ropes and duct tape, I wouldn't want him to become "Forces of Nature" dark. I will see what I can do. It's me though, so don't get expect much. And yes, there are typos. But how cool are you for not noticing them! ;)
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: James Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 25/05/10 01:47 am
Finally, an update! I'm still intriqued by this this fic, the mystery and suspence and just how well you write the characters. You have a wonderful writing style and such a knack for writing, descriptions but esp. dialog. Does this bed and breakfast exist? If so, please tell me where it is because I would love to go there in body. You have taken me there already in spirit and mind. I look forward to another update, another nice and long one please. I'm curious about many things. Will she ever trust him? Is he really the good guy in this fic? I ask that because you seem to explore the darkness often, fear, the darker emotions between them, it seems you always take things to the darker side. What is the FBI's inolvement? Oh, I could go on. It's such a mysterious thriller and I'm so impatient. Please update this and Forces of Nature too!
Author's Response:
Stunned. To my knowledge, the B & B does not exist. I'm working on the update, might not be a very long one, RL is crazy but I'll see what I can swing.
She will trust him openly eventually. In her own way, she already does trust him to some extent but there are reasons, besides the obvious ones, details I've yet to disclose. I'll unravel the mystery soon.
Yes, Jarod really is one of the good guys this time, hopefully his character will resemble the Jarod you all know and love in some small way at least. I've no intention of this thing going the FON route, but then, I had no intention of FON going the evil-bastard-Jarod route. I'm actually making a conscious effort to keep that man in line this time around.
The answers are coming. Thanks so much!
Reviewer: Miss Ice Queen Anonymous [Report This]Date: 20/05/10 12:41 am
I'm so glad you updated! I'm really enjoying this story, as well as your other.
Like how Parker goes back and forth from calling him Jarod to Agent. It's as if she's trying to decide who he is to her now. Nice detail! I can also understand Jarod's frustration with her lack of trust, even though he knows why, knows her. They just saved each others lives and killed 2-3 people. Does she really think he's just going to turn around and be all FBI Jarod and lock her up?
When he gave her the photo of Catherine, Jarod said it'd been 5 years. I'm not sure what that meant? And I can't tell if he knows the scoop about what's going on, or if that's the journey they'll take together.
And because I have a filthy mind, part of me thought it might not be so bad to have Jarod tie her up on the 4 poster bed. :) They could have a little scar & tattoo show and tell, among whatever other activities might occur to them...
Looking forward to more! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you Jane Q. Doe, I'm glad you're enjoying it and ahh, you noticed her shift between Jarod and Agent, it was a minor detail but I had to add it. She knows that the bad guys have infiltrated the feds and he is an agent, so her distrust and fears, while misplaced, are all valid, just as Jarod's were when she was chasing him. Things will shift in the next chapter, it's coming, I promise.
Five years since she'd seen a photograph of her mother. Her home was destroyed and well, there are other details, some Jarod has prior knowledge of and other details he has yet to discover.
Hmm, my mind does crazy things when I think of her tied to a four poster, things could really derail and this could turn into yet another 'blizzard in nowhere Texas- Jarod gone mad' sort of fic. But who knows, maybe I could arrange a little twist for the like minded, we shall see.
Everyone who wants Jarod to tie Parker up- raise your hands.. :)
Reviewer: Jane Q. Doe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 19/05/10 06:40 am
Nice one! (as usual ;-)) Still very intriguing and exciting to read. Loved the verbal battles between J and MP,especially the ones where he gets into a teasing-dark-humour kinda mood like with the ropes. *chuckles* Do hope though that MP will soon come a bit to her senses,coz although she saved J's life, she's getting a bit irritating with all that hardcore suspicion (yeah,I know she's got huuuge trusting-issues,but still. ;-))
LOVED the small bit about Thomas u brought in (duh!haha). You're right: and yet J and MP always end up together in your stories. Hehe. Too bad the 2 (MP&Thomas) can't be together in this one. *sad sigh*
Keep on the great work!!
Author's Response:
Hi IceAngel, I love the verbal battles too, yeah, I'm naughty with the dark humor but it was fun to write. She does trust him on some level, she wouldn't have saved his life otherwise but she's secretive for a reason and eventually, things will turn around. - ;) I'm working on it.
Had to throw in some Tommy, love him, glad you liked it.
Thanks again!
Reviewer: IceAngel Signed [Report This]Date: 18/05/10 08:16 pm
What? No cliffy? Yes, I'm inconsistent like that. ;P
I loved the iteraction between Parker and Jarod. When I read your description of her, I can't help but imagine a cornered mouse, desperate to flee away from the stick which will eletrocute him. And Jarod siding up with her, believing in her, was great. I sense, however, that youhave been holding back...
How did Parker know the lottery odds? How come she always knows how to bypass the security detail? Why are there FBI agents involved in the hunt and incriminationof Parker?
Blah, I could go on forever with my questions. Ignore me. What I want to knw, truly, is how you will make Parker trust Jarod. It too seriously imminent death for her to run to him and not away. How do you answer that without it being spoiler?
Easy... Please post more soon!!!! :D
Author's Response:
No, no cliffy, but maybe next time. You are correct, I have been holding back, trying to construct this fic on paper as I see it in my mind and there are a few little surprises to come. Parker will trust Jarod, she always caves eventually. I can't give anything away now, but I will post more as soon as I can. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: bloodymary2 Signed
[Report This]Date: 18/05/10 06:43 pm
I'm sorry for my short rewies but i'm your devoted fan so do i have to say more?;-) Great and intrigueing as always!
Author's Response: Hi dimana, oh please, don't apologize. I'm just glad you're still reading, that anyone is reading. And thank you so much, you are always so kind and I'm so undeserving.
Date: 18/05/10 08:21 am
Nicely done. You write with such clarity, weaving the story so well that its like being there in the story and watching the events take place, like an episode, just comes to life. Characters are just as I remember them, dialogu is wonderful and the dance although brief was so nice. I enjoy the give and take, enjoyed Jarod's recapture of a shred of control, but as always in your fics, they are in a constant tug of war for control, just as they are in the show. Please update soon.
Author's Response: Thanks!
[Report This]Date: 14/05/10 02:49 am
Wow. Don't know what else to say. really good and interesting.
looking forward reading the next part :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much MissCatherine! Reviewer: MissCatherine Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 10/05/10 10:14 pm
I love this fic, love the role reversals, they both realize what its like on the other side of the coin. Great job....oh and I love your writing style, characters brilliant as always. Congrats and please please update both stories soon.
Author's Response: Yeah Jules, I wanted them to get a feel for wearing the others' shoes for a while. He gets the frustration of fruitless searching while Parker gets the anxiety, stress and exhaustion of always looking over her shoulder. From day one, I wondered what it would be like if the tables were turned, so yeah, glad it works for ya. Thanks for all the lovely words.
[Report This]Date: 02/05/10 11:31 pm
Hi that was very good can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks so much katescats
[Report This]Date: 29/04/10 07:26 am
This is one of the best pretender fic's I've read. LOVE the role reversal - please please keep going
Author's Response: Wow Karen, thank you for that.. I'm so glad you like it and I will keep going. Thanks so much!
Date: 28/04/10 07:22 am
Terrific! so well done. you leave so much to the imagination to fill in after each chapter, which just leaves the reader more addicted to the story!
Well wriitten, the action mixed with the insight into the charcters and the dialoge. All comes together with me wanting more! There are many threads that, although brightly colored are left swinging dangling in the wind, you keep the reader on their toes throughout the story, never knowing what to expect.
Jarod is getting a bit of a taste of a reveral of fortune! Instead of playing childish tricks on Parker his concer and anger keeps his chase fueled. I wonder if she has a clue as to his feelings... they always seemed to miss or mistake that even though they knew each other so well.
Great Job. I am sooo hooked. No didn't see a typo in sight. I still reign as the queen of typos! ;-p
Author's Response:
Hi nightowl, you will be de-throned as typo queen, I assure you. What? You have no typos in your brilliant fic. (please update soon) Thank you so much for reading and the review. Oh yes, I have to make J-boy pay dearly for his past trangressions. They do always seem to mistake each others' feeligns, will have to rectify that..er, maybe. ;-)
Thanks again!
Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 26/04/10 08:36 pm
I love this chapter. Oh my god, how you could leave it like that? What typos? Love the car chase, all the action, the dance, just a nice hint of dark Jarod there, nothing too unforgivvible...oh god, please update soon.
Author's Response: I had to leave it like that...it's all I had. But more is coming. I'm glad you liked it and no, Jarod isn't going to go all ...uh, insane bastard again BUT he will some moments of...cop behavior I think but it will all be forgivable- I'm sure of it. (I am sure of nothing) Update is coming. Thanks so much MsParker
[Report This]Date: 26/04/10 08:52 am
Typos?! You leave Jarod unconciouss after an explosion, Parker in semi-shock (what will she do now?) and all you can say is typos?! Evil Cliffy, my friend. Pure evil.
God, we need more, more, more, more....
:D
I'll even be polite and say please, okay?
PLEASE?
Author's Response: Yes, all I can say is typos! Thank you so much bloodymary2. More is coming, slowly but surely. Reviewer: bloodymary2 Signed
[Report This]Date: 25/04/10 05:39 pm
Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks Anna, will update as soon as I can.
Date: 24/04/10 01:00 pm
What a place to stop but to leave us like this is your "trade mark"!;) Great update!
Author's Response: Ah, thanks so much dimana. Yeah, had to leave you there but the update is coming. Thanks so much.
Date: 23/04/10 07:59 pm
The chapter ending is soooo suspenseful!
Author's Response: Thank you b18!
[Report This]Date: 23/04/10 05:11 pm
uuuhhh...excitiiiing. Want more pleaaaase. :-) Still reads like a great crime-thriller-book and I do love that! So many questions and twists.
Got a question though:
"Each day she'd spent in that cage and with Lyle had made her harder, another trial she’d survived, another brick in the wall and Jarod knew that she built that wall stronger with each passing day."
-->by "the cage" u mean her imprisonment by the Yakuza,right?! And the days with Lyle were those we still don't know much about and which apparantely happened at the Centre,right?!
Was Parker imprisonned at the Centre BEFORE Jarod infiltrated it with the FBI, or was that afterwards,when Lyle held her kinda hostage up in his office while trying to shoot Jarod?? (or can't u tell,coz then u'll give something away?) See,this is how great ur story is. I actually need to ask questions like that in order to put it all together. Feel like an agent myself,haha. This is so much fun!!!
Oh and was just shouting at my screen "No Parker don't do that!Stay with him!" Great cliff-hanger there. Do hope to see some romance in it as well though. But well,the longer the journey towards that goal, the sweeter the achievement of that goal will taste. ;-)
Oh yeah and enjoyed the slapping-Jarod part and that he actualy needed some time to recover from that hit. *chuckles* Well she IS known for knocking guys out. ;-p
Keep on the great work!!
Author's Response:
Hi IceAngel! Yes, you are correct. "The cage" was the Yakuza's doing. We don't yet know what transpired in the Centre with Lyle before Jarod rode in with the calvarly. And we don't yet know who planted the explosives that destroyed the Centre (killing Agents) druing the raid.
And yes, Parker was imprisoned by Lyle a year (or thereabouts) before Jarod organized the international take-down. It was during the raid that Lyle attempted to kill Jarod/ Lyle and Parker struggled for the weapon.
After the raid on the Centre (and the explosion) she was caputred by the Yakuza and caged.
I apologize that I was not more clear with my writing and believe me, you are not alone, I have to ask myself at times just what it is I'm doing. ;-) If you have any more questions, feel free to ask.
Thank you for reading and the lovely review. I do hope to read more from you soon Ice Angel. :-)
Reviewer: IceAngel Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/04/10 01:26 am
Finally an update, not than I'm complaining as it was worth the wait. I can't wait to read more and don't get me wrong, I love the adventure and how she manages to stay ahead, but I too am hoping for some romance. Keep up the great writing!!!!!
Author's Response:
Hi Lori, RL isn't going all that well atm and I've taken on a heavier workload to boot, so there may be quite a delay between chapters. It can't be helped.
I may add some romance- though be warned, I'm much better with the angsty- at each other's throat- aspect of the Parker/J (non)relationship. Thanks for r & r!
Reviewer: Lori Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/04/10 12:50 am
please update soon! this is great!
Author's Response: Hi Leonie1988, I will update as soon as I possibly can. Thanks so much!
[Report This]Date: 30/03/10 04:10 pm
Well, for all the hard times that Jarod gave Parker, the games he played with her leaving her alone and defeated with her so called family, it is no wonder she has little trust in him now. Good twists and turns. But Jarod is not so easily defeated either, that is why they make such a fun team.
Will she get away from him this time? ah always so many questions left to play with.... great writing to allow us to only guess your intent.
I honestly do enjoy your writing and the way you put your maze together.
Thank you again and please keep it coming!
Author's Response: Hi nightowl. Oh yes, J is a worthy adversary and not an easy guy to defeat. I hope to keep the twists coming and the story at least interesting. I'm glad you enjoy it. It's quite a compliment and especially coming from such an amazing story-teller as yourself. (hint hint, can't wait for an update from you!!) Thank you so much nightowl. Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 27/03/10 02:15 am
