I am so glad you decided to update this fabulous story. Quite a page turner you've got here. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Update soon.
Reviewer: Mirage Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/12/08 02:00 am
you know every time I shave I keep thinking that Parker owes Jarod for the leg shaving, as much as I enjoyed that scene I'd like to see the Parker return the gesture. I'd like to see if you can make that scene as sensuous as the leg shaving one.
The story is very entertaining for so many different aspects that it is like an addiction to me. Keep writing. I know you said the last chapters are the hardest but you must continue!
Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 30/11/08 01:55 am
This was so worth the wait !!!!!! I loved this chapter and finished with a tear in my eye!!! So much emotion !
I really like where you are taking this story - more soon, please!!!!
PS I'm really NOT bothered about the very small number of typo errors - and neither should you!!!!
I'm so, so, pleased you're back with this!!!!
Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 26/11/08 01:33 pm
I'm fairly new to the concept of fanfiction, so let me start by saying that I enjoyed the idea of starting the chapters with a song lyric that is threaded through out the chapter. The lyrics chosen are interesting and some of them are very thought provoking by themselves.
Your chapters seem to grow in length as the story progresses, which I like because you cover a lot of emotions and descriptive information that adds life to your story.
You call yourself the typo queen - which I find funny because you do have a few, but I get so involved in the story I don't notice them as a rule, but because you refer yourself as such I tend to mentally note them, and chuckle.
The story is very interesting in the way you put it together. I always loved the show, so your vision of the characters comes across so familar to me.
Thank you for sharing your ideas and work. I have enjoyed the ride so far and hope you continue to write it. Plan B sounds like another fun ride.
Reviewer: Adamsjoy Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 18/07/08 02:09 am
What a superb chapter. You are certainly keeping us guessing right to the end. I love the fact that you are keeping Miss Parker's character true to form and she is still as "lively" as ever.
Congratulations on a well-written story so far. As always, we are totally greedy for the next one!
Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 14/07/08 08:51 pm
I enjoyed the varied emotions you delivered in the chapter, but Ihave to say the part where Jem and Jarod decided to allow one of the agents to talk to Miss Parker on the beach after their charade was well done.
I would have liked to have seen that on an episode, "ouch that had to hurt". That was truly a Miss Parker moment.Hope the next chapter is on the way.
Reviewer: Tess Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 13/07/08 11:21 pm
I had begun to think you weren't going to finish this epic story. I know you said it was never intended to go beyond 10,000 words--and lately that is just a chapter!
Good plotting, you have several pots boiling at the same time which keeps it interesting. I am surprised that you married them, after remembering a comment that <Jarod doesn't deserve her>-yes, I know that was because of the way he taunted her. However with that being said- I think you handled it just as Parker would have wanted that scene, no big wedding but a small and informal one. I like the description of MP/J's return and all that ensued.
You wrote with enough description and emotion that it was like watching one of the better episodes. And I liked them all---just some better than others.
Your mix of the Pretender world and the AU is interesting. I am never sure where you will go and when I'm fairly sure of direction you surprise me.
I like the way the story fits in with the title, it is about what we need as Humans to exist with ourselves and each other. At least that is what I get out of it. And of course I love that Parker plays such a major role.
I look forward to more --hopefully sooner. I am curious as to Plan B, and the agency guys --yes they do seem to explain the state of the world don't they! Intentional or not.
Keep Writing. More soon??
Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 13/07/08 09:38 pm
This is great! i loved it!
Reviewer: janeway Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/06/08 07:18 am
This was amazing. I like that you took your time and let the story develop. The dynamics between the characters was detailed and interesting.
My only thought is that the wedding itself seemed to be a little rushed. Perhaps you have that worked out in upcoming chapters?
So the adventure begins in the next chapter? Is Berby a straight shooter or a traitor to them? Looking forward to the answer
Author's Response:
Thank you, for some reason this chapter demanded more time and thought, and I just wasn't happy with the end result. I think I was already trying to move ahead with the adventure in my mind so... that's my excuse. The wonderful ladies that read for me are the reason the chapters turn out as well as they do!
Yes, I have planned to do some of the details of the wedding in flash backs. The chapter was already long and I was afraid of it getting out of hand.
and yes again, the adventure begins in the next chapter. Someone is not who or what they appear. ;-)
Thank you so much for being a regular reader and sharing your thoughts on the story! It is appreciated.
Reviewer: mrbig Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 27/05/08 03:05 am
What a great chapter this is ....as always, you continue to weave a wonderful story and I am still clinging to the edge of my seat!
I am so glad this is turning into a great "epic" ....you write so professionally and with great feeling for the characters....what will we do when this story is finished ? Simply look forward to the next one !!!
PLEASE, PLEASE CONTINUE !!! I must know if Col Berby is on the level. Thank you for a wonderful chapter and I am so looking forward to the next one.
You are up there with the best!
Author's Response:
I really don't think I can live up to your very kind review! Thank you! I'm flattered that you think so highly of the story, and again I have to say that the ladies that read and give me pointers are the reason the story turns out as well as it does. I can come up with story plots, but it's a whole other world to get it down into something other people will understand your vision and enjoy it.
As I reread the story AFTER I posted it I found stupid mistakes, like dangling words from a rewrite that I somehow?? didn't catch when rereading again. Your kind encouragement gives me the impetus to try harder and keep going. We are nearing the end. Thank you again.
Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 26/05/08 08:21 pm
Hi Nightowl,
This was a really good chapter, and well worth the wait! I like the way the relationship between Jarod and Parker has developed over the chapters. Your writing is so descriptive, that it really makes me feel as though I am watching a Pretender episode. I hope we won't have to wait too long for the next chapter. I am so anxious to see what is going to happen next! Thanks for a such an intersting and intriguing story.
Twingirl
Author's Response:
Hello Twingirl10,
Thank you for the reviews. Yes there does seem to be a longer time between chapters as the chapters have been growing in length. It seems there is so much ground work to put in before the next chapter. We are nearing the end so if I can hold your attention just a little longer! Thank you for staying with the story.
nightowl
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/05/08 02:39 am
WOW !!!
Fantastic chapter ....what a superb mixture you have brewed up for us. This is turning into a first rate epic masterpiece!!! You just get better and better!!
Please, please keep going ....I am sure we are all on the edge of our seats .......what does Plan B hold for us ?? I am sure it will be every bit as exciting as the previous chapters.
I love the fact that you are not rushing this but taking the time to develop the characters and allowing us to enjoy them. So many writers are in such a hurry to tell the story and we arrive at the end before, we the reader, have had an opportunity to fully comprehend all the facets of the plot.
Congratulations on a superb chapter!!!!!!
Author's Response:
You have to be the sweetest person, I don't think I can ever live up to your kind words. At least I know by your reviews that you are indeed reading the story and following me through the maze.
thank you so much.
Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous [Report This]Date: 28/04/08 08:33 pm
Great job. You have made built this into a story with mulitple diminsions, romance, suspense, action. adventure and now a touch of espionage.
I enjoy your characters --the life you breath into them, they are life like and true to the series. Actually, in some ways better defined than the series.
Can you tell I am enjoying this? Good work.
Author's Response: Thanks Bucky, you are always encouraging, and that is so welcomed. I try to keep your vision of Parker in mind as I write!! ;-) I know that helps! ha ha. Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 28/04/08 04:35 am
Not disappointed at all! Still really like your work and the way you write. You give life to the characters and their feelings and emotions, and it's really original and very well done! Sorry if I didn't let a lot of reviews but I never manage to let one (the security code is always a bit tricky and I end up writting a lot and sending nothing...) But just so you know, that's one of my favourite fanfic still in progress... so don't stop there and carry on with this so wonderful work!!!
As I said, really tricky security code, I'm trying a second time...lol
Author's Response:
Thank you! Sometimes I think I'm over my head in this story and reviews like yours and some of the others keep me going. Thank you for taking the time to read and let me know you are reading.
Yes, sometimes I have to play with the security code more than once too. But your review is worth it to me. Thanks for not giving up on the code or me.
Reviewer: Faith Parker Anonymous [Report This]Date: 27/04/08 02:37 pm
Hello!! I enjoyed reading this chapter. The discovery of the clone being their son was a nice touch. I am liking this version of Donoterase much more that the real one. I hope that you will write more soon. I think you're doing a great job!
Twingirl
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I never thought Donoterase ended well, I just couldn't picture Jarod being the genius that he was staying behind when he had to know the Centre would never allow him to take care of Parker and would throw him into one of their little cells. Jarod always seemed to know the how Lyle and the bunch would react, so that ending always seemed out of character.
I'm not sure I'm doing the idea justice, but I will see the story through to its end. I'm glad some of you feel the same and are kind enough to let me know with your very thoughtful responses. Thank you! they are indeed encouraging.
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 15/04/08 07:23 am
Very well done. For the typo queen, you are doing fairly well. :) I can't wait to read the next chapter *smiles* I love a good Miss Parker/Jarod story. I also like how you explained how Jem is NOT Jarod's clone. That never really settled well with me. I like the idea of him being their son a lot better.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kind review.. as the typo queen I appreciate the compliment! I'm still on the throne, if it hadn't been for the letters "I" and "C" you would have ditched the story!
I rather like Jem as the son, it plays out well and I think a bit more believable than the clone, well for me. I'm glad you agree!! If it weren't for the responses I would still be guessing if anyone is following along or just looking to see if I'm out there swinging on a vine.
Thank you again for taking the time to let me know.
Nightowl
[Report This]Date: 13/04/08 10:29 pm
Thank you for working on such a suspenful and interesting story. This chapter may not have had the comedic moments of the previous chapt. but it continue with the humerous barbs and character interactions.
I think you did a good job with the characters and although, the subjects covered may not have been totally unique the way you handled them was.
good work. looking for more of the suspense and adventure with the humor in the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your thougths on the chapter and the story. I try to keep Parker's wit going, because even in the darkest moments she seemed able to use her sarcastic wit.
The next chapter is proving difficult for me, there are fewer humorous moments but more emotion and hopefully adventure. Even I don't know for sure yet(!) how it will turn out. But hopefully you'll be there to read it and let me know what you think
Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts
Nightowl
Reviewer: and then there was none Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 08/04/08 10:42 am
I love it i love it i love it!!! keep writing more chapters. im still not over the speedo! ha
Author's Response:
The speedo thing will probably be hard to top! but I'll keep looking for opportunities. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. Keep reading we have a few more chapters to go. Although, this was only going to be two or three chapters long period. I guess it grew legs and is off on its own!
Thank you for taking the time to let me know you are reading and so far enjoying it.
Nightowl
Reviewer: dark angel Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/04/08 12:26 am
I came this close to going to be an hour ago, but thought I'd check for a bit of pretender action before shutting down. I'm glad I did, although I was surprised at how long this turned out to be.
Well done. I like the intereactions, the action and suspense. You know how I like my Miss Parker- well done.
I like too that you have relationships evolve slowly not just MP and J but also Jem's with the family.
What cost is this Berby going to want for their refuge? Interesting turn of events. Not only do they have to deal with the Centre but now this spy guy.
Please keep it going.
Author's Response:
See, it's always good to check in here before you close down for the night! you never know what you'll find. ;-)
I'm happy you are enjoying this, and I do look forward to your reviews to make sure you continue to enjoy it.
Hold on tight for the next chapter. I hope you'll enjoy it too, it's proving to be the hardest to write so far.
Thanks Bucky for always commenting. How else would a writer know if the story was enjoyed if no one bothered to review or respond.
nightowl
Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/04/08 06:11 am
Hi! I'm really enjoying your story. I agree with others, the jellyfish part was quite amusing. LOL! I can't wait until you post more. Good job.
Twingirl :)
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/04/08 10:12 pm
Hi! I'm really enjoying your story. I agree with others, the jellyfish part was quite amusing. LOL! I can't wait until you post more. Good job.
Twingirl :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for your thoughts, I will tell you the jellyfish part was the most fun to write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Don't think I can do that one again. But I will look for reasons to add amusing parts to the story.
The only way I know you enjoy a part of the story is if you let me know, so thank you for taking the time to do that.
nightowl
Reviewer: Twingirl10 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 01/04/08 10:12 pm
I just started this fandom and your story was recommended. I found it has a bit of everything from the series, humor, suspense a touch of romance (although I see more than a touch here) and science fiction. Your plot is excellent, it seems you do have a problem with getting it down in writing, but not so much that I can't follow it and understand what or where you are going.
I like the touch of mystery from the message and hope to see something very unique in it's meaning.
Author's Response: wow. not a lot of pressure there. I hope I can improve as I write, and hopefully the next chapter will be unique.... although if you read a lot of fan fiction sometimes you find ideas from ideas. I am trying to pull this off as being unique. Reviewer: shakespeered Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 25/03/08 12:07 pm
I had to laugh with the whole jellyfish sting
very funny, well written and I am looking forward to more
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed the jellyfish scene, it was a lot of fun to write. The next chapter I think will be more serious more emotional. But I'm still working on it so it's hard to tell what I'll end up with.
Thank you so much for staying with it and I'm honored by your review.
Reviewer: Tash Signed [Report This]Date: 25/03/08 07:05 am
great chapter...
the humor, the slow progression of the suspense, the unravelling of the plot we can only especulate so far and the great interactions between MP, Jarod and Jem. A real family in the works, my friend.
I'm really glad to see an update at this point, but I am still hoping for more... soon.
Hail the queen!!!!
Author's Response:
LOL yes. as I reread the chapter AFTER I posted it , you are right the queen still lives! yikes. I read that chapter so often prior to posting I was sure I had it cleaned up.
I'm glad you enjoyed it though, and I truly appreciate the kind thoughts you expressed in your review. Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Reviewer: bloodymary2 Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 24/03/08 03:09 pm
Welcome back Nightowl, we have missed you! Great episode!
I'm not sure where this story is going but that is half the enjoyment - not knowing where we are going to land. I particularly like the way you are developing the relationship between Jarod and Miss Parker - it's not all plain sailing by any means. They are both working hard to undo years of distrust and it is obvious that the relationship is still fragile. I also like the way you have included Jem - standing just on the outside of their circle and observing the inter-play between them. A lovely twist that you have Jem offering advice to Jarod !!
I'm really looking forward to the next episode - make it soon!
Author's Response: I hope to have the next chapter up much sooner than it took for the last one. To see the kind reviews is so nice and humbling when I see all my mistakes. Thank you for taking the time to read and to review. I'm delighted that you are enjoying this. Reviewer: Phoebe Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 22/03/08 02:58 am
