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Title: Chapter 26

I hope she and Jarod have more sex. Love it when it's written well. ;)

Reviewer: Renee Collins Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/02/17 12:10 am
Title: Chapter 26

That Parker stubbornness never reallly vanishes. I like that.

Reviewer: Renee Collins Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/02/17 11:41 pm
Title: Chapter 26

This chapter seemed more rounded out nicely.

Reviewer: Leslie Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/01/17 03:17 am
Title: Chapter 26

You write very well. I have enjoyed this story all along. The characters are what make the series interesting and your characters are making this story interesting.

I only hope Miss Parker doesn't let Sydney off to easy.  Especially since   he neglected his daughter when her health was in question.  I would imagine she would be used to that from a father figure.  

Reviewer: nightowl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/03/08 12:00 pm
Title: Chapter 26

My problem with this chapter is that Sydney, knowing Parker was his daughter totally ignored her and her "injury" leaving her to face the unknown alone. Then he was jealous of the Major's time with her when he didn't want to even check on her. And Parker brings up the affair rather than hiding the fact that he was her father and knew it when he ignored her. He played the role of Mr. Parker. 

He too spent his daughter for the purchase of Jarod. Parker may act tough but he have all seen how betrayls have left her scarred.  I can see that she may want to eventually come to terms with Sydney, they did have a connection through the years. But! the latest of being traded off and uncared for when it was needed has to be addressed.  Parker would never have let Sydney get off that easy. Not for that one.

That would have compounded the wound already inflicted by the illuison of having mr Parker as a father.

 Up to this point I have been totally into the story, this is the only point I think needs readdressed. Of course this is only my point of view and it is your story. Again you have done a terrific job with it - I just see this last chapter a bit different. 

Parker doesn't give any of herself freely. It comes with a price. Trust. How do you a trust a parent that left you, not knowing your condition except you had no memory to take care of another who had a parent willing to take care of him. I can see him going between the two, but he neglected her.

Please keep writing, for all I know you have addressed this in the next chapter. If it weren't for the fact  I'm a huge Parker fan, I'd probably have ignored that one issue. Please forgive me if I come off too harshly!  and do please finish the story. It is only an opinion of a nonwriter. 

 

Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 25/03/08 11:43 am
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