This was well written and engaging, and the emotion - of both Jarod and Charles - was realistic.
The only point I would raise is that Charles chose Jarod's clone's name rather than let the boy choose a name himself, though he might have wanted Charles to choose a name for him as his parent the way Margaret and Charles had chosen Jarod, Kyle and Emily's names.
A nice piece, and I hope Jarod finds his family soon even though this was the end of the piece.
Reviewer: planet p Anonymous [Report This]Date: 12/12/08 10:49 am
Hi
Just read your story it was good.
Reviewer: Katescats Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/06/07 08:38 pm
Very nicely done, you wroite very well and one can almost hear Major Charles' voice and see Jarod crying. Very well done!
Reviewer: RaChell Signed [Report This]Date: 16/05/07 08:15 pm