Ohh sniffers, you made me cry, bad bad you!!!

That scene with Sydney and Jarod was so good. I hate what is happening to Jarod, it is making me feel ill at the unbelievable violation, which far outdoes all the previous ones (and that is really saying something). You have captured the moods and nuances perfectly and I love how torn but determined Parker is.

Can't wait for more. 

Ohh that was very exciting, can't wait to see what happens. I fear for poor Jarod though and have never hated Parker quite as much as I do right now. So glad too that some idiot at the Centre finally figured out that the vents were a security risk!!!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind words.  Can't tell you how glad I am that you've "discovered" this story.  I hope you can get back into it and enjoy the next chapter . . . Well, maybe "enjoy" isn't the right word . . . just read it!

P.S. No being mean to my Manoline. (points to Sarah's review) You *don't* wanna see what my writing would be like without her.

That was sweet, and yay for Jarod, he so totally deserves it.

Ummm, no purple button to press so i assume the pale orange one will have to suffice?




Author's Response:

OK, so I cant tell me colors....

This chapter may be sweet, but dont worry there in no diabetic warning attached to the rest of the story.

Oh that was classic, just pure gold!!!!

Author's Response: *Big Grin*  Gee thanks, Jacci.

I really liked this too. The name caught my attention, so took a look and was very pleasantly surprised. The rythm in the first part was perfectly suited.

It is quite the fresh take on how Jarod got caught and I will most definitely but looking for an update. 

LMAO, that was soo good. I just love how this idyllic picture deteriorates..

Classic 

Wow! This was a great start, beautifully written with lovely descriptions. I could see Jarod on the beach, even imagine the look on his face as he stared up at the Centre. Very evocative. Read like it could have been the next movie (only better). Very interested to see where you go on this.

Author's Response: Hi Jacci!  Thank you very much for such a generous review!  It is much appreciated.  The next movie, huh?  We would be so lucky!!!!  That's the stuff dreams are made of!!  Chapter 6 is coming soon.  Thanks again.

Nicely done. The movie barely had a chance to show the emotional repercussions of this news for Parker. I liked how you compared her to jarod, how they are not really different at all. It was a good insight into what she might be thinking and feeling. The last line is perfect!!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you!!

 I agree, they didn't give enough time to show how Miss Parker would handle the news with Raines as her dad.

When I first wrote it, I knew the title after writing the last line. :) 

Hope to write and post some more!

That was ... wow... was just amazing. Captured perfectly, written beautifully. I assumed it was Jarod at first, and when it was Angelo, gave it a poingnacy and beauty that was very unexpected and welcome. Beautifully written.

Author's Response: Speechless. ;-) This one just came out of nowhere and I had to write it. Thanks so much!

Oh, nice perspective. Never really thought about it like that before.

Author's Response: Thanks, Jacci.

This was really good. The portrayal of Gideon was spot on. The connection between Jarod and Gideon was nicely written and compelling. Not a big fan of crossovers usually, but as they say there is an exception to every rule. Looking forward to where you take this.

Author's Response: Thanks, Jacci! I love "Criminal Minds." This was supposed to be a one-off, but I have ideas for where it could go...

This was awesome Arls, such a great insight into a complex character that sadly rarely gets looked at.