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Real name: Jen

Member Since: 21/11/13

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Huge fan of the old Pretender.




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In Pieces by Mirage
Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 32]
Summary:

In Pieces.

 



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Baby Parker, Broots, Jarod, Miss Parker, Original Character, Other Centre Character, Sydney, The Clone
Classifications: Genres: General
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language, Warning: Violence

Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 22097
Read Count: 18206
[Report This] Published: 27/09/08 Updated: 20/12/08


Title: Chapter 1: The Morning After

ermagherd I can't believe I have never read this. First chapter makes me know I'm in for a hell of a ride.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 2: Empire

Brilliant Mirage. Why do you never talk about this story? Self promote already. I love this. You know how to keep all of the balls in the air and it's so mysterious.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 3: Secrets and Lies

Oh no. But she did do everything Lyle said she did. But damnnn I hate how rough they are being with her. But it's Lyle. Sheesh. Harsh. Excellent writing, characters, descriptions as always.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 4: The Darkness Within

Lyle's sarcastic barbs are hilarious and spot on even if it cruel and evil and so so bad. Nicely played by Jarod. He is a pretender and he nailed it. YOU nailed it m'dear.

I will never stop seeing Jarod drag angry Parker away from kicking the sh!t out of Lyle. Jarod had to physically stop her. Best. Scene. Ever. 

I don't blame her at all.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 5: The Land of the Living

Yes. Jarod should have maybe let Parker kill Lyle. Brilliant writing, storytelling. I love how in character they consistently are when you write them. Ahhhh Mirage.

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Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 6: A Step Forward

ohh the Centre's gone. That is awesome. I like that Jarod wants her to remember things on her own as a way to measure how she's healing. That's so in character for Jarod. I love that Jarod interupted her pity party and went into the bathroom. It's good to see take the initiative sometimes you know?

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 7: Two Steps Back

Parker's all bad ass regardless of what happened. YES! So I'm binge reading all things Mirage tonight if you didn't read my other reviews so I hope you don't get too upset when you see all of these reviews. But you deserve them. This story is totally amazing.

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Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 8: Ticket to Ride

So... I didn't that one coming woman. Jarod's real father. But that does make sense the more I think about it. Wow. Ahhh that last line. I love how she jokes about the PTA and minivans, caving to a life she never really wanted but can't resist because she loves that little boy. She has a big heart. I love this.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
Title: Chapter 9: Home

Yayayay!! I'm happy dancing. SO look at you go with a happy ending and ... no sex but I didn't even miss the sex until I read your notes at the finale there about slamming on the brakes. You didn't even describe the kiss that happened after they waited for the interruption that didn't come thank GOD! Seriously that Ocee sending Jarod in and then not letting him kiss her.I like the way you played that out.

So you called yourself a nonwriter. Girl please get real. You are an author .You are my FAVORITE author. I got you above Stephen King on my favorite author's list. You're in the top five with Jane Austen, Mary Shelley, Margaret Atwood and Charlotte Bronte. So stop talking down yourself because you're insulting me because I love your writing. I'd like a sequel to this. It's amazing. It's one of your best pieces. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
In My Life by Mirage
Rated: G starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 29]
Summary:

A chance meeting.



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: General
Warnings: None

Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2601
Read Count: 2347
[Report This] Published: 21/10/08 Updated: 21/10/08


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm sobbing. I guess I've been emotional for a few weeks and this busted the dam and now I'm crying. I can HEAR Jarod's/Michael's voice and Parker's/Parker's voice. How the heck do you do that? I'm so envious.

 

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/03/20
Summary:

Nothing is more hideous than human nature.



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Angelo, Broots, Ethan, Jarod, Lyle, Miss Parker, Mr Raines, Original Character, Sam, Sydney
Classifications: Genres: General
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language, Warning: Sexual Content, Warning: Violence

Series: None
Chapters: 40 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 94856
Read Count: 96426
[Report This] Published: 08/11/08 Updated: 27/09/10


Title: Chapter 40: Perdition

I can't think! I'm shocked. I'm terrified. I'm weirded out. OMG! This is an amazing feat of yours Mirage! The entire time you had the evidence there for us to see and we chose to ignore it Mirage! He started drugging her in Portugal from the beginning. He was scared she'd jump from the hospital roof maybe because her unhealthy habits could make her act erractily. Side effects! Jarod is really crazy protective about family and I think he would kill her before she took his child from him. Again classic Jarod during the take down scene only he's taking down MP and he's drugged and crazy...it's classic though because he tells her exactly what he will do to her and is frank with her about what will happen. He has everything planned out like on a pretend. That scene was so grahpic. I could see this entire story. The beginning. All of it. Her under water looking up in his face, J tackling her in the yard. The puppy. I love the names you give everyone and the pets names. Even the animals have the best names! Well Mirage what a ride. A scray one. Plausible and terrible. Beautiful. Jarod could snap and go dark and You give us that punch ending... "nature can be a real bitch" lol. Amazing. I like all 3 endings to this for different reasons. I'm glad I don't have to choose just 1. Thanks for sharing this and not deleting it like you threatened to in the email respsonses! lol. I love this fic. It's a favorite now.



Author's Response:

You can't imagine my perturbation when I received numerous emails alerting me to reviews for this monstrosity (of all the fics in all the fandoms in all the interwebs). Ah, Jen. I feel as if I owe you, Craig, PretenderSteve (as well as the entire fanmily) an apology (if only I could take fanfic that seriously). The choose-your-own-ending route was the only route I could traverse given the rather passionate opinions of the fanmily. There are those who believe that Jarod is competely sweet and innocent (his halo nearly blinds me at times) and others who believe he is a sociapath (his creators included).  believe Jarod is human. To err is human. Jarod, therefore must err. I'm glad you like this fic. I am still rather tempted to delete it. Thanks for reading and for reviewing, Jen.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 1: Stormfront

OK! I just began to start reading chapter one and I'm really excited. I'm a little scared. So far as I skim over it, the first chapter looks wonderful and nothing bad has happened except a minor accident. I like that MP found Jarod instead of Ethan. I know it gets scary later. It's almost Halloween and I heard that I have to read this because it is epic and it is a story that was begging to be told. I heard that it is a plausible tale. IF Jarod is really a sociopath. He can be anything he wants to be so.....

I was told to beware. I am going to review every chapter. I will let you know how it goes for me. Thanks for writing it. 40 chaps could not be easy writing. lol I'm scared.



Author's Response:

Jen, I completely understand if you've changed your mind. It's not epic, it's not good. It's littered with typos. Thanks for reading just the same. There are plenty of other great fics to read here that are sure to keep you entertained.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 13/10/14
Title: Chapter 2: The Twilight Zone

No I am still reading. I got sidetracked. Oh WOW Mirage that medical stuff is so real the way you write it. Jarod a doctor is something I don't expect from you for some reason. It was great though. You and your muse must been at war kicking each others @ss.

 

"Eating like this will kill you, Jarod." She stated and drank another sip of coffee."Not if the Centre kills me first." He smiled and took a bite.

lol!

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23/01/15
Title: Chapter 39: Irreconcilable Differences? (Alternate Ending Two)

Ooooh! You had me thinking the worst, but...I read authors here who can't write any ending I like and you've written 2 to this story alone. She's going to let Sydney help her and she and Jarod will be separate. You gave us a look see at the old caustic MP... "

"I'm leaving now."

"Of course you are." She said, and observed as Jarod came to an abrupt halt near the doo, and finally mustered the strength to reach for the knob. "You were always good at leaving." She added.

 

That is soooooo MP! He's leaving for her and she would be cruel like that even if he did deserve it....oh Mirage. So much to think about. You are not afraid of the dark. I'm glad you aren't! I'm going to read the last one now...nibbling on my nails again.



Author's Response:

Haha. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, Jen. Stop nibbling on your nails.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 3: The Downward Spiral

Holy hell! Your prose and plotting is second to none. My heart is in my throat. I know something will happen. I don't know what or when. I'm biting my nails thanks to you!

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 4: While You Were Sleeping

Some humour in this. "Play it!" lol. Lyle's concern is...unexpected but I really like it even tho not much of a Lyle fan. Ooho Mirage the flashback scene with MPs training was wonderful! The seamless transitions are brilliant! I'm nervous about what is coming and can't stop speed reading!!!

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 5: A Little Trust

Lyle's abuse...that is a stroke of genius and is a huge missing piece that was never explored enough on the show. Thank you for tackling the difficult topics and for not always having things so sappy perfect in the relationships and character's lives. I like that you show us how Broots, Sydney and Ethan worked together to find MP! Just like on the show. You really know the characters are comfortable with you craft....even if you hate your craft. :)

Reviewer: Jen Signed
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 6: Sleeping With The Enemy ?

Ooooh! Whoa! Wow! WOW! Uhhhh Mirage! I thought Lyle and  the others would get there in time to stop MP from sexing with Jarod. MPs mind would be reeling from thoughts of sex with Jarod. It's a big deal for so many reasons! The best fics all show how demure she can be when the armor falls off...just like when she got wet and cold in Scotland! :) You totally nailed these scenes.

 

"Bitter tears filled his eyes."I want you to trust me," He cried, "but I can't make you do it. You're not thinking clearly-""A knife in your neck, Jarod. How the hell is that for clarity?" Ooh thats our MP!

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 7: Hot Water

Ohhhh! my brain isn't ready to type...I know he doesn't kill her because I read the last line of the last 3 different endings to make sure first....lol. I cheated! He does every thing BUT kill her. It can all happen. Jarod could snap any day just like that. Jarod is so cunning inn't he? Very original Mirage. Everyone wants Jarod and MP together and happy with a bunch of babies named some version of the actors or characters VS the Centre. I like that you take the time and post the different stories. MP isn't crazy is she?

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 8: What Lies Beneath

UHhhhhhhhh. M..........mirage. No coherent thought. She's pregnant?!!! Broots with the comedy relief "Uh Jarod is just one man" lol. Classy! Just when I thought I was freaking out you give me Broots to make it all better! This too was excellent even it did scare the sh!!t out of me.... "there has to be a life given in return for the gift given.""You mean a life taken for the gift given?""Well, it doesn't sound as bad the way I said it" GOD!

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 9: Into The Night

Ohhhh thank God she is free...but how will she ever be free if she is pregnant with his baby? I saw no typos...you were right about the pyscychos though lol. I like that Jarod is evil and I never thought I would. You do it well with really subtle tweaking. I love your prose and writing voice. Give me your muse. I will take her or him.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 10: Clean Slate

I love the Centre's weirdos. The barber. OH my GOd! They have the nuttiest people in the Centre. This will be a classic MP line for me forever... "you requested more Vicodin."

MP: "There's a titanium plate in my arm, Sydney: it hurts."

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 11: Freedom?

Jarod's denial is just so complete here and I think that is totally realistic given the past. He won't believe that he is really free lol. Chopin....wow! The call from Jarod was...so intense. I could hear and see what MP was hearing and feel her turmoil. That ending tho...holy hell Mirage! Jarod thought he had her but then Parker just reversed the car lol. More comedy relief with Sam and the 'not just merely' "hey where are you goinh?!!" lol I'm glad I didn't read this before it was complete. I would be crazy now!

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 12: Running In Circles

This is once again classic Jarod The Pretender! He goes off in the face of his guilt to find the answers himself and the dialouge was perfect. A stroke of genius for MP to play games with him and lead him on a wild goose hunt. This is my new favorite story. One of my favorites. I will add it now to my favorites list!

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 13: The Hardest Word

I don't blame Brots for being hesitant to help Jarod! This is a really emotional chapter...they all are and this made me cry because he seems so sorry but I know why she doesn't want to see J. The backstory to this with Mr Parker going to give her to J in a deal is genius. This fic isn't really that dark. I watched Iowa and that one with Reese Witherspoon tho. I'm jaded to rapist Jarod.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15