Penname: Jen [Contact]

Real name: Jen

Member Since: 21/11/13

Membership status: Member

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Huge fan of the old Pretender.




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Summary:

Nothing is more hideous than human nature.



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Angelo, Broots, Ethan, Jarod, Lyle, Miss Parker, Mr Raines, Original Character, Sam, Sydney
Classifications: Genres: General
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language, Warning: Sexual Content, Warning: Violence

Series: None
Chapters: 40 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 95314
Read Count: 96093
[Report This] Published: 08/11/08 Updated: 27/09/10


Title: Chapter 40: Perdition

I can't think! I'm shocked. I'm terrified. I'm weirded out. OMG! This is an amazing feat of yours Mirage! The entire time you had the evidence there for us to see and we chose to ignore it Mirage! He started drugging her in Portugal from the beginning. He was scared she'd jump from the hospital roof maybe because her unhealthy habits could make her act erractily. Side effects! Jarod is really crazy protective about family and I think he would kill her before she took his child from him. Again classic Jarod during the take down scene only he's taking down MP and he's drugged and crazy...it's classic though because he tells her exactly what he will do to her and is frank with her about what will happen. He has everything planned out like on a pretend. That scene was so grahpic. I could see this entire story. The beginning. All of it. Her under water looking up in his face, J tackling her in the yard. The puppy. I love the names you give everyone and the pets names. Even the animals have the best names! Well Mirage what a ride. A scray one. Plausible and terrible. Beautiful. Jarod could snap and go dark and You give us that punch ending... "nature can be a real bitch" lol. Amazing. I like all 3 endings to this for different reasons. I'm glad I don't have to choose just 1. Thanks for sharing this and not deleting it like you threatened to in the email respsonses! lol. I love this fic. It's a favorite now.



Author's Response:

You can't imagine my perturbation when I received numerous emails alerting me to reviews for this monstrosity (of all the fics in all the fandoms in all the interwebs). Ah, Jen. I feel as if I owe you, Craig, PretenderSteve (as well as the entire fanmily) an apology (if only I could take fanfic that seriously). The choose-your-own-ending route was the only route I could traverse given the rather passionate opinions of the fanmily. There are those who believe that Jarod is competely sweet and innocent (his halo nearly blinds me at times) and others who believe he is a sociapath (his creators included).  believe Jarod is human. To err is human. Jarod, therefore must err. I'm glad you like this fic. I am still rather tempted to delete it. Thanks for reading and for reviewing, Jen.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 1: Stormfront

OK! I just began to start reading chapter one and I'm really excited. I'm a little scared. So far as I skim over it, the first chapter looks wonderful and nothing bad has happened except a minor accident. I like that MP found Jarod instead of Ethan. I know it gets scary later. It's almost Halloween and I heard that I have to read this because it is epic and it is a story that was begging to be told. I heard that it is a plausible tale. IF Jarod is really a sociopath. He can be anything he wants to be so.....

I was told to beware. I am going to review every chapter. I will let you know how it goes for me. Thanks for writing it. 40 chaps could not be easy writing. lol I'm scared.



Author's Response:

Jen, I completely understand if you've changed your mind. It's not epic, it's not good. It's littered with typos. Thanks for reading just the same. There are plenty of other great fics to read here that are sure to keep you entertained.

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Date: 13/10/14
Title: Chapter 2: The Twilight Zone

No I am still reading. I got sidetracked. Oh WOW Mirage that medical stuff is so real the way you write it. Jarod a doctor is something I don't expect from you for some reason. It was great though. You and your muse must been at war kicking each others @ss.

 

"Eating like this will kill you, Jarod." She stated and drank another sip of coffee."Not if the Centre kills me first." He smiled and took a bite.

lol!

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Date: 23/01/15
Title: Chapter 39: Irreconcilable Differences? (Alternate Ending Two)

Ooooh! You had me thinking the worst, but...I read authors here who can't write any ending I like and you've written 2 to this story alone. She's going to let Sydney help her and she and Jarod will be separate. You gave us a look see at the old caustic MP... "

"I'm leaving now."

"Of course you are." She said, and observed as Jarod came to an abrupt halt near the doo, and finally mustered the strength to reach for the knob. "You were always good at leaving." She added.

 

That is soooooo MP! He's leaving for her and she would be cruel like that even if he did deserve it....oh Mirage. So much to think about. You are not afraid of the dark. I'm glad you aren't! I'm going to read the last one now...nibbling on my nails again.



Author's Response:

Haha. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, Jen. Stop nibbling on your nails.

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 3: The Downward Spiral

Holy hell! Your prose and plotting is second to none. My heart is in my throat. I know something will happen. I don't know what or when. I'm biting my nails thanks to you!

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 4: While You Were Sleeping

Some humour in this. "Play it!" lol. Lyle's concern is...unexpected but I really like it even tho not much of a Lyle fan. Ooho Mirage the flashback scene with MPs training was wonderful! The seamless transitions are brilliant! I'm nervous about what is coming and can't stop speed reading!!!

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 5: A Little Trust

Lyle's abuse...that is a stroke of genius and is a huge missing piece that was never explored enough on the show. Thank you for tackling the difficult topics and for not always having things so sappy perfect in the relationships and character's lives. I like that you show us how Broots, Sydney and Ethan worked together to find MP! Just like on the show. You really know the characters are comfortable with you craft....even if you hate your craft. :)

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 6: Sleeping With The Enemy ?

Ooooh! Whoa! Wow! WOW! Uhhhh Mirage! I thought Lyle and  the others would get there in time to stop MP from sexing with Jarod. MPs mind would be reeling from thoughts of sex with Jarod. It's a big deal for so many reasons! The best fics all show how demure she can be when the armor falls off...just like when she got wet and cold in Scotland! :) You totally nailed these scenes.

 

"Bitter tears filled his eyes."I want you to trust me," He cried, "but I can't make you do it. You're not thinking clearly-""A knife in your neck, Jarod. How the hell is that for clarity?" Ooh thats our MP!

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 7: Hot Water

Ohhhh! my brain isn't ready to type...I know he doesn't kill her because I read the last line of the last 3 different endings to make sure first....lol. I cheated! He does every thing BUT kill her. It can all happen. Jarod could snap any day just like that. Jarod is so cunning inn't he? Very original Mirage. Everyone wants Jarod and MP together and happy with a bunch of babies named some version of the actors or characters VS the Centre. I like that you take the time and post the different stories. MP isn't crazy is she?

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 8: What Lies Beneath

UHhhhhhhhh. M..........mirage. No coherent thought. She's pregnant?!!! Broots with the comedy relief "Uh Jarod is just one man" lol. Classy! Just when I thought I was freaking out you give me Broots to make it all better! This too was excellent even it did scare the sh!!t out of me.... "there has to be a life given in return for the gift given.""You mean a life taken for the gift given?""Well, it doesn't sound as bad the way I said it" GOD!

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 9: Into The Night

Ohhhh thank God she is free...but how will she ever be free if she is pregnant with his baby? I saw no typos...you were right about the pyscychos though lol. I like that Jarod is evil and I never thought I would. You do it well with really subtle tweaking. I love your prose and writing voice. Give me your muse. I will take her or him.

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 10: Clean Slate

I love the Centre's weirdos. The barber. OH my GOd! They have the nuttiest people in the Centre. This will be a classic MP line for me forever... "you requested more Vicodin."

MP: "There's a titanium plate in my arm, Sydney: it hurts."

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Date: 30/06/15
Title: Chapter 11: Freedom?

Jarod's denial is just so complete here and I think that is totally realistic given the past. He won't believe that he is really free lol. Chopin....wow! The call from Jarod was...so intense. I could hear and see what MP was hearing and feel her turmoil. That ending tho...holy hell Mirage! Jarod thought he had her but then Parker just reversed the car lol. More comedy relief with Sam and the 'not just merely' "hey where are you goinh?!!" lol I'm glad I didn't read this before it was complete. I would be crazy now!

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 12: Running In Circles

This is once again classic Jarod The Pretender! He goes off in the face of his guilt to find the answers himself and the dialouge was perfect. A stroke of genius for MP to play games with him and lead him on a wild goose hunt. This is my new favorite story. One of my favorites. I will add it now to my favorites list!

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 13: The Hardest Word

I don't blame Brots for being hesitant to help Jarod! This is a really emotional chapter...they all are and this made me cry because he seems so sorry but I know why she doesn't want to see J. The backstory to this with Mr Parker going to give her to J in a deal is genius. This fic isn't really that dark. I watched Iowa and that one with Reese Witherspoon tho. I'm jaded to rapist Jarod.

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 14: In The Balance

Oooh! That was intense! MP was so sure that J was settting her up to fall again. I was afraid of the same thing! I love the MP and Lyle alliance. It's weird that I am Jarod and Miss Parker shipper...I don't know how to feel now. I like both men. MP is right about the pretending and I'm glad that she didn't accept J's help. I'm also glad that MP didn't lie to J and say she was ok in the end of this. She isn't ok. I hope Lyle will live?

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 15: Letting Go

"I know my way home, Jarod" Best  line in the world! She is MP and no matter what she is going to show a tough exterior even if she is losing her mind inside! I cried over this and the previous chapter. You killed Lyle. I know how much you love him so your muse must have reallly pissed you off.

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 16: The Long Road Ahead

Seamless. Flawless. I'm forever impressed with your genius prose, plotting and dialouge. I'm printing all of your stories as I type this so if the stupid computer croaks again I will have you! I asked on twitter how some of the other fans who had printed your fics had binded them. I will have my own Mirage edition notebook right next to my copy of Rebirth!!!

Sydney: "oh, I'm sure the two of you will find something to argue about" lol

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 17: Revelations

"are we clear?"

"Transparent."

Classic JMP banter.!

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 18: A Fire In The Dark

OOOOH! Wow. Wow wow wow! HOT. Your sex scenes are the hottest. Brilliant flashbacks too Mirage. I love that Jarod doesn't give up on her. :) I am a hopeless shipper.

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 19: Give And Take

SMOKIN'! I nearly crashed my computer trying to print your stories and read them here....there aren't many or any authors...except you...that I'd do that for...just saying.

 

"She glared up at him. Glared.

"You don't mean it." He challenged. And he hoped to hell she didn't.

Ohhhhhhhhhhh Mirage this is perfect!

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 20: The Best Laid Plans

Soooo I'm shcoked by J's acts by MP's pretenses and I'm not shocked because even tho I am a shipper they were never together and on the isle...him grabbing her hand didn't mean anything. He didn't profess his love. There was no reason for anyone to think the two would ever be anything more than so-so friends...but only when Daddy wasn't looking. I think it's been highlighted many times that the two wouldn't be so healhty together. They would hurt each other. I'll never believe they could really stick it out.  You show that again. How they keep hurting each other. You keep it real. I'm down with that.

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 21: Inside out. Upside down.

Another really intense chapter. Miss Parker was brought inside to out by Sydney and Jarod was knocked upside down by Sydney. Sydney knows MP and Jarod so well!  MP was trying to keep cool and I felt for her BUT it was Jarod's visit with Sydney that made me angry and brought tears to my eyes Mirage. I'm still weeping!

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 22: Pretending

This was a short chapter! My insides are still twisting from reading those last words of Jarod. He's got her tamped down pretty well eh like an animal that has pounced on a little rabbit and all the rabbit can do is squirm. I feel her feelings. I think she would be ashame for anyone to know about her and Jarod. You stay true to these characters you wear like a second skin.

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Date: 01/07/15
Title: Chapter 23: Fear

Another short chapter but very excellent!

These words ....I love this chapter

"Pretend?" Jarod supplied, and then observed her stunned expression, observed- - as if from a great distance- - as she rose, strode briskly, purposely towards the door.Jarod gaped at her retreating figure, gave chase, called from the front steps, “Don’t run away from me, Parker. Please.”She’d have quite a run ahead of her if she did- and that’s precisely why he had chosen the house.He observed with a hopeful heart as she slowed to a stop."This morning," he said, "you were adamant about my pretending and you were right. You were right. I'm going to be me," he said, and then said her name, "and I'd like very much if you- if you would just be you."He heard the huff of frustraion, observed as she toseed her head back, and gazed up at the sky. And then whirled around to face him."You don't know what you're asking! You look at me and see either my mother or," here her face twisted into despair, her brows knitted, "the little girl," she laughed mirthlessly, disparagingly in arch mockery, "who introduced you to cracker jacks.”Jarod. He was the child lying on his back, she opined, gazing up at the clouds, squinting at the shapes, pointing out bunnies and dragons; he saw something in Parker that simply was not there."

 

Jarod can be skewed.

Reviewer: Jen Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15