Penname: d_el1 [Contact]

Real name: Denae

Member Since: 03/05/13

Membership status: Member

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Summary:

Retribution goes awry when Jarod inadvertently kills a man. (Story in English)



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Broots, Cox, Jarod, Lyle, Miss Parker, Original Character, Other Non-Centre Related Character, Sam, Sydney
Classifications: Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language, Warning: Non Consensual Sexual Content, Warning: Slash, Warning: Violence

Series: None
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 37661
Read Count: 14183
[Report This] Published: 30/06/11 Updated: 08/12/17


Title: Chapter 1: I

I spent the night reading this and had no idea how dark it would be. The first chapter blew my mind! I've always wanted to see Jarod screw up this way and kill someone and I can't think of anyone more deserving than that creep Allan. You spell his name many different ways and you did it too often for it to be a mistake. Do tell Mirage.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17/03/15
Title: Chapter 18: XVIII

Bravo! Mirage you keep up-ping the game here. It's so strange to say that fanfic is far and away much better than the official Pretender novels soooo I have no choice but to say what you write is not fan fic. You are my official author for Pretender fictions. I love you. Please update soon.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25/04/17
Circles of Hell by Mirage
Rated: NC 18 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 282]
Summary:

Twelve years after Carthis, the death of a dear friend reunites predator and prey. *If adultery bothers you, click elsewhere or prepare to be bothered.



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: All the characters
Classifications: Genres: None
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language, Warning: Sexual Content

Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 108765
Read Count: 29546
[Report This] Published: 02/09/11 Updated: 14/06/14


Title: Chapter 25: Purgatory (Part IV: Circle, Unbroken [Part II of II]) AKA Till death do them part

What Twisted said!!! There is nothing else that can be said that hasn't already been said already..you should be a writer, you write eloquently but without being boring. You are a genius!! Never stop writing.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/06/14
A Hero's Heart by Mirage
Rated: PG 13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 298]
Summary:

When Jarod and his clone are presumed dead and further cloning attempts prove futile, Raines is determined to find another way. He finds it in Dry River, Arizona.

 



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: All the characters, Jarod, Miss Parker, Other Non-Centre Related Character, Sydney
Classifications: Genres: Angst, Drama, General
Warnings: None

Series: None
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 69644
Read Count: 143553
[Report This] Published: 29/03/13 Updated: 06/06/19


Title: Chapter 1: The Missing Piece

More please!

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28/01/14
Title: Chapter 1: The Missing Piece

I've read each of your updates twice already. I can't figure out which story I enjoy most so far! It's such an achievement and on top of your completed fics!!! The child abuse part of this was really emotional. You write from inside the story. It's kind of disturbing. I can't imagine what it's like inside your mind to see things so vividly. It's like you have been there and you open the door so we can go too. If you're still willing to give away your muse I will take her to write like that. Thanks for the journey. Please update soon.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing, d_el1. Yes, please, take the Muse.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed
Date: 01/08/14
Title: Chapter 25: The Missing Piece (Part III)

Mirage YOU never disappoint. You're a wordsmith. So eloquent. Rarely do I see quality and quantity exist together at the same time but you've achieved both with your body of work! How do you get these characters so pitch perfectly in character while managing to be succinct and plausible? I can see that you're naturally talented and skilled. You've always been a brilliant story teller and you keep getting better and I keep wanting more. I will always be thankful to you for sharing your talents with us.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much, d_el1.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04/05/19
Summary:

Part IV



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: All the characters
Classifications: Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: Warning: Language

Series: The Return
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed:No
Word count: 42888
Read Count: 6483
[Report This] Published: 19/07/14 Updated: 28/02/16


Title: Chapter 1: Camelot

Thank you for the updating. I don't know how you write multiple stories at once! You are a genius! More, please?!!



Author's Response:

Thank you, d_el1, for reading and reviewing. No, I'm not a genius.

The update is almost finished.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/08/14
Atone by Mirage
Rated: PG starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 29]
Summary:

Full circle- with a twist



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker, Original Character
Classifications: Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: None

Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 324
Read Count: 2739
[Report This] Published: 30/08/14 Updated: 30/08/14


Title: Chapter 1: Compunction

Damn girl! I mean damn! Mirage I never knew that so few words could be so profound. Your writing is succint and powerful. Jarod was truly sorry for his testimony and Miss Parker forgave him by placing her hand on the glass. I always wanted to see them do a glass touch as adults but never even considered that their roles would be reversed and MP would be the prisoner!!! I've read another story on another site where she was in jail because of Jarod but never written this exceptional and never with this original spin or the stunning hands on glass reversal. I LOVE that he placed his other hand on his heart...he didn't feel her in his mind like when they children. This time he felt her in his heart. Oh! I am crying. I am crying. Please continue this story and update your others.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing. Jarod is truly apologetic. I think the Muse wanted to see him do something regretful, go a bit too far. I certainly never dreamed that I'd write MP into prison- this all makes me wonder just whose side the Muse is on.

Oh, great! I feel horrible now. No is suppose to cry. I'll try to update something; however, you have to promise that you won't cry. Ever.

 

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/09/14
Darkness Falling by Mirage
Rated: NC 18 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 496]
Summary:

Jarod is implicated in a spate of homicides. 



Categories: Post IOTH
Characters: All the characters, Original Character
Classifications: Genres: General
Warnings: Warning: Character Death, Warning: Language, Warning: Sexual Content, Warning: Violence

Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 57575
Read Count: 34209
[Report This] Published: 04/03/15 Updated: 01/06/23


Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

I've been reading you all day and I can't express how much I love your writing, how exciting your work is, how it holds my attention and I don't notice the time clicking by while I read you. I can't tell you how much I appreciate your labors here. You rule. I'm forever grateful.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24/07/23
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

When I first read this earlier my heart was thumping because I knew we were getting closer to the MP and Jarod scenes. Hoped we were. Agent Zane is just as I remember her, all ready to kick someone's butt. I loved her then and I love her now. I also love that Heraclitus quote. Nice! Jarod would know that because he knows everything. I thought Sydney would be there in the next scene but not. I'm so glad!!

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

I'll probably re-review this at a less busy time. The wound you gave Jarod is disgusting visually, and will hurt like a SOB but one that isn't fatal. Caliber and trajectory and speed...I don't tell you that it could happen this way. It can. Most authors will have him up and walking but it does seriously hurt and you were wise to let him sleep and---- wow, I see it all the time. Those faces when the gs victim tries to move or get up. It hurts. You said searing pain and that was dead accurate. You had medical training. You know too much to not have had some training, and same with acting. You know too much about gestures and mannerisms, tones and inflections. Fess up Mirage. You are a pretender. This line--- and my gosh, is Jarod mean or what? NO, I know he is in pain and pain magnifies all the bad stuff. Really cold of him "I've often wondered how it is you are able to sleep at night. $2000 dollars huh? Well, I suppose it takes what it takes." WOW!!! That is so mean and totally in character. Remember Carthis? "Once again it's the Centre----" and then that death glare? I thought he might kill her when I watched The Pretender Isle of the Haunted. Scary mean face Jarod. Miss Parker saved his life!! I know!! He was in so much pain. Please post more soon as I am dying to know what happens next. She's got to tell him about Cox. Right? Oh Mirage. Please!

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I reviewed this one, but what the heck. I didn't tell you how I loved Jarod's thoughts and scrutiny. Splendid work. The novels...Mirage. Why not?

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

"The scene continued to play on the reel of memory" Oh ooh! She was so sure it was Bobby and the shock of it being instead Jarod. Any other person would have flipped. Very scifi-ish. The seamless transitions are lovely. There is an ease of reading...I don't know how do it, but I'm glad you do.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Grit and wit. You give us the best of all worlds. I love that I can see and hear the characters. Brilliant.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

MP and Broots have such a complex relationship and you capture it so nicely. Ooh Ooh! "Jarod's gone feral" The mental image you painted teehehe. I love that. Nice and subtle the way Sydney came in to replace Broots, as if the two men secretly protect her and after the way Raines threatened her with beheading after Carthis that fits. Thank you for killing Raines and Lyle. I think Adama's family would wonder why he was killed and The Triumvirate already has reason to doubt their competence. Wonderful twist to the storyline. So canon and yet you've taken The Pretender and made it your own and ours. I couldn't be more thrilled! :)

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Teehehe. Miss Parker has no air conditioner and is en extremis. Brilliant. She is kind of spoiled but we love her anyway. The pencil trick was fascninating. Somehow you become the characters and I'm here still trying to figure you out. I know in the other review I mentioned that you must have medical training, but I remember reading before about some theater work? You've done some acting? You probably know some things about psychology, as do I. Mirage are you a pretender? lol. :) One of my favorite parts of this is the male operative's internal dialog "his par excellence, yclept 'operative'" Brilliant!

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Miss Chop fucking chop'! I love Miss Parker. I love how well you know these characters and how you have developed them so brilliantly. "She lived with a ghost. She lived like a ghost. Death walked with her." I shuddered when I read that. I know you don't like to hear this but you really should be writing the Pretender novels. You haven't contacted the creators? Ever? If I had half your talent, I'd be emailing them with a proposal. I wish you would. I love your writing.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

That's what I love about Jarod. His humanity. Even though Zina is giving him a hard time, he's plotting how to help her. That is Jarod. He knows there is a reason and I'd like to say that I wish you would give us more info about Zina. She' terrific. You write the best original characters I've ever had the pleasure of becoming acquainted with. I still remember Olivia, from Nemesis, with a stupid grin on my face. They are all different, but they are all human and they all seem tangible. I still wonder about a sequel to Nemesis? How about when you finish this and your other works? Ooooh, also I love Jarod's mature flirting "Concern clouded her face. "You look tired."                                                                                                   "Hmm, my, you are awfully sharp," he said with a mischievous grin. "Have you ever considered a career in law enforcement? Perhaps profiling?"

Awesome work. Your writing gets better and better. :)

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Mirage, Mirage, Mirage! I see your writing is in its usual fine form! Top notch! Thank you for killing the "it's just a flesh wound" trope. Through and through ain't all it's cracked up to be and as an er doc, I can tell you now that you hit the nails on all of their heads. I know it's fiction, but come on, some authors don't even try to get the medical aspect halfway correct. You must have some medical training yourself to go the extra mile. Seriously! Who else even tries to write an interesting and plausible plot any more? Only you m'dear. I love how you've sharpened these characters and really snapped them into shape. I like "seeing" my characters when I read and you always give that to me and provide that visual. Someone else said you illustrate with words and that's a perfect description of what you do. You also plot like a boss! ;) Keep going. I will back up and review the chapters I missed. Thanks as always for updating your stories. :) Much love to you!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing, d_el1. Much love to you as well.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/06/15
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Mirage. Simplicity and wit. Eclectic and grit! You are the only author I've read in any fandom to date whose work if of any sustenance and especially in the last few years. Your stories are the only ones in this fandom that are worthy of being a part of the Pretender series and that includes the two published novels Rebirth and Saving Luke. I've been here ages, read every single story here and your genius, and your talent is unparalelled. Mirage, you are the best! I am devastated that you aren't writing the novels with Steve and Craig. I'm honored that you are still here.



Author's Response:

Thank you, d_el1, for reading and the rather generous review. Don't be devastated. I am writing (I refer to it as purging, which is a more accurate term), I'm just not writing the Pretender novels.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17/03/15
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Awesome! #(@@@!! awesome. Keep up the hard work. You do it so well. !

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/06/15
Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

You always yank me back into this fandom it's so funny. I can't escape. I love your writing and I love what you have written here. THey are so perfect. The sex was so nice. The way Jarod struggled to stay in control and take off that edge first and then have sex with her. I love what you did. They just had a bad day.. a really bad coupla days and she was probably still thinking of Lily and so crazy stressed. He would never want to hurt her so... yes. I love it. Beautiful. This was perfect. One thing.. he was in a hotel in chapter 20? That's the only thing I notice that might be a typo. I still love it. It hardly matters at all.  Bravo Mirage.



Author's Response:
It's difficult to sneak anything past a Pretender fan. You're correct about the hotel. It absolutely matters. Was Jarod in the hotel? If he was in a hotel why is he now in the condo? Or is Jarod in the condo at all? There is a "clone" possibly lurking about (I. Might. Be. Evil).
 
The sex almost didn't happen. Oddly, I wasn't going to write out all of the physical stuff. I was going to write, instead, one of those, "lying breathless in the afterglow / sheers dancing in the breeze" scenes to imply they'd had sex, but this is the Pretender fandom and there's no slipping things like that past you ladies and gentlemen- better writers than I have been killed for less (probably) (and just look at what happened to that poor fellow in Misery). Thanks so for much reading and reviewing d_el1.
 

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17/07/18
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ohhh wow. Powerful writing Mirage. Your original characters make a hell of an entrance. I love them already.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29/10/19
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

So ok I love the way this chapter begins with business as usual at the Centre and thn we find out what happens behind the scenes with Broots and Miss Parker hanging out and having dinner. I love the shoutout to Thomas. No shrimp and no Asian foods. Awwww. She loved Thomas so yeah this is perrfect. I also love love love freaking love that Jarod and Broots have devised a little get away plan behind Miss Parker's back should things go the wrong at the Centre. Cox's powerplay, his appearing is a shoutout to Centre technology. They've come a long way. It's awesome. SO much techy stuff. You must do ALOT of research for this. It seems like so much effort and I appreciate it. You keep these characters and this little show alive. Thank you for that.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29/10/19
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

This is what I love about reading you. It's so visual and I can see Jarod and hear him...I can see Michael T. Weiss when you write him and that's who Jarod is for me and like him or don't like him you gotta admit no one else can be Jarod like Michael can and I can tell it's who you're writing about. You got his inflections and voice and body language and boyish charm and mannerisms and... and everything down to a T right down his middle initial girlfriend. I can see every character clear. You transport me INTO the story. I love the story too.  Do you watch The Profiler too? You nail Rachel. I love Jamie Luner and so.. yeah, you nail them all. How the heck do you do that? Whateverz keep doing it.

Reviewer: d_el1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29/10/19