Characters: Broots, Jarod, Miss Parker, Sydney
Classifications: Genres: Comedy, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed:Yes
Word count: 5420
Read Count: 2816
I'm going to be honest: you know these characters very well. Most fics involve an author dragging a character into becoming one of the few stereotypes of people they know, but you have a firm grasp on these chracters emotions and motivations.
Now you just need to touch up your delivery. When you say something is wonderful in the narrative, it makes it sound like the story's being told by a character in it. If you can tighten up your grammar and narrative, I'll be looking forward to your future stories.
Reviewer: Dash Nolan Signed