Wow what an ending! You kept the suspense up right until the last paragraph. Very well executed.

I don't think I have ever read a story more focused on what is usually "fade to black" because it becomes to violent for the series, but you pull it off remarkably well. It isn't blood gushing everywhere that's the focus, it's the emotional trauma, which gives it many more layers than your average action fic.

Every once in a while it can be a little hard to follow what's actually happening, but I think that's mostly due to the fact that you don't rely on the classic clishe's when describing something. You use a much more vibrant and creative language, so you actually have to pay attention to every word, you can't just skim it. So it's really a good thing.

I think you did a great job describing what kind of pain, both emotional and physical, Lyle can inflict if he is truly given free range. And also how hard it is to recover from such deep trauma. You can't just go home and expect everything to be fine, there are consequences to abuse. You pictured that wonderfully both in Jarod and the clone.

Thank you for an amazing thrill ride down the path of psychological thrillers. An epic is complete.

- Sarah

Nice little story. I like how you used so many famous quotes from the series as "Jarod's thoughts" and the lyrics fit really well

Author's Response: Thank you, I just wish I had fitting screencaps or even a video to better illustrate this with. After all, the series was nice and visual :)

Poor fellow, reminds her of two dead guys. I'm just kidding, I love this story. Mostly because I don't know what will happen next. And I wouldn't mind if John turned out to be Jarod *nudge nudge*. If he does and he has amnesia, then why would he falsify his death certificate? And should Parker tell him about the Centre or just let him be blissfully unaware? *waits anxiously for the next chapter*

Aw, so sweet. Please continue.

Oh I am really liking this. Will be very interested to see where you take the whole scrolls-thing

Just on a general note, it's so cool how you start every chappie with a famous scene from The Pretender that fits with the chapter. And you tell them so well too.

I must say, I really like your Lyle (watch out 'Nothing Means Something' :P ) how you manage to tell him so grotesquely genuine.

Yet another great chapter 

Oooh intrigue!

Like how Jarod is semi-confused as to whether or not his memories are real. Makes ofr an interesting twist 

We're gonna find out more about what Parker was told in the Tower meating, right?

Hm...Parker breaking the Centre, sounds good to me

*sits and waits for next chapter* 

Ooooh intrigue *hears the music swell dramatically (August Rush, anyone?)*

Lovelove the scene with the flashbacks and the sweeper-slashing. With a bit of fine tuning it turned out great.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Ooooh Intrigue!

Really think you tied this chapter well together in the end. Some of the lines just hit you hard, in a good way. My fave has to be (in the propper context of course) "and then Lyle found her." Chills every single time.

Then I suppose the biggest question of all is: Is Parker dead or alive? Hmmm. Guess we'll all just have to wait for the next chapter 

I love the chapter.

I'm so happy to see that you're writing again. Can't wait to see where you go from here.

- S

Cute story. Seems just like Jarod to leave a virtual notebook after that kind of a pretend.

I think this piece provides great insight into what must have been running through Jarod's mind when everything unraveled in the final moments of Donoterase. On top of that it's a great read, you manage to pack a lot of excitement into just a few words.

Five stars easy