Interesting...

Just kidding. Yay! You finally posted it!

You did great, love the little NC17 muse. And Jarod and Miss Parker's lack of parental love is also a hoot.

So, who wants to take the next chapter? *looks around excitedly*

Author's Response: Thank you!  Thank you!  Yes I decided I had better post it before Cathy sent Argyle to picket my house. (evil smile)  And thank you for all your beta work, the dreaded yellow marker and comments really made me think!  And yes, this was fun to write.  (big grin)

Really great piece T.

Very fascinating consept. I'll be looking forward to seeing where you take this.

Author's Response: Aw thaaaanks. I hope you enjoy it.

Oh verrry good!

So dramatic, so intense.

Really breathtaking. I love your use of symbolism. You have a very vibrant and diverse language that really adds color and suspense.

Great piece. Would love to see what you could do with a longer story, because wow, you nailed this one.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it!  I'm working on a longer one.  Wish me luck!

Oh very good. I like how it starts out very much like an episode. And you really had me thinking Jarod was in the clear when he wandered off after the hostage-situation had been resolved.

I like the fact that your Miss Parker is as ruthless as she is, reminds me of how she was in season 1. But in many ways I think it would be very natural for her to be that way after the way she dismissed Jarod in the limo in IotH.

Overall a very nice beginning, will be looking forward to reading the story as it develops.


Author's Response:

Wow, thanks so much for those kind words. I have big plans for this story, but I'm still working out some of the details and problems. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Also, thanks for offering to beta for me. I've read some of your work, and it's excellent. I'll be in touch!

Aw, very sweet story :)

This is something I can very much see Jarod doing; putting his and Sydney's brother to rest in the same place. And although Kyle would just be in spirit at this point, I still think (like you obviously) that he'd made some kind of memorial grave site for him.

Overal very nice piece. 

Awwww poor little Jarod. Somebody should hug him. Someone hugs him in the next chapter, right? Cause he needs a hug. And not the "pat on the back, not back away from me you crazy little guy"-kind I mean the "bearhug, so tight it cuts of the circulation to your brain and ruins all chances of remembering what made you so sad in the first place"-hug. That's what he needs.

LMAO!

Oh Tina *chocking from laughing so hard* that is the *continues to chocke* worst, and best thing I think I've read in a long time. Ranks right up there with Cold Dick.

At least now we know what kind of sick and twisted things go on inside the mind of 'Dr Billy' *continues to laugh*

What a great idea! Like the result too.

And I can just see Jarod doing it too. Though she'd have a looot of guns by the end of january, so hopefully the clues were vague.

Very interesting twist to Donoterase, will be interesting to see where you take this *waits for next chapter to magically appear :P *

Lies are just a part of life at the Centre, they need to be. But that doesn't mean it doesn't affect you. So nice to see someone pointing it out in a story. And I think you portay Miss Parker's POV very well. *steals one of RaChell's chocolates and throws it at your feet*