Author: I write a little bit of everything really. Some angst, some comedy, some neither. Basically what I'm in the mood for. I haven't written all that much lately, but I do have a couple of stories planned...
Beta: I also do a bit of beta work and find it thoroughly enjoyable. So if you need a beta, just give me a poke and I'll see what I can do. (Strong points: characterization, plotting, rewording etc. Weaker points: grammar and other rule bound things. )
Reviewer: I try to review everything I read, because I really do believe communication is what makes this fandom not just shrivel up and die. Feedback is especially important in a fandom as small as ours. Not only is it important to encourage the authors, and one review really makes a lot of difference. As an extra boost for all you budding reviewers here, since it is such a small fandom you have a real chance of influencing the future plot of the story by making suggestions of what you'd like see happen (or if it's an already completed story: The writer's next story).
But it is a two way street. Like a reader has a responsibility to write a review, the author has a responsibility to reply.) If you don't, how is the reviewer supposed to know someone appreciate it, or even read it?
Reader: I will read (and enjoy) pretty much everything. From angst to comedy to all that is in between. I don't care who (or what, this is the Pretender after all...) you ship, if you're a fan of happy endings or not. If it's Pretender, I would probably love to read it, if I haven't already.
And no, I'm never brief .
PretenderJarod is captured and returned to the Centre. Part of the Guess Who/Guess What Challenge
Nooooo! Cliff hanger!
(Despite the evil cliff *scowls*) I really like this story. Nice to for once see some Jarod/Raines interaction. Looking forward to seeing how the chapter openings tie in with the rest.
ooh the Jarod/Raines stuff is fun, and i can't wait to write more!!
thanks for the feedback :D
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Yaaay, update!
Nice to see Jarod isn't dead..yet. Many great Parker comments. Let's hope Syd is on the right track.
dead..yet... lol.. i'll try my best to get the next part out to you guys soon.. thanks as always for the feedback :D
- K
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Oh the plot thikens... Love how Jarod baricated himself in the tech room, and poor lil' Brootsie.
Overal great chapter
(I'm going for the "better late than never"-theory on this one as it seems I forgot to review. Sorry RaChell...)
LMAO, I love it! You got a few one-liners that really gives me a good laugh every time I read it. And I love overall the concept too, what do the poor cast of our beloved fandom do when we’ve left them hanging...sometimes literally.
And just to set people straight, though I'd love to take credit for this, the reason I "refused" to be put up as co-author is because I didn't co-author it. I gave you a nudge in the right direction every now and then, but this is all RaChell's doing.
Anyway, congratulations on a job very well done ^^
I liked it :) Though I'm a sucker for prequels.But the thing I liked the most must be the fact that the one she can't figure out, and in the end the most significant, is nr 42. (Also known as "the answer to the universe", if you've ever read hitchhiker’s guide to the galaxy.)
Author's Response: hahaha.. i didn't even remember that.. random! Maybe it was subconcious, because rreally the Hitchhiker's guide is a stroke of genius. I'm glad you enjoyed :D
Although a little OOC here and there, overal a very sweet story. It has several season one Jarod traits to it, which is logical considering Kyle only just got out. Looking forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Thanks! There's going to be a lot more OC/Kyle stuff...I already have several more chapters made I just have to post later.
Wow, you've been busy since last update. Lots to read. Yay :)
I like how you blend flashbacks into the story, it really helps to paint the picture of how safe and innocent a relationship they had without pages and pages with no action.
Continue please
Yeah I have big sections of the story written so when i fill in the gaps I'll have lots to post on here. Likely a few chapters at a time. I put up about 6 chapters at once but it's been a couple weeks...hopefully I'll get more soon. Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: Manoline SignedI'm liking it so far. You're really good at writing people's internal dialog. And I like that it's not only the pretenders who are the smart ones, Alley got a few tricks up her sleeve as well. Would like to see Jarod and Kyle at least almost find Alley soon...
Reviewer: Manoline SignedOh yay! You wrote more! Puh, I was thinking you'd stopped this story entirely.
Anyway, back on topic now. Kind of nice but tragic at the same time to see Kyle reading books and worrying about the upbringing about a child he might never see. But very much a thing 'the pretender brothers' would do to cope.
Take as much time as you want to post the new chapter(you know a couple of hours, a day..just kidding), I'm here for the long haul ;)
Poor girl. It's not easy being near full term, overly emotional, stressed, and being on the top of a secret organizations hunting list, all at the same time. But she's hanging in there.
And Kyle *shakes head*, he needs to get his wife back...soon. Or who knows what's gonna break the next time.
Overall great chapter, loved the little details here and there, glimpses of normal lives in the middle of everything. Like Jarod pulling pranks like she always does, Allie worrying about spending too much money...nice little touches.
Glad to know people are still reading and being patient with me. Trying to update as soon as possible. Thanks!
Reviewer: Manoline Signed Aw...poor Allie.
I must say I find your Jarod unusually...annoying. Which I am, strangly enough finding to be a verry nice change of paste. It's not like he didn't have it in him in the series, just most fics tend to play more on the "I be brilliant genius, hear me roar!"-parts of his personality.
And poor, poor Kyle. Needs to pair him up with his family soon *nods sharply*. Well, not too soon of course. Need some angst and woe first.
Yet another awsome chapter!
Jarod annoying? :0) I guess I've succeeded then. I wanted to take him down a notch.
Reviewer: Manoline Signed
Oooh, I liked this. But then again, I've always liked the late night phoncalls. A little nostalic, a little sad and very suiting for post IotH.
Keep up the good work RaChell :)
haha! I was wondering when someone would tend to that squeeky wheel.
Reviewer: Manoline SignedGreat moment in the life of Bobby Bowman, and really gets you thinking about how he ended up how he did
Reviewer: Manoline SignedMiss Parker's names, or lack of it, sum up so much of her personality, and so did you. And though I'm not a big fan of assigning her a first name I think you did it well.
Reviewer: Manoline SignedReally nice Jarod and Miss Parker moment.
Reviewer: Manoline SignedOh, poor lil' Brootsie! *laughs* Um...I mean, oh I feel so sorry for him *laughs a little more*.
I really liked this RaChell. Very much in character, which is always a big pluss in my book. Fun to for once read a story where the Jarod/Miss Parker drama takes a back seat to our lovely supporting characters.
Miss Parker's had enough, who'll suffer for it?
I do find it somewhat unbelievable that Raines held the power to the Centre single handedly. But because you suggest it's all a dream it works rather well. I really like how you start the story in present time in Parker's POV, good way to make it come alive, so to speak. And her "walk of death" with the tower sweepers, wordlessly patching things up with some of her greatest enemies, is very interesting and made me think.
So to sum up, I loved it.
Reviewer: Manoline SignedI did not know Steve personally, but because we shared the same love and fascination of a tv series few have even heard of, I consider him a friend.
My thoughts go out to the family in this trying time.
- Sarah
Reviewer: Manoline SignedOh I absolutely love this story!
Rare to read a story that much based inside The Centre, I like it.
I love your original characters. Very interesting to read about Triumvirate employees who are more than evil. And I love how you have many different stories running at the same time, and their all very interesting.
Unusual to hear Lyle worry about hurting someone, but you're handling in beautifully! And I really like your Miss Parker and how she interacts with Lyle. And I love your Sydney, so protective over his young project. And I really love Kainda.
Basically, I just love the whole thing.
You ganging up on me girls? *clicks tongue* Not nice...
You better watch yourself RaChell, or I might just intentionally do something to mess up your Sleepyhead (as apposed to it happening without me meaning to, like it normally does)
And Kat, *scowls*... Behave yourself, or I just might read and review more of your stories. Eventually Muse will get so excited you'll have no time to do anything but write. What do you think about that!
No, we're not ganging up on you. Whatever gave you that impression?
Actually, I wouldn't have a problem with that *grins* Right now musing has stalled with a chapter for HD and I can't go any further until that chap is done. If you wanna provoke my musing, by all means, go ahead!!
Oh verrrry good!
I love your Angelo. You keep him very much in character when he speaks, and you describe him very well.
And even though Sydney might have given you some problems, the end result is outstanding.
And I do love Kainda...
*rf's page until the next chapter magically appears*
Author's Response:
*bows* Thank you for the review! Glad the trouble was worth it. Sydney was a big handful in this chapter, I can only hope it doesn't happen for next chapters when he has to step into the spot-light.
Thanks for another outstanding review, Sarah... pumps my musing right up to tackle the next chapters, hopefully without more setbacks like happened with this one *winks*
Stay tuned, there is plenty more Kainda to come!
*exhales* Was that really necessary? Man, I was hovering a good meter above my seat for the most part. I guess that was what you were going for, but still *shudders*.
But look at Miss Parker, all protective of her man, cute.
Seriously, I love this story and will be waiting for the next chapter
Breathing is recommended, Sarah. *winks*
Dark, dangerous Lyle is just sooooooo much fun to write!
Much more to come! Thanks for another great review! Reviewer: Manoline SignedLyle and Parker are kind of cute together...when he's not trying to kill her that is. Still loving this story, so don't you dare stop now. I hope Syd cracks under pressure soon and start behaving.
Yaaay more HD!!!
You work quickly *grin*
It's interesting to see how natural the whole thing is for Parker, "ok, so by boyfriend tried to kill me...meh, I'll just get the tranq-gun"
Great work as always, and I'll be looking forward to your next one
