Characters: Jarod, Miss Parker, Sydney
Classifications: Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: Warning: Character Death
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Word count: 13599
Read Count: 17076
I read this many years ago and cried the whole time to work. I forgot about reveiwing it back then, and rememebred now. It is so wonderfulyl written, so beautiful and sad. There is no way anyone coudltn cry with this. Congrats on achieving your resutl of tears, though i will never read it again. I cant handle doing it another time you mae me cry that much lolReviewer: Onisius Signed
lmao, i was confused for a while after the **** wondering what was going on, but once you spelt it out for me, i laughed out loud. That is so very funny lol, i love it. who would have guess people could pay to be a beaten up 'pretender' and a frustrated and angry parker? lmao. i love how you changed the whole concept here, it was great.
Author's Response: Thanks! It was a hoot to write and a delight to post.
Short and sweet, its a nice little one for christmas. It is well written and just enough info to know whats going on but not to much to make it to ... dirty. great job!Reviewer: Onisius Signed
Hey, That was great! I really really enjoyed it, had to finish readying it, didnt want to stop lol. i am glad to see you are doing a sequal, and thanks to terra, she told me about the story. yay!
You are wonderful at capturing the mood of the characters. wonderful.
keep it up and give us the sequal
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your feedback! It's great motivation! I'm about 10,000 words in the sequel, so it will be posted very very soon. Thanks again for taking the time to write a review! :D
Wow... just wow... I am dumbstruck, speechless. I cant believe there is a story of this magnitude, of this calibre out in the world. You truly do know how to manipulate the words to trigger certain emotions and memories in your readers.
It is all so simple, yet so complex at the same time. So much is said in a few words, so many images flashing before your eyes as you read the chapters.
‘Just want to see if this works’… its just brilliance. Raines just wanted to see if cloning would work when he created Gemini. Jarod just wanted to see if escaping would work, if he could stay away from the Centre. Catherine just wanted to see if going to Raines for refuge when she had Ethan would work.
‘hey hey’… again, this is just a work of art. It rivals Di Vinci, Michelangelo… The childish playfulness, the innocence, the cheekiness. It reminds me of Jarod when he sneak out to see snow for the first time, then again for his first Christmas. Parkers teasing of poor Broots, the way Lyle drops little lines on Parker with that charming smile.
‘testing as admin’… This is just so fantastic, such imagination and seriousness. Testing as admin screams Mr (Dr) Raines. He is one of the high ptb’s in the Centre, right up there in the food chain. Just like admin is here. He loves to test. Test on Jarod, on Lyle, on Angelo, Timmy, Kyle, Ethan, Catherine… the list goes on. Life is all about tests. Tests of strength, of character, of love, of death. Tests physically, mentally, emotionally. Tests on your body and mind by those who are your keepers. Tests for the keepers by those who were once their projects.
‘It isn't easy.’ This, wow. The creativity and brilliance that comes from this screams genius! Life is never easy, nothing worth fighting for ever is. Everything in everyone’s life is never easy, in every little way.
‘the good news is I FINALLY got the damn centre function to work, yay!!!’ As everything else in your mind blowing story, even your foot notes are amazing. You seem to manage to work in the Centre into everything you write. How you do it just stuns me. I could not imagine The Centre ever working, or functioning at all. Not when you look at some of the people who run it.
I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter. I hope the full stop on the end of chapter four does not spell the End. Please, for all of your loyal readers, continue this soon. Do not put us through the pain Jarod has been through and make us wait.
Author's Response: Your analysis is truly amazing and i am amazed by it, and incredibly appreciatvie. It is giving me the motivation to proceed wrestling with this great epic.
Like Jarod, Centre permeates my thoughts and there is simply no escape for me.
I decieded to start reading some FanFictions again and choose yours since i have heard so many GOOD things about you :D lol. Gald i did, so far i am really enjoying it. Poor Jarod though, he fought so hard and got no where. Alright, off to the next chap
Author's Response: Glad you're reading! Hopefully that first bit was enough to hook you . . .
ohh syd! what an outburst. tisk tisk tisk, better control that temper if you want to work with Jarod i would imagine lol. great work, keep it up and off to read chap three
Yes, Syd does have a tendency to ruffle feathers that way . . .
Glad you're still enjoying it! Can you do me a favor and just shoot me an email once you've read the rest? Or just leave a review for chapter five, whichever comes easier.Reviewer: Onisius Signed
This is a great little story, I haven't read one yet like it so yay you! Keep up the good work, you have done a wonderful jobReviewer: Onisius Signed
good work, this is a great chap Tina! you did a wonderful job
Author's Response: Thanks, Kye, couldn't have done it without your help.
Raines and Willie capture Jarod. Horrible things follow. You'll have to read it to find out more.
lol, thanks for the 'credit', this is a funny little fic and i am glad that you did write it. Poor Raines lol, never thought i would say that.
Author's Response: I don't think I would ever hear anyone pity Raines, but he does (almost) deserve it for this little nightmare of his.
Great little story RaChell, Jarod's poor feet though, who knew running barefoot on the beach could be so nasty lol. I am glad though my little fic inspired you to do this one though, it is a great little fic and i could see it happening. yay you
So glad you liked it! Well you know, it's amazing what reading someone else stories can spawn. (wink, wink) In reality, I should be thanking you for this little gem. I hate to admit it, but this story has sat hidden away on my computer for over two years!
Thanks for your feedback and once again, thank you for inspiring it.
RaChellReviewer: Onisius Signed
yay, great response to the challange!! Poor Gemini, his whole life is mapped out in front of him with that single image of his clone. I like how he doesnt trust Raines is telling him the truth because he is listening to his heart. You have done well, yay youReviewer: Onisius Signed