Characters: Jarod, Lyle, Miss Parker
Classifications: Genres: Angst, Drama, Suspence/Mystery
Warnings: Warning: Language, Warning: Violence
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Word count: 4089
Read Count: 1173
*yelps and cringes* Gruesome and tormenting story as well as ending.Reviewer: Mira Signed
Intense yet held back, much like Jarod is knowing full well what he is doing, selling ones soul never was easy...Reviewer: Mira Signed
Teehee, I've said it once already, but I'll say it again! This guide is priceless and absolutely hilarious :DReviewer: Mira Signed
Oh my gosh, quite the emotional such ups and downs in this one. The last chapter got me in tears. Very flowy and wellwritten.Reviewer: Mira Signed
>"Where did these little midgets come from and why won't they let me snuggle with my wife?" Jarod growled playfully. >Charlie, a familiar grin lighting up his face chirped, "Snuggling with your wife is where the midgets come from, Daddy!" Very bright children, indeed ;)Reviewer: Mira Signed
>"Do you want me to hurt you?" Parker hissed. >A slow grin broke out on Jarod's face. "If I said 'yes', would you still respect me in the morning?" *snickers* But um yeah, another great story from you, a bit sappy-ending of course, but shows that these people if they put their mind to it, are quite dangerous! I really can see Jarod being so overwhelmed becoming a parent, a father. Heck, I'm surprised he'd be able to stand up for a while, much less sleep.Reviewer: Mira Signed
Jarod's dark side somehow made Lyle seem nice... I was close to tears at the point when Jarod reached the roof. Eek, that Inner Sense sure was being put to on heck of a test.Reviewer: Mira Signed
*sniffles* That was sad, but so beautiful at the same time. Wrapping up his life, his emotions and his being. I particularly liked the letter to Parker, how it was she who made him want to escape, and then put in charge of bringing him back.Reviewer: Mira Signed
Brr, the first chapters, I dreaded reading more, almost wanting to close my eyes but I had to keep reading.. and then the following, I was so close to tears. But then, the last chapter was the more hopeful. Jarod sure isn't what he used to be, and one very well understands why that is.Reviewer: Mira Signed
Somehow this story merges into a soft fluffy aura in the end.. a cozy feeling in sharp contrast to how it started out, fragmented and cold. >"No," Charles said thoughtfully. "He doesn't fear them. He seems to be connected to them in some way, as though they share a terrible secret." I think this quote sums up their life together, perfectly. >Jarod knew that his sanity could never withstand being completely alone in the world. Also another truth concerning Jarod.. hinting to what he's been through to cure this loneliness.. Another well written story, please keep up the good work.Reviewer: Mira Signed
*giggles* He walked funny for days, huh? ;) You've got me convinced.. icecream is a GOOD thing... *makes mental note to stay away from the walnut ice-cream*Reviewer: Mira Signed
> "Well, I guess it *would* depend on the identity of the captive. I haven't murdered or defenestrated any members of his immediate family." hehe, so well put of Miss Parker! I'm still a bit surprised they didn't interrogate her more agressively though. Butbut, considering what went through her head when she was interrogated, it's amazing she didn't slip... And ohmy.. predatory Jarod, I've mused if this was what it took for him to literally take charge of things, I guess that was the case ;)Reviewer: Mira Signed
>"I want you to kiss it better, Jarod. I know you can." Teehee, sappy AND sexy, I didn't think that was possible, 'til now ;)Reviewer: Mira Signed
I really liked how she shouts up at the sky, concerning symbolism. And then add to that: >*"Are you sure it was really an accident?"* >*"Unless they're now training an elite team of deer assassins to hurl themselves in my path, then I guess it was."* *giggles* Wow, just wow. One heck of a story this.Reviewer: Mira Signed
That dancing scene, so well done. The situation between Jarod and Miss Parker was utterly electric. >"With all due respect, Mr. Lyle, might I suggest that Zoe may feel a bit more comfortable to speak freely when not in the company of the man who abducted her at gunpoint?" haha, he makes it sound like an oh so casual occurance ;) >"It's not that... it's... You may not realize this, but people don't generally announce to authority figures that they've just spent the morning going at it like crazed monkeys." >"Miss Parker," Jarod began with a gleam in his eye. "I'll have you know that I spent many hours observing monkeys copulating, and not once in all that time did I witness..." LOL! *cackles loudly!* >"But I can't give my parents back the child they lost any more than they can give me back my lost childhood. The best we can do is enjoy who we've become, the people we are now. And the person I am now is at his best when he's with you. That's so sweet, and so good that they're finally coming to terms with their lives and the impact The Centre had on it. I was worried for a while what Zoe warned Miss Parker about would come true.. The Centre just doesn't vanish like that, so phew, that things did calm down. And Lyle being so "nice" in the end. I guess he just wanted to get rid off her though. A great story this :)Reviewer: Mira Signed
I too like the portrayment and implications of Miss Parker and Jarod's love and hate relationship.. it surely isn't a dance or roses.. more like bleeding roses that one slip on from time to time and get cut on the underlying thorns. And also interesting how Sydney and Broots aren't cheery puppetlike bystanders, rather the opposite, their lives depend on Parker and Jarod. And Lyle, wouldn't expect any less from him. Any chance of a continuation, or will you leave it like this to torture us? ;)Reviewer: Mira Signed
Nicely done, mirroring elemental forces and Jarod and Miss Parkers feelings for each other :)Reviewer: Mira Signed
I must concur. So very dark and believeable storyline.. you describe so well how Jarod succumbs to the darkness he's always feared to give in to, and Lyle of all people. Chilling. Please do write a continuation! We're all eager to know just what Jarod will and can remember.. and what Miss Parker's choice will be as well.
Author's Response: Thanks so much Mira. Am goinig to try to get it completed if i can kick my muse awake long enough.
Indeed, will Miss Parker tell Jarod what is going on or not? A mother can't exactly let her child die, especially not someone like Miss Parker, even if it means sending Jarod back to hell? I too hope you'll update this story soon, even though it was a year ago it was first published!Reviewer: Mira Signed
Mmhm, I liked it too. Perhaps a bit too fastpaced at some points though. Any chance for a conclusion to this story?Reviewer: Mira Signed
>"'You forgot these when you left in such a hurry last night."
They didn't get just even, I guess they came to an understanding.. still, better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all, right?
Author's Response: True.
Yikes.. a twist of events, fathers and all that. I almost forgot what happened in chapter 1, having read the rest of it and chapter 2. But Jarod is captured in a better way ;)Reviewer: Mira Signed
The prologue sure made me think the worst, of everyone involved... but things sure aren't what they seem. Surprisingly sweet story in the end, but also sad.. Well balanced :)Reviewer: Mira Signed
*gulps and sniffles* Heartwrenching ending, and laid out so delicately.. considering the note and all as well. And I must agree with John, it does feel like they lost, but they did have each other in the end. Better to have loved and lost, than to not have loved at all?Reviewer: Mira Signed
Surreal sensousness, or sensous surrealism, that is the question.. wonderful merge of these two persons though, and their extremes none the less.Reviewer: Mira Signed