I'm going to give a positive note to this story, despite the fact that its defects surpassed its qualities. Story-wise it works - it has a few inconsistencies, but it works. What I felt to be the bigger problems here were character development and the writing itself.

The character development can be a tricky issue, because more often than not we are influenced by what read, not just by what we see. In other words, developments introduced in fanfiction stories, if we find them to be reasonable, tend to find their way into our minds and later on into our stories. I know this happens to most of us, because it has happen to me as well. There should be no shame in that. What should there be is a clear sense of who and how we want the characters to be. Creative liberties aside, I think they should be as faithful to the originals as possible. With the exception of a parody, every major change (sometimes even minor) change should be justified.

The main problem with the way you portrayed Jarod, Miss Parker and Sydney was their erratic display of emotions. They didn't act that way in the show. They didn't talk like that. Which doesn't mean that they shouldn't act that way in your story. It only means that you should have found a reason to make those actions more believable and not just a whim. We want them to be happy, probably to end up together, but we should want most of all is to write a story where what happens, happens for a reason, not just because.

In terms of writing, it's a matter of practice, mostly. I know that English isn't your native language (mine either), so just keep writing and you'll get better by the story.

Two more things, just to finalize. The first one is the individual addressing of almost review you receive at the beginning of the chapters. Not each chapter, of course, but most of them. FFN allows you to respond directly to your readers and, if that option isn't available, you can always thank everyone at the end.

The second thing is the length of the chapters. I like small chapters - these were smaller. Sometimes less is more, other times it isn't.

In general "To End The Evil" should be rewritten. Despite its failings, it is a nice story and has the potential to be a whole lot better.

A good picture would not do the words in this story justice.

The changing in perpectives is very well exectued, with each character sounding like a lighter/funnier/crazier version of themselves. It doesn't have any highlights because the whole thing is a highlight.

I remember having similar problems with my grandfather whenever he wanted to record something on our VCR. This little piece reads like a well written sketch. The first time I read was a long time ago (probably when it was published) and after all those years it is still very funny.

There is a small town called Almograve, near the Portuguese coast, where I go from time to time. I'm not a beach person - I like to swim, I like the sun, I loathe the chaos. Most of the time, I only go there when the beach is almost deserted because I know I will have the time and the peace of mind to relax. This story, not only was it great in terms of writing and character insight, it invoked those by the shore so perfectly that I could almost feel the salty air in my lungs.

After hitting rock bottom, what reason does one have to get up? Miss Parker finds out what and in doing so she also realizes that she is not as alone as she thought. Small in length, but not on quality.

I always knew this moment would come. Sooner or later, Jarod would have to make a decision regarding his relation with The Centre, particularly with Sydney and Miss Parker. After IOTH and Miss Parker's refusal to acknowledge any turning point, this was one of the possible paths that the story could go.

As for the story itself, it's touching without being sappy. It reminds me of that episode when Jarod suggests to Sydney that someday they could go on a fishing trip together. It's not an happy ending but it's one that offers closure to these two characters. (And a great start for a terrific series!)

'Family Ties' is the third installment in this series regarding the consequences of Jarod's departure and how life continues without him. The previous story ('Picking Up The Pieces') showed us a Miss Parker well past her breaking point and an angry, yet concerned, Sydney, ready to help her get back on track. Broots and Debbie also pitch in to show Miss Parker that they're all in it together.

This is the final piece of the small puzzle inside the larger puzzle that is this series. It serves perfectly both as a closing story and a prequel by establishing the main characters in their new roles and by offering a myriad of plot combinations.

After the scales were balanced, the time came to face some "Truth and Consequences". Like the preceding story, this is another good example of knowing your characters, whether they're the ones created by SLM and CVS and company or by author, and having a story to tell. Cleaning house at The Centre would never be an easy task and MMB shows us how hard and dangerous it could be.
This is a great story (in quality as in quantity) with plenty of action, drama, suspense and romance, but it's not without his fails. Sydney's continued incapacity for one. It's coherent, considering the time-frame, but I'd prefer to see him more mobile. The other thing I didn't enjoy so much was the excess of emotion and crying in some parts. I understand the necessity of those moments, but sometimes I think we were prying too much. Having too much of anything has the risk of turning it unimportant.
Even so, that attention to the emotional aspects of the characters is one of MMB's trademarks. In fact, I dare say she is probably one of the few who can indulge in that kind of thing and still keep her readers interested.

As it is, it's fine, but with a little bit more development it could get even better. You captured Kyle's essence quite well, better than Angelo, and would be interesting to read more.

It took me a while to get into full story-mode. The need of having to introduce a whole "new" universe with all the similarities and differences with the old one took a while, but it was worth the wait. Once the plot was set in motion, it was quite the exciting ride, with plenty of suspenseful twists and intense moments. It nearly felt like riding a rollercoaster - one that stops right before the finish line. Got that, leochick? The person who is typing this is interested in reading the rest of your story. And he, I mean me, is not alone.

The change in perspective was a nice touch and well executed. Normally, whenever such a gimmick is used, most authors have the tendency to 'tell' more about Jarod or any of the other main characters as if the person who is telling the story would know about those things.

Judy's voice is written in a way that conveys all the emotion, the trauma and the fear without falling into dangerous clichés. It is not an easy topic to write about, especially when there are children involved. KB managed to tell a powerful in just a few words. If only some novels were this good.