The incest can be off-putting like you say but it's commonplace here now but I understand why you give people a warning...some people can't handle it. I want to talk about Lyle's art🎨 and your descriptive work and Jarod's reaction to it..all are outstanding! Each dismembered body part had a mouth opened in screams presumably but those screaming body parts in sl27 all surrounded by a sea of blood concealed another horrific portrait and Lyle and Parker being 2 peas in a pod!! Stunning. I'd love to see that actually drawn or digitally rendered??? can you do it or can I ask someone else to do it? Amazing job as always!

After all of the bickering and threats  Jarod tells her to lock the door. That's true love right there. I didn't catch that the first go around. THat's proof he loves her. Oh, Mirage. You always write something special and you write it exceptionally....just spectacular.

That's really Sydney's mum and pop and last name is Mikhail. Verrry good Mirage. So you do know how many psychiatrists it takes to change a lightbulb. You understood the assignment. Brilliantly done.

This dude is scary af. I remember being so creeped out the first time around. Poor Sydney. Poor poor Sydney. I was so worried the first run through. I'm still just as worried the second time through.

Scary darkness.  You write it all so well.

"If I'd only known you wanted to be submissive" When Jarod gets salty he gets extra salty.. and scary. Speaking of scary ... it's scary how in character the characters always are. Gotta love Broots here.

Awesome first chapter. I love your insights into the troubled mind.

Top notch, Mirage.

Oh yeah! You boldly go where no one has before. I love this. Some of us ship incest ships because the of the way series on tv played with incest and planted the thought in us. Your end notes were spot on. Lyle and Jarod should be siblings and should be together. But Jarod being Parker's bio dad is freaking awesome too. You kind of make me sick how well you write and how addictive you are. I need to be writing my own fics instead of reading yours over and over! Rah! Let them be bio father and daughter. Let them stay together. I love it.

You tackled another sensitive topic with class and compassion. I know someone who found out she was dating her bio dad, and it was hard and they moved away and stayed together so I appreciate how you highlighted the love they have for each other while also highlighting the complex emotional rollercoaster parker as a victim who won't accept she's a victim is riding right now. She did say she didn't expect to escape..and I think you worded it that way intentionally to show she's more inclined to accept that truth. They are victims and I love that you don't glorify incest but you show the impact and you also don't condemn incest. Compassionate writing voices are the best. And the religion aspects Jarod is musing on are spot on.

 Religion is crap. It also does seem plausible. You explained it so well that it seems real.Thank you for this.

Even when you try to "snap plausibility's neck" it still seems plausible. With the funding and the support and research it can be done. I don't think it's too offensive, not when the tv series played up incest. And fans like sibling incest, and related by blood is related by blood whether father and daughter or sibling, or cousin. It's all incest. I know you have to warn readers because some readers are so uptight and so easily offended, but I think anyone reading you knows by now that you're unpredictable and write dark content sometimes, and that you're unapologetic about it, and I love that about you. Tachy in the sheets. Yep, that's Jarod all right. This is delightful. You illustrate with words and have command of the characters. I kind of hope they are related this way and defy societal norms. They are victims. Thank you for this and thank you for being honest about religion. I was told I'd go to hell when I was really young and it stuck with me, gave me anxiety, depression and other issues. It was abuse. It still happens. It shouldn't happen. Everything you said needed to be said.

Ooh. Oh wow! Did not see that coming, Mirage. You didn't really strain plausibility or snap its neck (lol your way with words) the way you had Jarod explain everything. Puberty can be accelerated. It makes sense in the Pretender universe because Raines is always tinkering with things he shouldn't, and because Parker was using Centre samples, running tests inside the Centre. The results are only as accurate as the labels on the semen or blood.

It makes sense in this universe and the Pretender universe because governments will do bad shit to protect their interests and the military would jump on that. Jarod would have been like.. 6. But that puberty accelerating thing is legit. Kids today are even entering puberty younger and younger without any of Raines' tinkering. But you know what.. I love it anyway even if it couldn't be plausible. But it's fiction and it's the pretender... anything is possible in this fandom. I've never seen a story where Jarod might be Parker's father (luke, I am..) tho, all the points for originality go to you. I hope he can be her father.

The way you tie religion in with the Centre indoctrination is also incredibly amazing, and the sacrificing.. the way Parker was a little lamb being coerced to be part of a sexuality simulation, the girls mature faster nonsense like Jarod was thinking is all accurate. My mind right now contains so many thoughts. I love that Jarod is all jaw clenched anger because that kiss they shared was part of Parker's indoctrination.She  didn't kiss him because of attraction. She kissed him because she was feelling mature and proud because some stupid adult told her she was more mature. And the way it's used as a weapon.. yeah, that speaks to me.

Shifty G. I googled it and Parker did tell that priest they used to call him shifty G. You nailed all of it.

She did stop asking questions, you and Jarod are right about that too. Jarod had to escape the Centre and begin "tormenting" her until she began asking about her mother's death again. Jarod had to make Parker begin asking questions again. My mind. Blown. And they did both escape injury during that explosion, but everyone was hurt and Gar who wasn't even present lol was killed. I can see an industrial sized dumbwaiter built into the Centre's walls. I love it. You covered all of the bases. Oh, god, please let them really be father and daughter and stay together. If they don't procreate it won't even matter. They didn't know and they're already in love. Please.

Are you coming back? I need more. The Pretender is my favorite tv series and this story is one of the best stories I've ever read. You know I love Jarod. Oh, I love Jarod and Miss Parker. I love Michael. I'm a big fangirl. I need more. Aren't you a fan girl? Why can't you understand this addiction? I've watched these character so much on tv and I've met these actors so I pretty much know them. I need more of the fanfic because they aren't on tv anymo. Please don't stop writing. More.