My android lost service but I'm back now. Plausible post 9-11 world. I love how Jarod expects everyone to trust him like always. You know these characters far too well and I love what you do with them.
Reviewer: Jillian Signed
[Report This]Date: 12/05/20 04:03 am
You really like Broots don't you? You have him so protective of her just like he was on the show oh Mirage so much nostalgia here. It's like watching an episode being there. I love the new upgrades. They are the Centre. There should be high tech instruments. Excellente!
Reviewer: Jillian Signed [Report This]Date: 09/05/20 09:26 pm
Settling in for a nice long read that I KNOW you will finish soon. right? Your original characters are hella fleshed out and real enough to touch.
Author's Response:
"Soon" wasn't soon enough, but here it is. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jillian.
Reviewer: Jillian Signed [Report This]Date: 09/05/20 09:23 pm
Your chapter notes! I'm laughing way too loudly. I appreciate that you are genuinely concerned for readers, the doctor Jarod cringers. So... you're not one of them? But no you wouldn't be because you write about it. Unless this is some therapy of confronting the thing you fear. I told you I was curious about you. You are really a MIRAGE Mirage. Broots toughed it out. I think he would say do it fast and want it over. He loves Debbie and that's he doing this for her is another nod to the tv series. I can tell you love this show. You know it well. Please update when you're feeling better and stay well. Cheers!
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 02:44 am
The adult banter, the suggestiveness. It's all pretender perfect. The transition between bliss and resurfacing distrust is seamless. It's brilliant Mirage.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 02:25 am
Tehehee. Miss Parker eager to compromise? Hehee. Nope. Jarod has no problem there. These adult situations between Jarod and Parker are something that we should have seen on our tvs. I'm grateful to you that I get to see them when I read this.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 02:22 am
Erotic stuff Mirage. Still you inject comedy and lightness in the story coming at the end especially with Jarod saying it's not a bad way to go and he's right. He is so right.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 02:20 am
Broots. You never disappoint with your characterisations. You bring back all the good feelings Mirage. Brilliant transition to Jarod and Miss Parker making out. I love the details that mean so much. This kiss statue in the book Jarod was reading when he was a child and Miss Parker came in the room. I'm glad he's hanging on to the book. I wonder if he can hang on to her. I hope so.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 01:57 am
Thank you for the missing scene, for all of the missing scenes.
The tension is crazy good.
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[Report This]Date: 22/04/20 01:34 am
"eager to please and terrified for their lives."
Hired by Miss Parker definitely.
"You drop the bread in the toaster for chrissakes." Brilliant.
You are brilliant Mirage.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 01:26 am
When the worlds all collide. It was an amazing collision. Brandts thoughts about Parker were what I imagine everyone's is when they meet her. Brandt is right. Jarod will shoulder his way in. He does that all the time.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 01:24 am
Jarod's internal dialogue. I'm going back feeling like shit. lol. You give the right amount of detail without losing sight of the story itself. Yes Jarod is lying. He will never leave alone. Comedy gold within the tragedy.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 01:00 am
Running from himself. Yes. We do that sometimes. Where do you get these ideas? Brandt is a good man. You create these gentle and intelligent characters and you know exactly where to place them and exactly how to move all of the characters. Awe-inspiring.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 12:43 am
Beautiful. Your descriptive work is beautiful, the travel, all of it. You move them so well and transition between scenes flawlessly.
A miscarriage fits the timeline and is so plausible that I'm... I can't even think now Mirage.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 12:29 am
The Jarod-Ethan tension is incredibly intense. I like the power play by Parker no matter what her intentions were. Parker propositioning Jarod for sex was something I would have never expected from you. I can see her doing it but I can't see you writing that because you never seemed to like Jarod.
I've read thousands of stories but I've never seen the characters so in character as they are when you write them. Sydney... you did right by him too. Bravo!
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 22/04/20 12:11 am
You bring these characters to life Mirage. I should have known it was Ethan too but like Jarod was in the dark. You write the different relationship dynamics beautifully. And that final line. I feel so much sympathy for Jarod.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 11:56 pm
Magnificent!
You insert so much realism in for example the dried blood where Parker failed to start a line which is realistic. We wouldn't expect her nursing skills to be perfect when she's not a nurse and we've seen Jarod instructing her in the past with Fenigore at the bank. Your writing blows me away. Bravo.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 11:47 pm
Heraclitus. I thought that was something dirty for a sec. I don't know who that is. All of the philosphy was time stealing from me. I need to revisit. Do you think a long time before you come up with an idea? How does it work? You interest me. I'm intrigued.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 11:34 pm
Awesome. That last line. Punch in the face exit. All pretender.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 11:15 pm
Unraveled. Rachel is unraveling. You transition exceptionally... out of this world and you tie everything together. It's a tight story.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 11:07 pm
In a thousand languages. I was in physical pain when she snapped that pencil. Hey, I'm a guy.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 10:45 pm
Jarod, Jarod. He is a ladie's man. Seeing his own face and knowing he's the one that fixed the video so it would play. All around top notch chapter.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 10:29 pm
New word for me. Yclept. I like. You used it correctly too! Mirage fiction is educational and entertaining.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 10:19 pm
Ok. Question. Are you Zina? From what little I know about you you strike me as a bookworm entreprenuer author with a wild party streak. I don't think of you as a gum chewer. I think you'd probably make eye contact with people though because that's not something someone would admit and point out. I can see you chatting with Jarod or Michael and the actors. You don't seem shy. I read this and something strikes me. I don't know what. You don't seem to like Jarod all that much. I'm curious that's all. I like Zina. Something about her.
Rachel here is fabulous. You write these characters as they are. I marvel.
Reviewer: James Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/20 10:08 pm
